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This is the same question that you did for me but now I need to give feedback for other student about the same assignment.

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Assignment 3.2: Peer Review Assignment Post your prewriting assignments for review by: Sunday, April 7, by 11:59 pm Complete your peer reviews by: Wednesday, April 10, by 11:59 pm • • • • • • • Assignment 3.2 is the second step of the Comparative Cultures and Communication Professional Blog assignment. As noted above, there are two (2) due dates for this assignment. Students must submit their work as a reply to the assignment. Work submitted outside of the assignment (e.g., in a separate discussion board) is not eligible for grading, and will not be accepted. The rubric for this assignment can be found by clicking on the menu button in the header of the assignment (the menu is represented by 3 dots). In addition to submitting your Prewriting work to this assignment for review by 4/7/19 by 11:59 PM, you will also submit your Prewriting work to Assignment 3.1: Prewriting before 11:59 PM on 4/7/19. All Peer Reviews are due by Thursday, 4/10/19 by 11:59 PM. All assignments close at 11:59 PM. The phrase "due by 11:59 PM" means assignments must be submitted before 11:59 PM. Assignments not submitted before the assignments close at 11:59 PM will not be accepted. You are expected to submit your work far enough ahead of the deadline that you will be able to cope with and overcome unforeseen challenges. Overview: For this peer-review assignment, students will be asked to speak to a number of elements in their peers' prewriting work. The peer review process for this assignment requires students to take responsibility for providing clear, actionable, helpful feedback to their peers. The prompts for feedback in this assignment are less specific than they were in the peer review assignment for Blog 1, in part because you are now more familiar with the peer review and feedback process, and are therefore able to provide more informed and thoughtful feedback. For this peer-review assignment, you must: • • • Submit your own work to the peer review assignment before 11:59 PM on 4/7/19. Remember: In order for peer review to work, everyone must have something to review, which means everyone must submit something to be reviewed. Submit your prewriting work and feedback as a reply to the assignment. Students who fail to submit their work and/or feedback to the assignment as a reply are ineligible for grading, and their work will not be accepted. Submit your peer reviews as a threaded reply to the writer you are reviewing. • • • Provide clear, thoughtful feedback, and actionable suggestions and recommendations. Thoughtfully respond to your peers' questions after completing the rest of the peer review (as detailed below), and provide actionable feedback in regard to your peers' questions or concerns. Review every submission in your group. Reviews are due before 11:59 PM on 4/10/19. Peer Review Steps and Requirements: Step 1: Reading Always begin each review by first reading the writer's entire submission. Once you have read the writer's submission, respond to the prompts below. Step 2: Response Organization and Formatting Clearly organize your feedback by creating headings as listed below. Bold and underline each heading title so that they are clear and easy to identify. Your feedback for each section will go under the appropriate heading in regular font (in other words, your feedback under each heading will not be bolded, underlined, or italicized). Create these headings: • • • • • • Thesis Statement Sources - Number, Credibility, and Formatting Focus Blog - Completeness, Organization, and Formatting Visual Elements - Value to blog, readability, any additional required Responses to Questions (under this heading, you will clearly label "Question 1," "Question 2," etc. so that the writer can clearly identify which questions you are responding to) Step 3: Offering Feedback You will review the work of all the members in your group. Respond to the feedback prompts below. The prompts are intentionally broad to allow for students to respond thoughtfully using the experience and prior knowledge they bring to this assignment. If you need help figuring out how to respond to a particular section, look back to previous assignment resources for inspiration. For example, if you are unsure of how to begin offering feedback on a writer's thesis statement, re-visit the UNC Thesis Statement handout that you were required to read for earlier assignments. Your feedback must be clear and thoughtful, and your recommendations must be clear and actionable. The prompts for each section are listed below: Thesis Statement • • • • Speak to the writer's thesis statement. Consider elements such as clarity, conciseness, position, etc. Consider whether it answers the "So what?" and "Who cares?" questions. Offer at least one actionable recommendation. Focus • • • Speak to the writer's focus. Consider elements such as topic manageability and narrowness. Offer at least one actionable recommendation. Source Review and Formatting • • • • Review the writer's sources by examining/visiting each listed source. Verify each source using the CRAAP Test (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site.. Speak to the credibility, relevance, accuracy, usefulness, etc. of the sources. Review and speak to citation formatting. Offer at least one actionable recommendation. Blog Completeness, Organization, and Formatting • • • Speak to the writer's fulfillment of the outline requirements. Speak to the organization of the writer's work. Consider clarity of organization from your point of view as a reader. Offer at least one actionable recommendation. Visual Elements • • • Speak to the writer's suggested use of visual elements. If the writer does not include any visual elements, speak to that. Consider relevance, utility, reader needs, etc. Offer at least one actionable recommendation. Responses to Questions • • Respond to the writer's individual questions. (Organize as indicated above.) Offer clear, thoughtful responses, and actionable recommendations. Assignment 3.1 Prewrite United States & Pakistan: Colliding countries compared within Culture Questions 1. Hello Peers, I struggled mostly on creating a thesis statement for my blog. What new information should I include to beef up my thesis statement or what information should I delete to improve this statement? 