PERSONAL STATEMENT(Edit and Write) I want an Excellent Personal Statement

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The personal statement is a little bit long, please make it a 2 page with necessary content. Edit, Rewrite and polish up some sentences in the personal statement below.Make the personal statement excellent.

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I have attached the personal statement below

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Statement of Purpose I have more than 10 years strong work experience in the following areas, financial software, property management software, and also the software for smart city system. I have extraordinary experience in the full cycle of software development, strong knowledge in software architecture and development. I have a lot of achievements including 6 invention patents, 5 patents of Industrial Design (list of patents is attached for reference). It is a great honor that I was awarded as a youth technical expert of financial sector in China (only 116 people are awarded in China). Also I am holding 5 invention patents and 5 patents of industrial design. I want to improve and enhance my knowledge by studying in the post graduate program, I will apply the knowledge to my work and improve my capability. I architected and designed, developed many software systems which are leading in China. I developed a smart city system which can help optimize resources and infrastructure utilization toward increased sustainability. I architected and designed the smart city system (EverBright Smart City) which can combine the large amounts of data generated by multiple city sources, and integrated services and applications to improve city services. The EverBright Smart City included the following modules like data collection module, communication module, processing module, data analysis module and presentation layer module. As the chief technical manager, I took control of the architecture of the whole system, co-ordinate different product vendors, managed technical-related project plan and milestones. Regarding to the mathematics and computer science, I had excellent marks in the university and continue to study different topics while I worked in different companies. I extended my knowledge to different areas like calculus, linear algebra, probability and topology. Algorithm and data analysis are the foundations of computer science. In my work of smart city project, I fully utilized my knowledge of algorithm and data structure, designed the most efficient architecture to improve the communication efficiency, reduce the data analyzing time. Now the solution is very successful and promoted in different cities in China. I have developed great leadership, team work and a love for complicated problem solving in my work experience. From scratch, I organized a team of five software specialists, and also hiring the part-time consultants from different backgrounds, like sales, business analysists and customer service. I implemented the project plan and assigned different work items to members based on their specialty, and also, I monitor the milestones and workflow. At the last phase, I organized the integration test, customer acceptance test, documentation and client training. The project was a great success and got highly praised by clients. The clients are still using the system until now. I chose to study the post graduate program because it will, therefore, give me the chance to explore new technologies and work with other talented people from different backgrounds. My enthusiasm, maturity and strong determination will make me a successful student. In my spare time, I enjoy playing chess. I found that chess and math have similar patterns of thinking. Playing chess help me with studying math. I also contribute to the developer community, which I always upload the open source code to GitHub. I developed a music data analysis software, which is rated as top 9% in WSDM (ACM International Conference on Web Search and Data Mining). After graduation from post graduate program, I would like to pursue a career in software or big data related industry, ultimately start my own business. IT technology is changing and evolving at a speed never seen before, studying in the post graduate program in North America will enhance my knowledge and experience to the next level, and get in touch with the latest technology. I would like to be a member of the leading groups in the next IT revolution.

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School: UT Austin

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Statement of Purpose
I have more than 10 years’ work experience in financial, property management and the
for smart city system software. I have vast experience in the full cycle of software development
and software architecture. I have a lot of achievements including 6 invention patents; 5 patents of
Industrial Design (list of patents is attached for reference). It is a great honor that I was awarded
as a youth technical expert of financial sector in China (only 116 people are awarded in China).
The post graduate program will enhance my knowledge and improve my capability.
I have designed and developed many software systems which are leading in China. I
developed...

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