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In the article ‘Helping world majority students make sense of university expectations’, the author tries to prove that even though it is deemed necessary to make changes in the school education system, it is quite hard to make such adjustments, but provides better strategies on the subject. The author argues that it is highly difficult for these institutions to change their standards as well as the entire instruction framework for the purpose of making it easier for the foreign students taking courses in the institution.

Helen Fox states that “while cultural collisions always have the potential of producing shock or distaste, they also have inherent in them the power to enrich the way both the world majority and the western minority understand and experience the world” (129). The author’s sentiments is that even though the foreign students might be at first shocked about their new environment ,they do have the ability to change their new environment to a place that more acceptable to foreign students ‘believes and culture. Helen Fox is surly right about how foreign students tend to play an important role towards bringing a transformation to the new institutional culture full of diversity. As a Saudi student in the United States I think as foreign students in the United States we change how Americans think about our countries and present the correct perception. For example, when I was in ESL program at Gonzaga Unifersity ,Spokane, one day the teacher ask us to talk with business students who have to do a research about the economy in different countries. So they starting ask me with my classmate who also from Saudi Arabia about so products that Saudi Arabia do. But I was surprise that some of them think that Dubai which is part of United Arab Emirates is part of our country. What we did is explained that. Although what we did is simple and it might do not have that meaning of changing the community but I believe that how it is the starting of how forging student able to change their new community.

Helen Fox in another paragraph states that “becoming aware of richness of each student’s background, feeling how it is to think differently, surely this is impossible to do for each of the hundreds of the students we see each year” (129). What the author tries to present here is that despite the need to have a diversified environment that requires all students to be given individual attention, it is impossible to accomplish that every year for every student. I agree with the author in the sense that it would be tedious to get to know the students individually and get them acquainted with the system. In a person level, I think it is really important to give students who came from different background give them individual attention to talk about what difficulties that they face and what different in my culture then US. When I was in ESL program, I really enjoyed who teachers really want to hear from us international students about our cultures, believes and styles. For example, I remember having a conversation with my writing teacher who writing styles is different between United States and Saudi Arabia the teacher enjoy hear from student about that subject which I consider as a respect and professional to us as international students.

The author further states that “But the concept of individual is different in our society than it is in his. In our culture, children are trained to think of themselves as separate individuals from the time they are born” (123). The author tries to insinuate that the instructors should not expect the majority students to grasp the concept of individualism immediately they join the institution. I agree with the author as his concept tries to prove the need for the instructors to understand different student abilities and needs. Example

Helen Fox further states that “talking about analysis with world majority students always involves talking about the cultural expectations” (125). The author in this case tries to communicate that it is not possible to have a conversation about analysis or rather critical analysis with the majority students without having to incorporate aspects of their cultural expectations. I concur with the author in the sense that critical thinking has strong components and as such, it is important to establish the cultural expectations for better understanding.

Helen Fox further states that “It means making overt connections within and between sentences and paragraphs and finding words that show exact relationships between ideas, as is required in a low-context culture” (125). In this case, the author has tried to show the need to create an understanding of various aspects of domestic culture to make it easy for the majority students to adopt differently. I further concur with the line of thought with the understanding that it is quite hard for someone from a different culture to fully understand critical analysis. Example

Lastly, Helen Fox states that “But students cannot wait for change. They are here, trying to get along in the system, and they know they need to understand it in order to succeed”. The author in this case tries to state that the students getting into these institutions are aware of the change ahead of them and need to find a way to understand it. I partially agree with the statement since it makes sense that majority students know they are to experience an unfamiliar system and hence should be prepared for it. On the other hand, these students tend to have a hard time adapting to different systems, and some take a long time to adjust to the system. Example

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