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For each, respond to the questions in the Peer Review Form (at the top of the Content page in Blackboard and linked below and at the bottom of your original group topic thread) by downloading their draft and responding with the Review function in MS Word. Once you are done, save their draft as a .pdf and upload it in a reply to their post. You may copy and paste the form responses into their essay at the end, or post it as a separate attachment. You must hit reply at the bottom of the screen (you may need to scroll down) in order to complete your review.

use 301-PeerRev-Research www.docx to review:

1-Researched Argument Eng 301 (1)

2-Researched Argument Eng 301 (2).

example how it should be done Allen_Research PR.docx


Each one in own file

so at the end i need 2 different files one for Researched Argument Eng 301 (1) and one for Researched Argument Eng 301 (2).


this assignment should not take more than 1 hour to finish it and it is too short

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Eng301 Peer Evaluation Guidelines, Researched Argument Essay Key Criteria: Rhetorical Awareness; Purpose and Content; Ethical Use of Sources; Self-Evaluation and Critique; Knowledge of Conventions Peer Evaluation Questions: • Is their purpose and main claim clear and easy to identify? • Is there sufficient research to accurately what the conversation is and where they are entering the conversation? • Does it clearly follow and demonstrate understanding of the Classical or Rogerian arguments? • Is there a clear call to action? • Is the evidence relevant and are there warrants, qualifiers, and backing for the evidence? • Is their writing and vocabulary proper for their audience(s)? • Do they efficiently and effectively cite/document their sources? Responses to the following questions must be in complete sentences; brief responses or quick bullets will result in 0 credit. Introduction: • What are the strengths of the introduction? Why? • What needs to be improved? How? Be specific. Body: • What are the main strengths of the body? Why? Highlight at least one example to help the author understand what and why. • Identify at least three areas, or representative areas, that need to be improved. o Why do these need to be improved? o How specifically can these be improved? Conclusion: • What are the strengths of the conclusion? Why? • What needs to be improved? How? Be specific. Which main three criteria from the Writing Portfolio Rubric do they do well in addressing? Why? Jarred T. Mac Professor Coleman Researched Argument The Allusion of Free Will On February 14th, 2018, Alyssa Alhadeff arrived at school, still beaming from the best soccer game of her life the night before. It was especially impressive because Alyssa was recently challenged with being called up from the junior varsity to the varsity team, a challenge that she was clearly ready to face. She sat in class and worked hard, preparing for classes like Debate and Honors English in the following year. This was before 19-year old Nikolas Cruz opened fire at her school, murdering her along with 17 other Stoneman Douglas High School students and staff members in cold blood, and not to mention, wounding 17 more. Cruz would go down as the perpetrator of the deadliest high school shooting in United States history, embarrassing even the infamous Columbine High School shooter in April 1999. If you’re anything like me, you’re left reading the news about the Stoneman Douglas incident with a sense of anger, wishing you could have been standing in front of Cruz on that day with a double-barreled shotgun, loaded and ready extinguish a despicable human being along with all the despair he caused. After all, Cruz must be held responsible for his actions. He made the conscious decision to pick up that gun, drive to school, and slaughter 17 people, didn’t he? But would your perception of Cruz change if he was found to have a brain tumor which caused the uncontrollable impulse to murder? Although there has been no such evidence presented in the case of Cruz, a brain tumor is a clear, physical, and tangible representation of a factor which can cause a perfectly normal and rational human being to commit acts which would be perceived as abhorrent by anyone else. But just as we do not have the ability to choose whether or not we develop a brain tumor, humans do not have the ability to choose other neurophysiological processes in our brain which can cause many to do irrational and terrible things, not to mention, the environmental factors that shape us from birth. The concept of free-will encompasses literally everything we can imagine and is one of the most important ideas that a human can question. More importantly, what are the moral implications of this assuming that we have no free will? How can anyone be held accountable for their actions if our behavior is simply the product of the universe? Three kinds of philosophical thought regarding free will: Body I: Hard Determinism: Jarred T. Mac Professor Coleman Researched Argument In order to believe determinism, the thesis of universal causation must be accepted. Universal causation states that everything that occurs and that we