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Marife Holmes # 22700036 23035 Harper Ave. Apt B Port Charlotte, FL 33980 feholmes37@gmail.com Exam # 500507 Dear Marife, I am returning this paper ungraded to give you an opportunity to make revisions and earn a higher score. This essay should focus on one specific type of technology. All technology is too broad a topic, as technology includes light bulbs, cars, kitchen appliances, computers, smartphones, and medical equipment. The essay later seems to focus on communications technology, but even this is too broad. It includes television, phones, internet, social media, etc. Additionally, there are many instances of vague and confusing wording. I have provided instructions to guide you through the revision process. When you have made all necessary changes, please resubmit this essay. Warm regards, Instructor at Penn Foster Here are the organization instructions: I. Introduction A. Grab reader’s attention (Hook) B. Background Information 1. Information Piece 1 2. Information Piece 2 C. Thesis Preview D. Thesis with Preview of Main Points (main arguments) II. Topic Sentence of Body Paragraph 1- First Previewed Main Point (in the writer’s own words) A. Support and Elaboration- Ties back to topic sentence B. Support and Elaboration- Ties back to topic sentence C. Support and Elaboration- Ties back to topic sentence D. Transition to the Next Paragraph III. Topic Sentence of Body Paragraph 2- Second Previewed Main Point (in the writer’s own words) (continue as with Body Paragraph 1) IV. Topic Sentence of Body Paragraph 3- Third Previewed Main Point (in the writer’s own words) Marife Holmes # 22700036 23035 Harper Ave. Apt B Port Charlotte, FL 33980 feholmes37@gmail.com Exam # 500507 (continue as with Body Paragraph 1) V. Consider the Opposition VI. Conclusion A. Rephrase Thesis Preview B. Summarize Main Points C. Rephrase/restate thesis D. Concluding Sentence Implications of Modern Technology on Human Life The one feature of the technological world is about its consistency in dynamics and Commented [BR1]: Nice formatting. development. In drawing a comparison line while evaluating the changes and events taking place in the technology world, it is precisely evident that the results or outcomes are overwhelming. Technological development remains the driving force for the general changes Commented [BR2]: What do you mean by this? in human life and the growth in political, and to a broader perspective, the economic sector (Long, Richard Pg 23). One area of modern technology that is inevitable is its impact on human life. The concept of contemporary technology draws conflicting debates and conclusions from various schools of thought, where one end thinks it is advantageous while the other group clings on its negative contributions. Despite these, it is evident that modern technology is far much beneficial given its participation in various sectors of any economy, Commented [BR3]: This should be “more.” its global compatibility and its sole influence in changing communication from traditional methods by noting the vast post-modern benefits it displays. The modern technology is part and parcel of human life in close to all aspects. The Commented [BR4]: You should be focusing on one kind of technology. All technology is too broad a topic for this essay. global community tends to rely on it so much because of the numerous benefits attached or Commented [BR5]: This paragraph needs a topic sentence that mentions the first reason named in your thesis statement – the role of technology in economy. packaged to it. Research proves that technology is the current backbone of every economic Commented [BR6]: Unnecessary words. development, and its contributions are diverse ranging from communication, manufacturing to socialization among others. The study, however, narrows down to the communication facet based on the perspective of the modern development. The current technology has Commented [BR7]: What study? Marife Holmes # 22700036 23035 Harper Ave. Apt B Port Charlotte, FL 33980 feholmes37@gmail.com Exam # 500507 dramatically improved the communication system by enhancing the growth and emergence of several platforms for the same, and this shift increases the human dependence on technology. Commented [BR8]: The same what? Modern technology triggers communication efficiency where accessing encoded information Commented [BR9]: People have been dependent on technology for a long time – electricity, cars, garage doors, security systems, etc. is more comfortable and faster. As it is well known, information is part and parcel of human Commented [BR10]: What do you mean by this? life, and for any activity to hold there has to be a source of a substantial amount of data passed to the receiving end. The technological advancement has outclassed the ancient approaches rendering their contributions insignificant or at times irrelevant based on speed. It will not be sensible to carry out an activity in an ancient slow manner when there is an alternative that is much better and can yield positive results under similar circumstances and at a cheaper cost. After such a consideration, it is evident that reliance on modern technology is one aspect that cannot be ignored, not by anybody who is sober and wants to attain or deliver quality. Communication and information exchange is one area experiencing tremendous impacts of the modern technology that increases the reliability of people on the new development. It has various implications based on contemporary events, and the first is on the efficiency