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You have asked a tutor to help you improve your grammar and your introduction. I understand that you are discussing a school but it would help if you could give history on the school, how many students are enrolled there, you may want to state some of the reasons why you think it is a good school. When you put your paper together you need to expound on some of the reasons why you think it is such a great school and then come up with a good conclusion.
My suggestion would be to write down the reasons why you think it is a good school and then each reason should have its own paragraph in the paper that you are writing. I hope that helps.Please let me know if you need any clarification. I'm always happy to answer your questions.
I would be more than happy to help you with the organization of your paper if you would like to post it to the study pool site and we can work together on it.
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