experience has a cause and that every action is caused by something else. Result of an unbroken chain of events Our actions are caused by the same way bats hit balls Reductionism - Traced back to once singular thing - Invisible causes that happen In our brains - Belief desire and temperament - Inevitable decisions - You can’t help but feel and react the way you’re reacting now. Body II: Libertarian Free Will - Liberty - We can act freely - Principle of alternate possibilities o Action is free only if the agent- could have done otherwise o Event causation and agent causation ▪ Physical world is deterministic but argue that • Agents have free will • Where would the free decisions come from? • What would compel someone to make a decision? o If a reason can be derived, then doesn’t that just reinforce the deterministic argument? But you didn’t create the thought Body IV: Soft Determinism - The world is deterministic, but we have choices o Comes within ourselves - Pushing off a bridge and jumping - Self-determined Jarred T. Mac Professor Coleman Researched Argument How much they ate before drinking (which was determined by appetite which can range for different body types), body chemistry, etc. Alternate possibilities Agent has to be able to do something other than what they’ve done Frankfurt cases - Abduct voters Can we separate internal factors from external? Personality shaped by parents, friends, early experience, income As social animals we have to assign blame Conclusion, reinforced thesis: Sam Harris on Free Will - Touches nearly everything o CJ system, guilt, pride, personal accomplishment Consider a serial killer - His choice to commit his murder was determined by physiological events in his brain o Didn’t have time to drink his coffee in the morning o When we assume that violent criminals have this control ▪ We can blame ▪ When not, it evaporates (culpability) • To say that he could have done otherwise, is simply to say he could have lived in a different universe • If I were to switch places, atom for atom, I would be him • I cannot take credit for the fact that I do not have the soul of a psychopath If we view someone with a brain tumor - Brain tumor is one of many cases giving rise to thoughts and actions - If we fully understood the neurophysiology of any serial killer’s brain, that would be just as exculpatory as a brain tumor - If we could see how the wrong Genes were being transcribed https://www.npr.org/sections/thetwo-way/2018/02/15/586095587/17-people-died-in-theparkland-shooting-here-are-their-names Aryn Allen Research Essay Elijah Coleman Washington State University Spending Over the course of the last decade at WSU many departments have been faced with tremendous budget cuts. Entire departments have even been eliminated. These cuts have come from the University not having enough funding. The spending trends of the University have not always been transparent, and I want to show where this money is being spent and how this effects different departments on campus. Our University has many department chairs, and senate members who all contribute to the decision of these eliminations (dan bernardo march 20th at 1:30). However, the cuts are occurring because of over spending of other areas on campus and that is being covered. Washington State University needs to be more transparent in where this money is being spent. In 2009 at WSU the Department of Theatre and Dance at WSU was eliminated which included over 350 jobs and three departments. The departments included the Department of Theatre and Dance, the Community and Rural Sociology Department, and the German major (The Seattle Times, 2009). This budget cut stemmed from a Legislation in the state of Washington to lower University spending. This elimination would help save $54 million over a two year period. Upper administration was also forced to reduce spending—reducing their salaries by five percent to help offset the deficit (The Seattle Times, 2009). The lack of involvement in these departments was the base reason for these decisions. The students of the Theatre and Dance Department were all able to finish their degree programs, and then the department would fade out. At this time it was a tremendous hit to the students in the Theatre and Dance department because the graduate program was eliminate just two years before. The University was led by Elson S. Floyd at the time of these eliminations. The day after the cuts were announced students from the department rallied together to stage a sit in at the French Administration building on campus. Floyd made a point to show up and allow these students to voice their concerns straight to the President. There was no surprise that these budget cuts were impending because it was a legislation by the state however, it was a shock that this particular department was the first to go. This elimination brought upon a great hole to the WSU community. Which in return helped establish what the Performing Arts department was. In 2011 the Performing Arts department under the College of Arts and Sciences was established. It was created by Floyd as a way to keep theatre on campus without having the responsibility of running a whole major. It included four faulty