of exchanging information (Rasmussen, pg 17). Due to the improvement in the Commented [BR11]: Wordiness. Commented [BR12]: What events? technology used in information transfer, people all over the world can communicate in several ways by making phone calls, text messages, emails, and other media. The quality of the communication also counts since the modern means is curbing every likelihood of distortion. Initially, it was challenging to pass information from one source to another because of the distance and at times due to the choice channels or the messenger in some cases changed the message or its intensity. Modern technology has changed this by making it easier to communicate instantly with somebody who is millions of miles away while passing the information directly without having to take it through another Commented [BR13]: What kind of distortion? Marife Holmes # 22700036 23035 Harper Ave. Apt B Port Charlotte, FL 33980 feholmes37@gmail.com Exam # 500507 person who may alter the meaning or engage signals that stand an easy misinterpretation chance. Modern technology is as well more economical in facilitating communication as compared to the old approaches that were used to pass information; with the introduction of modern ways of communication systems where one can declare information to a large group instantly via the social media or any other relevant channels, it has become cheaper. Initially, it was quite difficult to give information to a group or on a platform that would reach a large group instantly; one had to gather the audience to pass a piece of information. The old approach was quite expensive and uneconomical compared to the modern means that will reach to the target audience at the comfort of wherever they are. The fascination nature of human beings always triggers upon exposure to new ideas or products, which is the exact experience with the latest technology and thus making it gain a very high level of reliance. Modern technology has several positive effects that increase the reliance levels from the people adopting the system. Advanced technology has improved the communication system in several ways, among them is attaining a faster and more efficient Commented [BR14]: Comma splice. information transfer, thus attracting more people to use the channel. The communication Commented [BR15]: What channel? channel was initially very tiresome and inefficient as compared to the resulting modern Commented [BR16]: What channel? technology system. When the advanced technology came with the upgrade and better version, Commented [BR17]: Which technology system? the consumers of the services had no choice but to embrace the new improvement. The other benefit that has come due to the reliance on this particular technology is in Commented [BR18]: What advanced technology? Commented [BR19]: Better version of what? Commented [BR20]: What particular technology? the education sector. Communication by definition is primarily the passing of information from one person who is the source, to another that is the receiver with the aim of getting feedback. The concept holds in various educational institutions where there is message delivery to the respective students by the instructor, and then the input comes when the Commented [BR21]: It is not necessary to define communication. Your reader will know what “communication” means. Marife Holmes # 22700036 23035 Harper Ave. Apt B Port Charlotte, FL 33980 feholmes37@gmail.com Exam # 500507 students perform accordingly in their various examinations or assignments. Through technology, the world has quickly become a global community or village where people learn multiple languages or take their courses online at their domestic countries. In the end it has made it possible to qualify for employment in other countries across the world. Modern technology has succeeded in ensuring that the academic information is passed effectively from the instructors to the students through the introduction of the online education approach. It is this system of education that resulted from the modern technology and its implication in communication does not necessarily need the students to converge at one single place to get the information. The instructors can pass across resource materials through media such as email, dashboard or any other tool, and it gets to the students. There is some attraction that has come with the approach, and the people have greatly benefited from Commented [BR22]: What do you mean by this? relying on technology. There are also some elements of entertainment packaging the modern technology that also work pretty well and are quite attractive to various people. In the previous years there were minimal ways for entertainment, for example, if it were a program on the television it would last for a brief time, and if one is busy somewhere, he or she will miss it all. The modern technology has changed this since one can actually save whatever has happened in the system and then watch later when there is time (Newton et al., Pg 23). The internet also makes the process much simpler since one can easily access news that they were was not in a position to follow maybe due to prevailing commitments and responsibilities when the information came. In the same entertainment sector, modern technology has also seen the introduction of new and more advanced equipment, for instance the launch of smart and digital LCD televisions that produce better quality pictures as compared to the initial analogue Commented [BR23]: What is “entertainment packaging”? Commented [BR24]: