Peer Review

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INSTRUCTIONS:

Review the Annotations and Writing Plans your peers posted on the Discussion Forum. Copy and paste their Annotations and Writing Plans to another document for reference, then workshop them with the questions below.

1. In your own words, identify the argument of your peer's persuasive essay. What is he or she aiming to prove?

2. Has your peer adequately addressed opposing viewpoints?

3. Which of the summaries (or which sections of the summaries) could use more clarification? How could your peer's summaries be improved? Please paste an example and, if appropriate, offer your own edits.

4. Has your peer provided adequate credentialing information? If so, how can you tell the source is credible? If not, what could your peer add to establish the reliability of the source?

5. Do the sources your peer describes in the annotated bibliography connect to his/her argument in a clear and easy-to-understand manner? If so, how so? If not, what are some ways in which your peer could strengthen those connections?

6. Does your peer acknowledge a counterargument in one of the annotations? If a counterargument is presented, does he/she provide a persuasive rebuttal? If no counterargument is presented, can you anticipate some of the objections your peer should take into consideration?

7. Evaluate the sources your peer has selected. Which sources do you find to be the strongest? Why do you think they are strong, and how do they support your peer's key points? Are there ways the sources could support those key points that your peer has overlooked? Be specific.

NOTES TO TUTOR: I HAVE ATTACHED THE ANNOTATIONS AND WRITING PLAN FROM MY PEER AND THE RUBRIC FOR THIS QUESTION. PLEASE REVIEW THE RUBRIC AND FOLLOW THE QUESTIONS ASKED ABOVE.

LET ME KNOW IF YOU HAVE ANY QUESTIONS.

THANK YOU!

