Need help wording my thesis clearly and wondering if it makes sense.

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Isolation can lead to self-inflicted suffering; however, once people become aware of their suffering, they can choose to end it through death and resurrect to become the truest form of themselves, thus living  to their fullest potential.  this is my thesis for an essay my main arguments concern isolation, suffering, death, ressurection. my essay question is evaluate the necessity of self destruction in seeking the truth. i was trying to go with the "you must die while you are alive to be free".

Nov 22nd, 2015

Thank you for the opportunity to help you with your question!

The only thing I see is punctuation errors. Other than that it looks great!

Corrected;

Isolation can lead to self-inflicted suffering, however once people become aware of their suffering they can choose to end it through death and resurrect to become the truest form of themselves, thus living  to their fullest potential.

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Nov 22nd, 2015

Thank you so much. I kind of changed my thesis a bit and wanted to know if it was any better than the previous one: 

The isolation between the human mind and the world creates illusions of reality that leads to self-inflicted suffering; however, once the individual becomes aware of their suffering, they must choose to commit spiritual or physical suicide, in order to free themselves from the illusions of life and become their true self, thus reaching their full potential.

I'm not sure whether to say isolation in general or between human mind and world. 

Nov 22nd, 2015

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