What previous years? Marife Holmes # 22700036 23035 Harper Ave. Apt B Port Charlotte, FL 33980 feholmes37@gmail.com Exam # 500507 counterparts. Entertainment also fall under communication in that some information has to be Commented [BR25]: Incorrect subject-verb agreement. transferred from the entertainment source, be it music or television, which has to get to the targeted audience to attain the outlined objectives. Commented [BR26]: This is not necessary to mention. There has been some improvement in the health industry as a result of the efficiency in the transfer of information due to the introduction of modern technology in communication. Majority of health centers, which are the hospitals and dispensaries, have Commented [BR27]: This should be “the.” implemented the use of modern equipment in their various operations. Current communication technology has well made it quite easy for the transfer of crucial health information that may be needed urgently to save a life. The achievement has been via modern electronic tools that have all the patients’ report and history while screening the spread of a Commented [BR28]: This word should be plural. disease within the human system with fractions of a second. Again various health facilities have modern tools coordinated with the government bodies to inform of looming health outbreaks, therefore, enhancing the mitigation process. Despite the many benefits and the numerous advantages displayed, there are some claims of negative impacts resulting from relying on modern technology. The first one is the quick spread of inappropriate information through the social media platform and other media Commented [BR29]: What do you mean by this? of communication (Crowley, David, and Heyer Pg 16). Technology has made it easy to upload and spread information, as videos or in other forms, to various media such as YouTube, Facebook, Whatsup, and Instagram among others on the internet. In as much as this is important by making it easy to reach a large audience when the information is misleading or viral, it can cause a lot of harm (Brown, John Seely, and Paul Duguid, pg. 14). Another problem is the over-reliance on the use of modern technological resulting in an addiction syndrome in most teenagers and some adults. Majority of the youths have become addicted to social media thus making it difficult for them to concentrate on other Commented [BR30]: Do you have statistics that prove this? If you make a grandiose claim like “most,” you must prove it with statistics from a credible source. Marife Holmes # 22700036 23035 Harper Ave. Apt B Port Charlotte, FL 33980 feholmes37@gmail.com Exam # 500507 vital issues such as their jobs and academics. There is so much communication going on in the social media platform that the youths have interest in, and they keep following; many are so much obsessed with Facebook, Twitter, Skype, and Instagram among others while neglecting other vital responsibilities. There are also claims concerning financial factors to have negative implications from modern technology used in communication. It is the cost of the equipment employed in Commented [BR31]: What equipment? facilitating the communication process that seems high since at times one needs to acquire the same. In as much as the cost factors are not very pleasing, one has to purchase this equipment to remain updated with the trends. These costs have affected individuals by increasing their spending on technology. There is also the training expense usually included in the technology. The modern technology is sometimes quite complicated and to understand how to operate the equipment, companies and individuals spend a lot of money training their people on the usage and management of the same. The other limitation that the modern technology in communication has brought is the insecurity of the information that passes through the channels. Advanced technology has brought this criterion of preserving personal data in one system. The approach is perilous because in case of an attack there is so much at risk of destruction or getting into the wrong hands (Newton et al., Pg. 6). An example is the growing cyber-attack instances (Haff, and Peter, pg. 12). The risk of exposing confidential information makes it essential for organizations to put up some substantial amount of money to set up security systems to ensure safety. The over-reliance in modern technology also prompts an adverse implication on the human lifestyle. Due to the ease of transferring information, the general lifestyle significantly changes since there is no need for one to cover long distances to pass information hence the Commented [BR32]: What channels? Marife Holmes # 22700036 23035 Harper Ave. Apt B Port Charlotte, FL 33980 feholmes37@gmail.com Exam # 500507 exposure to a higher risk of disease invasions (Katz, James pg 18). There is no longer need to rely on the old approaches of passing information instead they have just adjusted to transferring the same at the comfort of wherever they are using the new equipment. It is indeed true that modern technology has a vast impact on the life of every person, thus influencing various sectors of the economy. By comparing the discussed cost-benefit analysis of advanced technology while considering the current developments, it remains a vital tool in human life. One can mention education, employment, health, economic growth amidst other things that remain fundamental. The wave of technology cost has been a debate, but upon selecting an efficient and appropriate durable means, the short term