members, two music classes, and many performances throughout the year. This program lasted through May of 2018 when it was eliminated due to the dropping of the University reserves. With this elimination the four faculty members were let go, two music classes were eliminated including one UCORE credit, and Theatrical Arts on campus was eliminated. In a piece released by The Daily Evergreen a study showed that the depletion of the reserves came mostly from athletics (Cottier, 2018). This is where the transparency of the University about its spending is an issue. Many faculty, students and administrators were informed that the University reserves were being depleted by the Performing Arts program when in fact the only money taken out was for faculty salary only. The program only accounted for $1.6 million over 6 years; that’s roughly $228,570 annually (The Daily Evergreen, Ramos, 2017). Performing Arts was programmatically self-sufficient, meaning the shows that were brought in/put on were funded from S&A funding, ticket sales, and donors. People were being misinformed and it wasn’t until the article by Cody Cottier from The Daily Evergreen came out did people truly see where this money was going and how it was going. This article really dives into the spending habits of the University since 2013, which is roughly two years after the Performing Arts department was created. It was no secret that the new College of Medicine in Spokane was going to cost the University a lot. However, I have been a student here for four years and it wasn’t until this article came out did I learn that the school had a budget and exceeded it. The Performing Arts paid the price for this deficit. Our President has been giving out false information about the spending of Performing Arts and the public is not educated enough about it. At the beginning of this elimination I sat down with two of the four faculty members of the Performing Arts and asked questions about the money. What I had not known was that the program was self-sufficient which means I know others were not aware as well. This false information about the Performing Arts spending reserves to stay afloat was creating an image that program wasn’t bringing in enough people. This was also a point the President made to me personally when I attended a Coffee Hour with The President last January. However, when he made this point he also alluded to the football games bringing in a lot and that is why nothing is being cut from them. There is no comparison in these two domains because the space sizes aren’t equal and the amount of involvement is different. The information needs to be coming from the source of where the cuts are happening and not by the person doing them. The university needs to be more transparent with this information so students can have opportunities to state their feelings about it. We are at a Land Grant University meaning it “is an institution of higher education in the United States designated by a state to receive the benefits of the Morrill Acts of 1862 and 1890.” (Wikipedia) These acts were created to help further the education of students in agriculture and mechanics through hands on experience funding federally. This has helped flourish CAHNRS here at WSU as well as help flourish the education of so many students. This is one of the reasons we as a University have succeeded in research because of federal funding. One of the biggest things I have heard from WSU since starting here in 2015 is this “Drive to Twenty-Five” which is WSU wanting to be a top 25 school. I have heard comparisons of WSU wanting to be like Purdue University or Alabama. Most of the schools on the top 25 list have Theatre Departments and thriving football teams. Our football team has been rising in the past four years and catching a lot of national attention. This in return brings in donors and sponsors and alumni donations. These gifts then are given back to the players in private gyms, personal hair dressers and nutritionist, and better equipment. Reflection: I know this is not done where it needs to be. I had a lot of background information about the budget cuts and the said departments that were cut, and then I realized it was veering away from my claim so I took it all out. I also knew that I would be working so I needed to turn it in before Friday morning or I would forget so it’s not as polished as it should be. One thing I really want to expand on is WSU being a land grant university. There is so much information there that I know can really help show how the university can spend money in a positive way. I also want to get more quotes from athletes so I can show the benefits they are getting here at WSU. I also need feedback on my tone and voice throughout cause I always worry I don’t sound professional enough or that I veer from my topic too much. I also know I need to do more research on football and what luxuries they receive but I am having a lot of trouble getting quotes from players or former players. References Cottier C., (2018, April 3) Athletics accounts for half decrease in reserves. The Daily Evergreen. The Associated Press at The Seattle Times(2009). WSU Plans to Cut Theatre and Dance Department. Retrieved from