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The argument I've chosen to pursue is whether addiction is in fact a choice or a disease, as is so widely debated worldwide. My belief is that addiction is, in fact, a disease. This issue stems from my major of psychology as addiction is a disease of the mind, and psychology is the study of human behavior, which is a big part in understanding addictions. Drug addiction is scientifically proven to be a complex disease which alters the brain in ways that make "just quitting" seem like an unattainable feat. The human brain is wired to reward us for doing things that bring us pleasure. Exercising, eating, and other behaviors linked to health and human survival trigger the release of the neurotransmitter dopamine. Dopamine makes us feel good and urges us to repeat what we have done to make us feel that rush. Drug use triggers the release of dopamine on an exaggerated level, thus the brain responds by reducing the amount of dopamine produced. This begins to rewire the brain and starts the viscous cycle of addiction. The definition of a disease is: a disorder of structure or function in a human, animal, or plant, especially one that produces specific signs or symptoms or that affects a specific location and is not simply a direct result of physical injury. Addiction, much like diabetes or cancer, has been shown to have treatments available to those suffering from its ailments. Addicts may be treated with extensive therapy as well as an alternative "drug" regimen to help them recover. These points show that though addiction begins as a choice, from that first "high" the brain responds and changes its internal wiring. Such is the definition of a disease, where an internal organ function is changed, which is precisely what happens in the brain of an addict. My audience would ultimately be anyone who views addiction as a choice and not a disease. The problems allowing this audience to see and support my perspective will be vast. This tends to become a heated debate on either side, and people will not be easily swayed to see the facts associated with addiction. They want to believe that addicts are beneath others, they are the lowest on the totem pole. If I can allow one person to be persuaded to see the other side of addiction and how it changes someone internally, much as any other disease or mental illness, then I feel this essay would be a successful one. To achieve this I'll need to present a vast amount of scientific evidence supporting my position and leave no doubt that although it begins with a choice, ultimately addiction is something that forever changes a person. As stated from my key points above I intend to show how the brain is altered in addiction. The NIDA website goes into great detail of the chemical alterations that occur within the brain during and after addiction. The CoA website goes into further detail on how addiction relates and compares to other diseases that are caused by multiple behavioral, environmental, and biological factors such as diabetes, cancer, and heart disease. Ultimately I feel the best place to integrate evidence into my essay would be after each point to support and enhance the fact presented. A revision strategy that would aide me in writing my essay is the big picture strategy. It would aide me because it gives you a check list, in a sense, to keep you a track and make sure that you are covering everything I want it to? Receiving feedback from an outside source is beneficial because it may show me a weakness that I may not have realized by reading my own paper. Sometimes other's see weakness we don't realize when criticizing our own work. https://www.drugabuse.gov/related-topics/addiction-science It seems this source is arguing that addiction is, in fact, a disease. This source is using this evident to support that argument: As a result of scientific research, we know that addiction is a medical disorder that affects the brain and changes behavior. We have identified many of the biological and environmental risk factors and are beginning to search for the genetic variations that contribute to the development and progression of the disorder. Scientists use this knowledge to develop effective prevention and treatment approaches that reduce the toll drug use takes on individuals, families, and communities. My problem is: whether or not addiction is a disease. My intended argument is that addiction is a disease. I think this source will be very helpful in supporting this argument because it gives valid, scientifically backed evidence to support my stance on addiction. I think this source will support my other sources because they all go in depth into the brain and how it's affected by substance abuse. All sources coincide. Why Addiction Should Be Considered a Disease. http://ezproxy.snhu.edu/login?url=https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a sn&AN=127674546&site=ehost-live&scope=site It seems this source is arguing that addiction is a disease. This source is using this evidence to support that argument: It uses statistical figures to show how affecting to the population addiction is versus other diseases such as diabetes or cancer, numbers that come from The Center for Disease Control. I believe the source does a good job of supporting is arguments because it uses factual information from other accredited sources such as the CDC. My problem is whether or not addiction is a disease. My intended argument is that it is a disease. I think the source will be helpful in supporting my argument because it gives relevant and measurable information when comparing addiction to other diseases. Writing Workshop Discussion Rubric Requirements for Writing Workshop Students are required to post one initial post (1) and to follow up with one response post (1) for the Writing Workshop Discussion assignment. For your initial post (1) you must: Copy and paste your current draft of your Annotations and Writing Plan into a new thread. In the same thread, state the name of a classmate whose Annotations and Writing Plan you plan to workshop in this module's activity. Try to choose a classmate whose name has not been chosen. Complete the initial post by Thursday at 11:59 p.m. of your local time zone. For your response posts (1) you must: Read through your selected classmate's Annotations and Writing Plan and respond to all of the Writing Workshop questions. Complete your response post by Sunday at 11:59 p.m. of your local time zone. Critical Elements Proficient – 100% Needs Improvement – 85% Not Evident – 0% Va l u e Posts current draft of Annotations and Writing Plan by Thursday at 11:59 of local time zone Posts current draft of Annotations and Writing Plan 1-2 days late Does not post current draft of Annotations and Writing Plan by Thursday at 11:59 of local time zone 5 N/A Does not state name of classmate whose Annotations and Writing Plan will be workshopped 5 Classmate Selection States name of classmate whose Annotations and Writing Plan will be workshopped Identifies the argument of peer's persuasive essay, but does not articulate using own words Does not identify the argument of peer's persuasive essay 15 Argument Identifies the argument of peer's persuasive essay and articulates using own words Discusses whether or not peer adequately addressed opposing viewpoints and offers suggestions Discusses whether or not peer adequately addressed opposing viewpoints, but does not offer suggestions for improvement Does not discuss whether or not peer adequately addressed opposing viewpoints 15 Annotations and Writing Plan Opposing Vi e w p o i n t s for improvement Discusses whether or not summaries could be clarified, but does not offer suggestions for improvement Does not discuss whether or not summaries could be clarified 10 Summaries Clarification Discusses whether or not summaries could be clarified and offers suggestions for improvement Discusses whether or not peer provided adequate credentialing information, but does not offer suggestions for improvement Does not discuss whether or not peer provided adequate credentialing information 15 Credentialing Information Discusses whether or not peer provided adequate credentialing information and offers suggestions for improvement Discusses whether or not sources peer describes in annotated bibliography connect to his/her argument in a clear and easy-tounderstand manner, but does not offer suggestions for improvement Does not discuss whether or not sources peer describes in annotated bibliography connect to his/her argument in a clear and easy-tounderstand manner 10 Connection of Sources Discusses whether or not sources peer describes in annotated bibliography connect to his/her argument in a clear and easy-tounderstand manner and offers suggestions for improvement Discusses whether or not peer acknowledges a counterargument in one of the annotations, but does not offer suggestions for improvement Does not discuss whether or not peer acknowledges a counterargument in one of the annotations 10 Counterargument Discusses whether or not peer acknowledges a counterargument in one of the annotations and offers suggestions for improvement Evaluates sources peer has selected and offers suggestions for improvement Evaluates sources peer has selected, but does not offer suggestions for improvement Does not evaluate sources peer has selected 10 Writes posts that are easily understood using proper citation methods where Writes posts that are easily understood with few errors Writes posts that others are not able to understand and does not use proper citation 5 Source Evaluation Writing (Mechanics) applicable with no errors Comments methods where applicable Earned Total 100% ...
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