expenses shall be overruled since the long-term gains are far much more significant. The issue of cyber security and bullying is easily solved using modern technology unlike in the past. Therefore, Commented [BR33]: How so? upon optimal application, advanced technology is the best tool that every household, organization, and country needs to enhance daily operations. In communication, the health sector and the government are huge beneficiaries when it comes to mitigating a predicated condition. Additionally, the government also stands an added advantage of guarding the national borders when a terror alarm rings. The benefits have made modern technology quite attractive Commented [BR34]: Do not introduce new information in the conclusion. for the people who have increased reliance on it. The changes are impressive since they carry huge benefits that motivate the people to rely more on technology. It is, therefore, critical for the people to have significant knowledge of both sides of modern technology so that they can be well informed when putting them into practice. Commented [BR35]: Your conclusion must mention your three reasons and reinforce the thesis statement. Marife Holmes # 22700036 23035 Harper Ave. Apt B Port Charlotte, FL 33980 feholmes37@gmail.com Exam # 500507 Work Cited Brown, John Seely, and Paul Duguid. The Social Life of Information: Updated, with a New Preface. Harvard Business Review Press, 2017. Crowley, David, and Paul Heyer. Communication in history: Technology, culture, society. Routledge, 2015. Haff, Peter K. "Technology as a geological phenomenon: implications for human wellbeing." Geological Society, London, Special Publications 395.1 (2014): 301-309. Katz, James E. Machines that become us: The social context of personal communication technology. Routledge, 2017. Long, Richard J. New office information technology: Human and managerial implications. Routledge, 2018. Newton, Victoria, Alexander Greenberg, and Judi See. "Project Management Implications and Implementation Roadmap of Human Readiness Levels." International Conference on HCI in Business, Government, and Organizations. Springer, Cham, 2017. Rasmussen, Terje. Social theory and communication technology. Routledge, 2018. Exam # 500507 Implications of Modern Technology on Human Life The one feature of the technological world is about its consistency in dynamics and development. In drawing a comparison line while evaluating the changes and events taking place in the technology world, it is precisely evident that the results or outcomes are overwhelming. Technological development remains the driving force for the general changes in human life and the growth in political, and to a broader perspective, the economic sector (Long, Richard Pg 23). One area of modern technology that is inevitable is its impact on human life. The concept of contemporary technology draws conflicting debates and conclusions from various schools of thought, where one end thinks it is advantageous while the other group clings on its negative contributions. Despite these, it is evident that modern technology is far much beneficial given its participation in various sectors of any economy, its global compatibility and its sole influence in changing communication from traditional methods by noting the vast post-modern benefits it displays. The modern technology is part and parcel of human life in close to all aspects. The global community tends to rely on it so much because of the numerous benefits attached or packaged to it. Research proves that technology is the current backbone of every economic development, and its contributions are diverse ranging from communication, manufacturing to socialization among others. The study, however, narrows down to the communication facet based on the perspective of the modern development. The current technology has dramatically improved the communication system by enhancing the growth and emergence of several platforms for the same, and this shift increases the human dependence on technology. Modern technology triggers communication efficiency where accessing encoded information is more comfortable and faster. As it is well known, information is part and parcel of human life, and for any activity to hold there has to be a source of a substantial amount of data passed to the receiving end. Exam # 500507 The technological advancement has outclassed the ancient approaches rendering their contributions insignificant or at times irrelevant based on speed. It will not be sensible to carry out an activity in an ancient slow manner when there is an alternative that is much better and can yield positive results under similar circumstances and at a cheaper cost. After such a consideration, it is evident that reliance on modern technology is one aspect that cannot be ignored, not by anybody who is sober and wants to attain or deliver quality. Communication and information exchange is one area experiencing tremendous impacts of the modern technology that increases the reliability of people on the new development. It has various implications based on contemporary events, and the first is on the efficiency of exchanging information (Rasmussen, pg 17). Due to the improvement in the technology used in information transfer, people all over the world can communicate in several ways by making phone calls, text messages, emails, and other media. The quality of the communication also counts since the modern means is curbing every likelihood of distortion. Initially, it was challenging to pass information from one source to another because of