D. Thesis (Insight Statement). Your
thesis for your narrative is ONE sentence that addresses the
insight/the learning you have gained from the experience or why the
experience was significant to you. Your thesis should be general enough
for the reader to say, "Ah, I see the change in the author" and also "I
identify with the author; he/she speaks for me as well."
Examples of well done Descriptive Narrative thesis: (See the strong insight the reader has?)
positive experiences with reading and writing throughout my childhood
led to an intense interest in literary pursuits throughout my lifetime.
- This early traumatic experience taught me that there are right and wrong times for humor.
- Journeys bring both joy and hardship.
never forget Mrs. Wentling’s caring and dedication; the extra help she
so generously gave me brought up not only my grades but my self-esteem
this journal 4D, write your one sentence thesis or insight statement.
Make your thesis original and specific, not a cliche such as these:
- Life goes on
- My family is always there for me
- On my vacation this summer in New Jersey, I enjoyed sunny, warm days with my extended family.
- The summer of 2001 was the summer of my fifteenth birthday, and it proved to be the best and worst summer of my childhood.
- "And that is why I live every day as if it were my last.
- And that is why my Dad means so much to me."
Here is my rough draft, if you could help me get a thesis statement out of this. thanks
It was a cold dark morning as we headed up to Unit 45 for my
big elk hunt. I was so excited since I
had never drawn a tag before. We were
only about 20 minutes into our drive when I realized that my ex-husband had
been drinking since we started driving. I told him to pull over so that I could drive
and he refused and before I knew it we had run into another vehicle. I remember vividly seeing our car move into the
oncoming traffic. He hit there rear axle and took the whole rear off. I remember looking through the front
windshield thinking this was the last time I would ever look through a front
windshield. My life flashed before my
eyes. All I could think about were my
children, my daughter who was 8 months old at the time and my unborn child in
my tummy. We finally stopped rolling and
I could not get out of the truck the doors were probably locked and I was in
such shock that I could not unlock them.
Thank god the window was broken and so I crawled through putting a gash
in my arm from the broken glass. Our
friend could not get out of the back seat and all I could hear in the distance
was someone screaming for help, but still could not see since it was still
early morning about 5:45 am. We needed
to be up there early so that we could get a good lookout spot for an elk. I was ready to shoot this elk with my 7mm-08,
which was ultimately broken over his back.
I just remember the air being crisp and cold. It felt like an eternity waiting for the
ambulance to get to the site of the accident.
There were 3 of us needing to be transported by ambulance so they had to
call the next town over to come pick the last two of us up. My ex-husband was taken in the first one
since he had been ejected through the front windshield and had an extensive
head injury and come to find out later a broken collar bone. We got to the hospital and the only injury
that I had ultimately was my gash on my arm.
They wanted to take x-rays of me to make sure nothing was broken and I
said no since I was pregnant. They did
scan my brain (CT scan), and everything looked normal. I just remember the look on my parents face
when they got to the hospital as if they were looking at a ghost they could
have lost me. I just started crying when
I got to hold my 8 month old daughter.
She could have lost her mother that day.