2. Also, since a conclusion depends on a thesis statement, I struggled creating a conclusion to fully sum up my blog. Any ways in which I could improve my conclusion, including new information, or presenting the argument even deeper? Step #1: Get Familiar with Each Country The United States is composed of a huge diverse population. This diversity contains many different cultures, in which put forth their own influences on the American Culture. Many different cultures influence American culture, and American culture also influences the rest of the world. The country of Pakistan is mainly influenced by Islam. Therefore, the countries culture is mainly driven and follows Islamic beliefs. Also, Pakistan is intertwined with Indian subcontinent culture. Many different ethnic groups compose the culture of Pakistan, and some cultural aspects differ in different region due to the different ethnic groups (Canada, 2018). Thesis Statement Even though the United States and Pakistan have constructed a lasting relationship with one another, understanding the culture of Pakistan allows for an American to build stronger relationships with Pakistanis. This relationship can further lead to success in industry business between the two countries. However, not taking the time to develop a strong understanding of a countries culture could lead to strong tensions and begin the decline of a relationship. Step #2: Know the Difference in Communication Within the United States, personal space is to be respected when greeting someone new followed by a firm handshake and eye contact. Americans usually don’t hug/kiss others unless it is their relatives. Usually women and men are greeted in the same manner, especially within the workforce. During conversion, it is suspected that the counter speaker will occasionally nod their when they are in an agreeance with the speaker as well as shake their head when they are in a disagreement. Also, in the United States, pointing at someone is deemed to be disrespectful (CulturalAtlas, 2016). However, if an American were to visit the country of Pakistan they must know that there is a complete culture shift. Within Pakistan, there are several different regions with varying ways of greeting each other, or people from a different area. Also, Pakistanis who associate themselves with the main cities of Pakistan are more considerate of different cultural issues within other countries (CulturalAtlas, 2016). Pakistanis who live in rural areas may be more conservative of physical contact (Canada, 2018). So, a handshake may be reciprocated in the city but may not be reciprocated in rural areas. The greeting of women in both cities and rural areas are the same because women may feel uncomfortable. In order to greet women, it is respected by placing the right hand over the chest and taking a bow. Also, women may place their hands over their chest for a reply to an offered handshake, being too uncomfortable to reciprocate the handshake (CulturalAtlas, 2016). During conversation, Americans tend to make eye contact however, in Pakistan eye contact is deemed to be a sign of arrogance and being rude. In the US, people say “thank you”, whereas, in Pakistan people use “blessings”. The biggest cultural difference is that in Pakistan, the left-hand is associated with personal hygiene(unclean), so the right hand is always used to gesture, touch people, offer items, or reciprocating a handshake. Another cultural difference is Pakistanis may hook index fingers which signifies an agreement, and unlike the US a thumbs-up is considered rude. Furthermore, winking is very inappropriate especially towards opposite sex. Lastly, the use of the word “thank you” is different. In the US, people say “thank you”, whereas, in Pakistanis substitute the word “blessings”. Anyways, communication comes in all forms, seven percent comes from actual spoken words, thirty-eight percent comes from the tone of voice, and fifty-five percent comes from body language (RightAttitudes, 2008). Overall, understanding non-verbal and verbal communication and knowing the difference each country interprets a certain form of this communication can save someone from getting themselves in trouble when interacting a citizen of the opposite country. The Elements of Personal Communication Figure 1: The division of how communication is perceived by those who can communicate with on another (RightAttitudes, 2008) Step #3: Know the Differences in the Dimension of Culture Dimensions of Cultures Figure 2: The scale and weight of the cultural Dimensions in the US, and Pakistan The United States is driven by social control, so even though everyone is unique, citizens will not differentiate that much with others. Also, with the United States being a free country, there is a vast majority of individualism due to the allowed capability of being able to do whatever someone wants to do to. However, this also represent a high self-image of “I” instead of “We” is in the US. There is a lack of cooperativeness and more separateness, leading to the US being highly driven by competition and success. On the other hand, Pakistan is driven by the idea of a collectivistic society, and there isn’t as much individualism because there is a long-term commitment in Pakistan dealing with family, or relationships. Also, Pakistan sees an equivalent amount of competition as well as having success associated