the distance and at times due to the choice channels or the messenger in some cases changed the message or its intensity. Modern technology has changed this by making it easier to communicate instantly with somebody who is millions of miles away while passing the information directly without having to take it through another person who may alter the meaning or engage signals that stand an easy misinterpretation chance. Modern technology is as well more economical in facilitating communication as compared to the old approaches that were used to pass information; with the introduction of modern ways of communication systems where one can declare information to a large group instantly via the social media or any other relevant channels, it has become cheaper. Initially, Exam # 500507 it was quite difficult to give information to a group or on a platform that would reach a large group instantly; one had to gather the audience to pass a piece of information. The old approach was quite expensive and uneconomical compared to the modern means that will reach to the target audience at the comfort of wherever they are. The fascination nature of human beings always triggers upon exposure to new ideas or products, which is the exact experience with the latest technology and thus making it gain a very high level of reliance. Modern technology has several positive effects that increase the reliance levels from the people adopting the system. Advanced technology has improved the communication system in several ways, among them is attaining a faster and more efficient information transfer, thus attracting more people to use the channel. The communication channel was initially very tiresome and inefficient as compared to the resulting modern technology system. When the advanced technology came with the upgrade and better version, the consumers of the services had no choice but to embrace the new improvement. The other benefit that has come due to the reliance on this particular technology is in the education sector. Communication by definition is primarily the passing of information from one person who is the source, to another that is the receiver with the aim of getting feedback. The concept holds in various educational institutions where there is message delivery to the respective students by the instructor, and then the input comes when the students perform accordingly in their various examinations or assignments. Through technology, the world has quickly become a global community or village where people learn multiple languages or take their courses online at their domestic countries. In the end it has made it possible to qualify for employment in other countries across the world. Modern technology has succeeded in ensuring that the academic information is passed effectively from the instructors to the students through the introduction of the online Exam # 500507 education approach. It is this system of education that resulted from the modern technology and its implication in communication does not necessarily need the students to converge at one single place to get the information. The instructors can pass across resource materials through media such as email, dashboard or any other tool, and it gets to the students. There is some attraction that has come with the approach, and the people have greatly benefited from relying on technology. There are also some elements of entertainment packaging the modern technology that also work pretty well and are quite attractive to various people. In the previous years there were minimal ways for entertainment, for example, if it were a program on the television it would last for a brief time, and if one is busy somewhere, he or she will miss it all. The modern technology has changed this since one can actually save whatever has happened in the system and then watch later when there is time (Newton et al., Pg 23). The internet also makes the process much simpler since one can easily access news that they were was not in a position to follow maybe due to prevailing commitments and responsibilities when the information came. In the same entertainment sector, modern technology has also seen the introduction of new and more advanced equipment, for instance the launch of smart and digital LCD televisions that produce better quality pictures as compared to the initial analogue counterparts. Entertainment also fall under communication in that some information has to be transferred from the entertainment source, be it music or television, which has to get to the targeted audience to attain the outlined objectives. There has been some improvement in the health industry as a result of the efficiency in the transfer of information due to the introduction of modern technology in communication. Majority of health centers, which are the hospitals and dispensaries, have Exam # 500507 implemented the use of modern equipment in their various operations. Current communication technology has well made it quite easy for the transfer of crucial health information that may be needed urgently to save a life. The achievement has been via modern electronic tools that have all the patients’ report and history while screening the spread of a disease within the human system with fractions of a second. Again various health facilities have modern tools coordinated with the government bodies to inform of looming health outbreaks, therefore, enhancing the mitigation process. Despite the many benefits and the numerous advantages displayed, there are some claims of negative impacts resulting from relying on modern