https://www.seattletimes.com/seattle-news/wsu-plans-to-cuttheater-and-dance-department/ Ramos G., (2017, November 15) Performing Arts Cut Hits Home. The Daily Evergreen. Aryn Allen Research Essay Elijah Coleman Washington State University Spending Over the course of the last decade at WSU many departments have been faced with tremendous budget cuts. Entire departments have even been eliminated. These cuts have come from the University not having enough funding. The spending trends of the University have not always been transparent, and I want to show where this money is being spent and how this effects different departments on campus. Our University has many department chairs, and senate members who all contribute to the decision of these eliminations (dan bernardo march 20th at 1:30). However, the cuts are occurring because of over spending of other areas on campus and that is being covered. Washington State University needs to be more transparent in where this money is being spent. In 2009 at WSU the Department of Theatre and Dance at WSU was eliminated which included over 350 jobs and three departments. The departments included the Department of Theatre and Dance, the Community and Rural Sociology Department, and the German major (The Seattle Times, 2009). This budget cut stemmed from a Legislation in the state of Washington to lower University spending. This elimination would help save $54 million over a two year period. Upper administration was also forced to reduce spending—reducing their salaries by five percent to help offset the deficit (The Seattle Times, 2009). The lack of involvement in these departments was the base reason for these decisions. The students of the Theatre and Dance Department were all able to finish their degree programs, and then the department would fade out. At this time it was a tremendous hit to the students in the Theatre and Dance department because the graduate program was eliminate just two years before. The University was led by Elson S. Floyd at the time of these eliminations. The day after the cuts were announced students from the department rallied together to stage a sit in at the French Administration building on campus. Floyd made a point to show up and allow these students to voice their concerns straight to the President. There was no surprise that these budget cuts were impending because it was a legislation by the state however, it was a shock that this particular department was the first to go. This elimination brought upon a great hole to the WSU community. Which in return helped establish what the Performing Arts department was. In 2011 the Performing Arts department under the College of Arts and Sciences was established. It was created by Floyd as a way to keep theatre on campus without having the responsibility of running a whole major. It included four faulty members, two music classes, and many performances throughout the year. This program lasted through May of 2018 when it was eliminated due to the dropping of the University reserves. With this elimination the four faculty members were let go, two music classes were eliminated including one UCORE credit, and Theatrical Arts on campus was eliminated. In a piece released by The Daily Evergreen a study showed that the depletion of the reserves came mostly from athletics (Cottier, 2018). This is where the transparency of the University about its spending is an issue. Many faculty, students and administrators were informed that the University reserves were being depleted by the Performing Arts program when in fact the only money taken out was for faculty salary only. The program only accounted for $1.6 million over 6 years; that’s roughly $228,570 annually (The Daily Evergreen, Ramos, 2017). Performing Arts was programmatically self-sufficient, meaning the shows that were brought in/put on were funded from S&A funding, ticket sales, and donors. People were being misinformed and it wasn’t until the article by Cody Cottier from The Daily Evergreen came out did people truly see where this money was going and how it was going. This article really dives into the spending habits of the University since 2013, which is roughly two years after the Performing Arts department was created. It was no secret that the new College of Medicine in Spokane was going to cost the University a lot. However, I have been a student here for four years and it wasn’t until this article came out did I learn that the school had a budget and exceeded it. The Performing Arts paid the price for this deficit. Our President has been giving out false information about the spending of Performing Arts and the public is not educated enough about it. At the beginning of this elimination I sat down with two of the four faculty members of the Performing Arts and asked questions about the money. What I had not known was that the program was self-sufficient which means I know others were not aware as well. This false information about the Performing Arts spending reserves to stay afloat was creating an image that program wasn’t bringing in enough people. This was also a point the President made to me personally when I att ...
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The Allusion of Free Will

