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It's time to submit the revision of your persuasive essay. At this point, you should have received feedback from at least two sources, so for this assignment, consider all the feedback you've received on your draft, including feedback from the Online Writing Lab, and submit your revision statement along with your 3-4 page fully revised persuasive essay.
Your revision statement should summarize the feedback you received and indicate the changes made in response to that feedback. Your revised draft should highlight the changes made, keeping in mind the following criteria:
- An introduction paragraph with a thesis statement.
- Three body paragraphs that each focus on a separate supporting idea.
- A concluding paragraph that summarizes your main idea and provides a call to action.
- A properly formatted reference page in APA style that lists all sources used in the paper.
- Careful proofreading for grammar, mechanics, and spelling.
- Applied revision and editing strategies to strengthen the essay.
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Here you go! I wasn't quite clear on whether the directions were asking for actual highlighting as opposed to just addressing changes, so I included a copy of both versions. I also based the revision statement primarily on things that I saw/edited, since you didn't send me the feedback you got from other places. Have a good night! 😃
Running head: MANDATORY OR VOLUNTARY VACCINES
Mandatory or voluntary vaccines
Jolanda Harrison
Rasmussen College
MANDATORY OR VOLUNTARY VACCINES
The question of whether or not it is ethical to require certain vaccines has become hotly
debated in recent years. Many people feel that it is a parent’s right to have his or her children
vaccinated against certain preventable diseases. I feel that this idea should extend to considering
the effects that come upon children who are not vaccinated. Parents may decide not to vaccinate
their children, but their children may become infected; this is something which could potentially
have been prevented. In this text, there is a clear explanation basing on sources to explain with
examples the reason why there should be vaccination despite it seeming to be ‘optional' for
parents over the world.
While many people are quick to tear down parents who choose not to vaccinate their
children, it is also important to consider ethics and autonomy. Many parents believe that
vaccines will harm their children, and, in this case, it is better to encourage research in order to
make a better informed decision regarding their choice. In the case of children who are allergic
to vaccines, for example, it is unethical to force them to be vaccinated in an effort to achieve
eradication. While eradication is a worthwhile goal, it is not worth putting a specific child in
danger by forcing a vaccine that his or her body will not accept, and while there are many
arguments in favor of vaccination, it is essential to remember that there are exceptions to every
decision.
Vaccination is important all over the world as it is used to control diseases through
prevention of bacteria and virus infections (Moss & Strebel, 2011). Vaccination is an important
factor in reducing occurrences of a disease, but above all, it is more important in avoiding
increased infection cases therefore reduced expense on diseases is an indirect benefit acquired
from vaccination.
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MANDATORY OR VOLUNTARY VACCINES
When almost every child is vaccinated, the the disease may come close to eradication,
though this can never be guaranteed. This means money that used to be spent on such this
disease can be channelled to other diseases. A good example of disease eradicated in the world is
smallpox (Weiss, & Esparza, 2015). Polio is also close to being eradicated, and more funds can
be directed elsewhere. This means that parents should consider eradication than just risking.
Eradication is important in ensuring children live a healthy life.
Poliomyelitis is one of the diseases which vaccination being offered against them. This is
an infection caused by viruses and may cause paralysis, breathing problems and even death to the
child. Basing on these serious effects of this disease, the parent should consider this option
instead of leaving the child vulnerable to infection on this kind.
Some sympto...