with the quality of one’s life. Lastly, Pakistan focuses on the past as well as the future an equivalent amount. Traditions are kept and honored, while new traditions are being created. The differences in individualism, masculinity, and long-Term orientation could cause conflicts for an American dealing with business issues or ideas. With the US being such an individualistic country, a business setting including Pakistanis and Americans would cause a potential issue of company success or success within multiple companies dealing with similar issues. Also, there would be a misunderstanding between company success and quality of treatment the business provides for the livelihood of employees. Lastly, a misunderstanding being led from a difference in long-term orientation would be Americans working in the business would question the changing of how the business would handle their job. While Pakistanis may encourage the change. Step #4: Know the Political, Business, and Cultural Tensions that Arise In 1947, the United States established a diplomatic relationship with the country of Pakistan (StateGov, 2018). This relationship is built off of counterterrorism efforts as well as trades and investments. The US has a primary focus to develop a stable, and safe environment and economy for Pakistan (StateGov, 2018). Also, this relationship between the two countries has led to a Pakistani-American community in the United States composed of many entrepreneurs, doctors, and academics which benefits the culture and business of America and enriches the culture of Pakistan (EmbassyPakistan, 2019). The US and Pakistan have developed a mutualistic relationship because each country benefits off each other, however, with terrorism rising and tensions within Pakistan with other countries this relationship may be on target for a downfall (EmbassyPakistan, 2019). According to ET, “the US-Pakistan relationship is in serious trouble” (EconTimes, 2018). The serious troubling between the two countries has to do with an upbringing of mistrust. This mistrust has risen due to the opinion that Pakistan needs to do more on terror sanctuaries (EconTimes, 2018). Also, according to President Trump, Pakistan has returned the favor of the aid the US granted them with lies and deceit (Brookings, 2018). Since Trump, tweeted that, military efforts and security assistance has been called off in Pakistan. The US-Pakistan relation has been altering since the beginning; however, the US has been gathering more information that Pakistan was providing a safe haven to Taliban. A high reasoning due to an altering relationship is due to nuclear weapons. In 1990, the US determined that Pakistan was in the possession of a nuclear device, leading to the US cutting off military and economic aid (EconTimes, 2017). The US is also concerned that Pakistan could use their nuclear weapons and go to war with India. The Trump administration is worried that these nuclear weapons and materials in Pakistan could land in the hands of terror groups. Wrapping Up The US and Pakistan differentiate a lot within the culture identity between the two countries. Becoming familiar with the differences in culture between two countries leads to becoming more familiar and even more appreciative of a different country. This familiarity and appreciation with a new country opens the opportunity to obtain a job in that new country and excel at the job because one is able to fully dive in with the culture switch. References: Afzal, M. (2018). The future of U.S.-Pakistani Relations. Brookings.edu Retrieved From: https://www.brookings.edu/blog/unpacked/2018/01/12/the-future-of-us-pakistani-relations/ (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. Evason, N. (2016). Communication of Pakistan. Culturalatlas.sbs.com Retrieved From: https://culturalatlas.sbs.com.au/ (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. Evason, N. (2016). Communication of the United States. Culturalatlas.sbs.com Retrieved From: https://culturalatlas.sbs.com.au/ (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. PTI. (2017). US worried Pakistan’s Nuclear-weapons could land up in terrorists’ hands: Economictimes.indiatimes.com Retrieved From: https://economictimes.indiatimes.com/news/defence/us-worriedpakistans-nuclear-weapons-could-land-up-in-terrorists-handsofficial/articleshow/60220358.cms (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. PTI. (2018). US-Pakistan relationship in serious trouble: Expert. Economictimes.indiatimes.com Retrieved From: https://economictimes.indiatimes.com/news/defence/us-pakistanrelationship-in-serious-trouble-expert/articleshow/60980644.cms (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. Embassy of Pakistan, Washington, D.C. (2018). Pak-US Relations Embassyofpakistanusa.org Retrieved From: http://embassyofpakistanusa.org/ (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. Hofstede-Insights, Country Comparison. (2017). Pakistan United States. Hofstede-insights.com Retrieved From: https://www.hofstede-insights.com/country-comparison/pakistan,theusa/ (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. Canada. (2018). Pakistan. International.gc.ca Retrieved From: https://www.international.gc.ca/cil-cai/country_insightsapercus_pays/ci-ic_pk.aspx?lang=eng (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. Belludi, N. (2008). Albert Mehrabian’s 7-38-55 Rule of Personal Communication rightattitudes.com Retrieved From: http://www.rightattitudes.com/2008/10/04/7-38-55-rule-personalcommunication/ (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. Bureau of South and Central Asian Affairs. (2018). U.S. Relations With Pakistan state.gov Retrieved From: https://www.state.gov/r/pa/ei/bgn/3453.htm (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. ...
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Assignment 3.1 Prewrite
United States & Pakistan: Colliding countries compared within Culture
Questions