The article tells us how Alyssa Alhadeff arrived at school on 14th February 2018 still
cheering after her best soccer game in her lifetime the previous night. It was fascinating to
Alyssa since she had just been called to varsity team from the junior varsity team and it was a
challenge that she was prepared to face. Alyssa sat in the class ready to start classes like someone
who was waiting for a debate and English honours in the subsequent year.
The story tells us more about how Nikolas Cruz a 19-year old attacked her school,
opening fire on them and killing 17 students from Stoneman Douglas high school together with
her in cold blood and wounding 17 more people. Cruz ended up becoming the deadliest shooting
in a high school to the extent of shaming Columbine high school shooting that happened in April
1999.
Anyone who heard or came across the incidence built all the negativity towards Cruz the
same way as the author says to the extent of wishing one had a gun to shoot him up before
committing such a crime. Even though Cruz was blamed due to the act that he did, the research
showed that Cruz had developed a brain tumour that initiated him to do the action. According to
the study, no one decides whether to establish a tumour or not, and they react differently to
different people ("How OCD Affects the Person," 2014)

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How OCD Affects the Person. (2014). Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder, 37-46.
doi:10.4324/9781315821207-4

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Washington State University Spending
The author explains to us how departments in WSU have been faced with budget
deductions and even elimination of some departments due to lack of enough funds (Cottier,
2018). The author also shows us that there is poor spending of university funds that affect some
departments. The article tells us that the money was not used by the university board but was
wasted due to overspending. The article explains to us how the elimination of the Department of
Theatre and dance that had been carrying over 350 jobs in 2009. The dismissal was targeting to
save at least 54 million US dollars. Also, the removal was aiming to minimise the spending by
reducing the number of departments. Later on, in 2011, departments of Performing Arts that
were under the college of sciences and Arts was started that aimed at running the whole major at
a lesser cost. It was essential for the budget to be reviewed so that to set up clears vision and how
the money at the university was used. Also, this regulated how the money was used hence
minimising the wastage (The Daily Evergreen, Ramos, 2017).
Washington State University Spending
Washington State University Spending has been faced by cuts in budgets to the extent of
closure of the same departments completely (Cottier, 2018). The author tells us that this was
caused by misuse and mismanagement of funds. Also, failure of transparency has led to miss
management of funds since there is no clear show of how the money is used. The author tells us
that the elimination of some departments was due to overspending in some departments and later
on is covered up. Theatre of Dancing Department was eliminated in 2009 that was carrying up
more than 35o jobs. This aided in saving some funds and helped the university since initially,
they face insufficient funding’s. The author also tells us that another department was formed in

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References

Cottier C., (2018, April 3) Athletics accounts for half decrease in reserves. The Daily Evergreen
Ramos G., (2017, November 15) Performing Arts Cut Hits Home. The Daily Evergreen

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Aryn Allen
Research Essay
Elijah Coleman

Washington State University Spending
Over the course of the last decade at WSU many departments have been faced with
tremendous budget cuts. Entire departments have even been eliminated. These cuts have come
from the University not having enough funding. The spending trends of the University have not
always been transparent, and I want to show where this money is being spent and how this
effects different departments on campus. Our University has many department chairs, and senate
members who all contribute to the decision of these eliminations (dan bernardo march 20th at
1:30). However, the cuts are occurring because of over spending of other areas on campus and
that is being covered. Washington State University needs to be more transparent in where this
money is being spent.
In 2009 at WSU the Department of Theatre and Dance at WSU was eliminated which
included over 350 jobs and three departments. The departments included the Department of
Theatre and Dance, the Community and Rural Sociology Department, and the German major
(The Seattle Times, 2009). This budget cut stemmed from a Legislation in the state of
Washington to lower University spending. This elimination would help save $54 million over a
two year period. Upper administration was also forced to reduce spending—reducing their
salaries by five percent to help offset the deficit (The Seattle Times, 2009). The lack of
involvement in these departments was the base reason for these decisions. The students of the
Theatre and Dance Department were all able to finish their degree programs, and then the
department would fade out. At this time it was a tremendous hit to the students in the Theatre

