Here are some comments for your rough draft. First, don't put questions
in your intro. The thesis should only be 1-2 sentences at the most.
Don't add headings Thesis and Body. The paper needs to describe what you
would do on your perfect day. Use lots of description. Look for places
to add adjectives. You also need to make sure you proofread your paper.
You will have until 5:00 pm on Tuesday (11/10) to submit your paper.