D. Thesis (Insight Statement). Your
thesis for your narrative is ONE sentence that addresses the
insight/the learning you have gained from the experience or why the
experience was significant to you. Your thesis should be general enough
for the reader to say, "Ah, I see the change in the author" and also "I
identify with the author; he/she speaks for me as well."
Examples of well done Descriptive Narrative thesis: (See the strong insight the reader has?)
positive experiences with reading and writing throughout my childhood
led to an intense interest in literary pursuits throughout my lifetime.
This early traumatic experience taught me that there are right and wrong times for humor.
Journeys bring both joy and hardship.
never forget Mrs. Wentling’s caring and dedication; the extra help she
so generously gave me brought up not only my grades but my self-esteem
this journal 4D, write your one sentence thesis or insight statement.
Make your thesis original and specific, not a cliche such as these:
Life goes on
My family is always there for me
On my vacation this summer in New Jersey, I enjoyed sunny, warm days with my extended family.
The summer of 2001 was the summer of my fifteenth birthday, and it proved to be the best and worst summer of my childhood.
"And that is why I live every day as if it were my last.
And that is why my Dad means so much to me."
Here is my rough draft, if you could help me get a thesis statement out of this. thanks
It was a cold dark morning as we headed up to Unit 45 for my
big elk hunt. I was so excited since I
had never drawn a tag before. We were
only about 20 minutes into our drive when I realized that my ex-husband had
been drinking since we started driving. I told him to pull over so that I could drive
and he refused and before I knew it we had run into another vehicle. I remember vividly seeing our car move into the
oncoming traffic. He hit there rear axle and took the whole rear off. I remember looking through the front
windshield thinking this was the last time I would ever look through a front
windshield. My life flashed before my
eyes. All I could think about were my
children, my daughter who was 8 months old at the time and my unborn child in
my tummy. We finally stopped rolling and
I could not get out of the truck the doors were probably locked and I was in
such shock that I could not unlock them.
Thank god the window was broken and so I crawled through putting a gash
in my arm from the broken glass. Our
friend could not get out of the back seat and all I could hear in the distance
was someone screaming for help, but still could not see since it was still
early morning about 5:45 am. We needed
to be up there early so that we could get a good lookout spot for an elk. I was ready to shoot this elk with my 7mm-08,
which was ultimately broken over his back.
I just remember the air being crisp and cold. It felt like an eternity waiting for the
ambulance to get to the site of the accident.
There were 3 of us needing to be transported by ambulance so they had to
call the next town over to come pick the last two of us up. My ex-husband was taken in the first one
since he had been ejected through the front windshield and had an extensive
head injury and come to find out later a broken collar bone. We got to the hospital and the only injury
that I had ultimately was my gash on my arm.
They wanted to take x-rays of me to make sure nothing was broken and I
said no since I was pregnant. They did
scan my brain (CT scan), and everything looked normal. I just remember the look on my parents face
when they got to the hospital as if they were looking at a ghost they could
have lost me. I just started crying when
I got to hold my 8 month old daughter.
She could have lost her mother that day.