Descriptive Writing: Disclaimer by Ron Carlson

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First, make sure you've read "Disclaimer" by Ron Carlson before doing this assignment.

Instructions: Examine the following passage, taking into account the level of detail Carlson uses when remembering Debbie's house, their experience, and the poplar tree.

"I also should add here that Debbie's house is real, based on her real house, a green-sided thing on the corner of Concord and Eighth South that had a long shallow porch where I stood so many nights that year whispering with Debbie, giving Mrs. Eisenhour across the street a little show, I guess, as we would stand some nights for an hour saying good-bye and I love you and I can't believe I've met someone like you and That was dreamy in there on he couch, I love you so much, and other direct dialogue which I've used in the text absolutely verbatim, probably the easiest thing of all the things in this book to write because everything we said is alive within my head after all these years, things actually said on the chilly fall nights there on Concord as we twisted closer, so lost some nights that we'd wipe our noses on each other's necks under the huge munificent blessing of the ancient poplar tree in her front yard, a real tree that held up the sky for a half a mile in every direction, a giant that dumped its leaves in unending ten-ton squadrons that fall like some kind of perfect setting for us, a backdrop, a movie..." (Carlson 56).

WRITE an informal few sentences to a paragraph discussing the level of detail -- what do you notice about his imagery? What about other literary devices? What about syntax? Do some close reading here.

NOW, describe a memory of your own in one paragraph, using a similar level of detail. This memory can be anything. It does not have to be about time spent with an old flame. It can be a recent memory or one from long ago. In any case, use an extraordinary amount of detail when describing your memory. Names, places, colors, smells, etc. REMEMBER, and not simply recount the past.

NOW, write another informal paragraph, extrapolating from how you and Carlson have written about place here to a larger answer about how you see writers writing about place and WHY they write about it that way. What effect does writing about place this way have? What purpose does it serve? Is Carlson doing this much differently, and/or for different reasons, than some of the other writers we've read? Be specific.

This is potentially practice for your Critical Essay, where you may very well find it important to talk about your OWN memories and relationships to 'place'. AND where you will need to close read others' writing about place.

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The Ron Carlson’s excerpt is rich with description. As I read the passage, I could get a
vivid image in my mind of the things he described. For example, I could visualize the couple
wiping their noses on each other’s necks. Carlson’s brilliant use of imagery brings the writing to
life. Another literary device that Carlson’s used in the excerpt is a metaphor. The writer
compared the tree in Debbie’s backyard to a giant. The comparison helps the reader comprehend
the size of the tree. Carlson’s arrangement of words in the text results in well-framed and
meaningful sentences.
My visit to Manhattan last summer has stuck in my mind. The city is old and new. Many
ultramodern building pierced into the sky. Old and dilapidated buildings sat in the outskirts of
the city. I visited the city on a weekday and had the bad luck of meeting stone-faced business
people and employees hurrying to and from work. The visit to St. Nicholas Park was a delight.
The well-trimmed grass in the park glowed in the sunlight. The faces of the couples strolling in
the park were beaming with happiness. I was envious of the children who played in the glowing
grass without a care or a worry in the world. They were a sharp contrast to the stone-faced
business people and employees that I had encountered in the streets later that morning.
Both I and Carlson have used imagery and descriptive language to communicate our
experiences. I have noted that writers endeavor to use descriptive language in creative writing.
They write that way to recreate the experiences that they are describing in the minds of the
readers. Writing about places descriptively and using other stylistic devices aid create a vivid
image in the minds of readers. Carlson writes like other authors that we have read.

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T3 2018

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Advanced Networking


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