technology. The first one is the quick spread of inappropriate information through the social media platform and other media of communication (Crowley, David, and Heyer Pg 16). Technology has made it easy to upload and spread information, as videos or in other forms, to various media such as YouTube, Facebook, Whatsup, and Instagram among others on the internet. In as much as this is important by making it easy to reach a large audience when the information is misleading or viral, it can cause a lot of harm (Brown, John Seely, and Paul Duguid, pg. 14). Another problem is the over-reliance on the use of modern technological resulting in an addiction syndrome in most teenagers and some adults. Majority of the youths have become addicted to social media thus making it difficult for them to concentrate on other vital issues such as their jobs and academics. There is so much communication going on in the social media platform that the youths have interest in, and they keep following; many are so much obsessed with Facebook, Twitter, Skype, and Instagram among others while neglecting other vital responsibilities. There are also claims concerning financial factors to have negative implications from modern technology used in communication. It is the cost of the equipment employed in Exam # 500507 facilitating the communication process that seems high since at times one needs to acquire the same. In as much as the cost factors are not very pleasing, one has to purchase this equipment to remain updated with the trends. These costs have affected individuals by increasing their spending on technology. There is also the training expense usually included in the technology. The modern technology is sometimes quite complicated and to understand how to operate the equipment, companies and individuals spend a lot of money training their people on the usage and management of the same. The other limitation that the modern technology in communication has brought is the insecurity of the information that passes through the channels. Advanced technology has brought this criterion of preserving personal data in one system. The approach is perilous because in case of an attack there is so much at risk of destruction or getting into the wrong hands (Newton et al., Pg. 6). An example is the growing cyber-attack instances (Haff, and Peter, pg. 12). The risk of exposing confidential information makes it essential for organizations to put up some substantial amount of money to set up security systems to ensure safety. The over-reliance in modern technology also prompts an adverse implication on the human lifestyle. Due to the ease of transferring information, the general lifestyle significantly changes since there is no need for one to cover long distances to pass information hence the exposure to a higher risk of disease invasions (Katz, James pg 18). There is no longer need to rely on the old approaches of passing information instead they have just adjusted to transferring the same at the comfort of wherever they are using the new equipment. It is indeed true that modern technology has a vast impact on the life of every person, thus influencing various sectors of the economy. By comparing the discussed cost-benefit analysis of advanced technology while considering the current developments, it remains a Exam # 500507 vital tool in human life. One can mention education, employment, health, economic growth amidst other things that remain fundamental. The wave of technology cost has been a debate, but upon selecting an efficient and appropriate durable means, the short term expenses shall be overruled since the long-term gains are far much more significant. The issue of cyber security and bullying is easily solved using modern technology unlike in the past. Therefore, upon optimal application, advanced technology is the best tool that every household, organization, and country needs to enhance daily operations. In communication, the health sector and the government are huge beneficiaries when it comes to mitigating a predicated condition. Additionally, the government also stands an added advantage of guarding the national borders when a terror alarm rings. The benefits have made modern technology quite attractive for the people who have increased reliance on it. The changes are impressive since they carry huge benefits that motivate the people to rely more on technology. It is, therefore, critical for the people to have significant knowledge of both sides of modern technology so that they can be well informed when putting them into practice. Work Cited Brown, John Seely, and Paul Duguid. The Social Life of Information: Updated, with a New Preface. Harvard Business Review Press, 2017. Crowley, David, and Paul Heyer. Communication in history: Technology, culture, society. Routledge, 2015. Exam # 500507 Haff, Peter K. "Technology as a geological phenomenon: implications for human wellbeing." Geological Society, London, Special Publications 395.1 (2014): 301-309. Katz, James E. Machines that become us: The social context of personal communication technology. Routledge, 2017. Long, Richard J. New office information technology: Human and managerial implications. Routledge, 2018. Newton, Victoria, Alexander Greenberg, and Judi See. "Project Management Implications and Implementation Roadmap of Human Readiness Levels." International Conference on HCI in Business, Government, and Organizations. Springer, Cham, 2017. Rasmussen, Terje. Social theory and communication technology. Routledge, 2018.
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