and Dance department because the graduate program was eliminate just two years before. The
University was led by Elson S. Floyd at the time of these eliminations. The day after the cuts
were announced students from the department rallied together to stage a sit in at the French
Administration building on campus. Floyd made a point to show up and allow these students to
voice their concerns straight to the President. There was no surprise that these budget cuts were
impending because it was a legislation by the state however, it was a shock that this particular
department was the first to go. This elimination brought upon a great hole to the WSU
community. Which in return helped establish what the Performing Arts department was.
In 2011 the Performing Arts department under the College of Arts and Sciences was
established. It was created by Floyd as a way to keep theatre on campus without having the
responsibility of running a whole major. It included four faulty members, two music classes, and
many performances throughout the year. This program lasted through May of 2018 when it was
eliminated due to the dropping of the University reserves. With this elimination the four faculty
members were let go, two music classes were eliminated including one UCORE credit, and
Theatrical Arts on campus was eliminated. In a piece released by The Daily Evergreen a study
showed that the depletion of the reserves came mostly from athletics (Cottier, 2018). This is
where the transparency of the University about its spending is an issue. Many faculty, students
and administrators were informed that the University reserves were being depleted by the
Performing Arts program when in fact the only money taken out was for faculty salary only. The
program only accounted for $1.6 million over 6 years; that’s roughly $228,570 annually (The
Daily Evergreen, Ramos, 2017). Performing Arts was programmatically self-sufficient, meaning
the shows that were brought in/put on were funded from S&A funding, ticket sales, and donors.
People were being misinformed and it wasn’t until the article by Cody Cottier from The Daily

Evergreen came out did people truly see where this money was going and how it was going. This
article really dives into the spending habits of the University since 2013, which is roughly two
years after the Performing Arts department was created. It was no secret that the new College of
Medicine in Spokane was going to cost the University a lot. However, I have been a student here
for four years and it wasn’t until this article came out did I learn that the school had a budget and
exceeded it. The Performing Arts paid the price for this deficit. Our President has been giving
out false information about the spending of Performing Arts and the public is not educated
enough about it.
At the beginning of this elimination I sat down with two of the four faculty members of
the Performing Arts and asked questions about the money. What I had not known was that the
program was self-sufficient which means I know others were not aware as well. This false
information about the Performing Arts spending reserves to stay afloat was creating an image
that program wasn’t bringing in enough people. This was also a point the President made to me
personally when I attended a Coffee Hour with The President last January. However, when he
made this point he also alluded to the football games bringing in a lot and that is why nothing is
being cut from them. There is no comparison in these two domains because the space sizes aren’t
equal and the amount of involvement is different. The information needs to be coming from the
source of where the cuts are happening and not by the person doing them. The university needs
to be more transparent with this information so students can have opportunities to state their
feelings about it.
We are at a Land Grant University meaning it “is an institution of higher education in the
United States designated by a state to receive the benefits of the Morrill Acts of 1862 and 1890.”
(Wikipedia) These acts were created to help further the education of students in agriculture and

mechanics through hands on experience funding federally. This has helped flourish CAHNRS
here at WSU as well as help flourish the education of so many students. This is one of the
reasons we as a University have succeeded in research because of federal funding.
One of the biggest things I have heard from WSU since starting here in 2015 is this
“Drive to Twenty-Five” which is WSU wanting to be a top 25 school. I have heard comparisons
of WSU wanting to be like Purdue University or Alabama. Most of the schools on the top 25 list
have Theatre Departments and thriving football teams. Our football team has been rising in the
past four yea...

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