1. Hello Peers, I struggled mostly on creating a thesis statement for my blog. What new
information should I include to beef up my thesis statement or what information should I
delete to improve this statement?
2. Also, since a conclusion depends on a thesis statement, I struggled creating a conclusion to
fully sum up my blog. Anyways in which I could improve my conclusion, including new
information, or presenting the argument even deeper?
Step #1: Get Familiar with Each Country
The United States is composed of a huge diverse population. This diversity contains many
different cultures, in which put forth their own influences on the American Culture. Many
different cultures influence American culture, and American culture also influences the rest of
the world.
The country of Pakistan is mainly influenced by Islam. Therefore, the countries culture is mainly
driven and follows Islamic beliefs. Also, Pakistan is intertwined with Indian subcontinent
culture. Many different ethnic groups compose the culture of Pakistan, and some cultural aspects
differ in different region due to the different ethnic groups (Canada, 2018).
Thesis Statement

Even though the United States and Pakistan have constructed a lasting relationship with one
another, understanding the culture of Pakistan allows for an American to build stronger
relationships with Pakistanis. This relationship can further lead to success in industry business
between the two countries. However, not taking the time to develop a strong understanding of a
countries culture could lead to strong tensions and begin the decline of a relationship.
Step #2: Know the Difference in Communication
Within the United States, personal space is to be respected when greeting someone new followed
by a firm handshake and eye contact. Americans usually don’t hug/kiss others unless it is their
relatives. Usually women and men are greeted in the same manner, especially within the
workforce. During conversion, it is suspected that the counter speaker will occasionally nod their
when they are in an agreeance with the speaker as well as shake their head when they are in a
disagreement. Also, in the United States, pointing at someone is deemed to be disrespectful
(CulturalAtlas, 2016). However, if an American were to visit the country of Pakistan they must
know that there is a complete culture shift. Within Pakistan, there are several different regions
with varying ways of greeting each other, or people from a different area. Also, Pakistanis who
associate themselves with the main cities of Pakistan are more considerate of different cultural
issues within other countries (CulturalAtlas, 2016). Pakistanis who live in rural areas may be
more conservative of physical contact (Canada, 2018). So, a handshake may be reciprocated in
the city but may not be reciprocated in rural areas. The greeting of women in both cities and rural
areas are the same because women may feel uncomfortable. In order to greet women, it is
respected by placing the right hand over the chest and taking a bow. Also, women may place
their hands over their chest for a reply to an offered handshake, being too uncomfortable to
reciprocate the handshake (CulturalAtlas, 2016). During conversation, Americans tend to make

eye contact however, in Pakistan eye contact is deemed to be a sign of arrogance and being rude.
In the US, people say “thank you”, whereas, in Pakistan people use “blessings”. The biggest
cultural difference is that in Pakistan, the left-hand is associated with personal hygiene(unclean),
so the right hand is always used to gesture, touch people, offer items, or reciprocating a
handshake. Another cultural difference is Pakistanis may hook index fingers which signifies an
agreement, and unlike the US a thumbs-up is considered rude. Furthermore, winking is very
inappropriate especially towards opposite sex. Lastly, the use of the word “thank you” is
different. In the US, people say “thank you”, whereas, in Pakistanis substitute the word
“blessings”. Anyways, communication comes in all forms, seven percent comes from actual
spoken words, thirty-eight percent comes from the tone of voice, and fifty-five percent comes
from body language (RightAttitudes, 2008). Overall, understanding non-verbal and verbal
communication and knowing the difference each country interprets a certain form of this
communication can save someone from getting themselves in trouble when interacting a citizen
of the opposite country.

The Elements of Personal Communication

Figure 1: The division of how communication is perceived by those who can communicate
with on another (RightAttitudes, 2008)

Step #3: Know the Differences in the Dimension of Culture
Dimensions of Cultures

Figure 2: The scale and weight of the ...

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