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Almaari 1 Dina almaari Professor Leibow ENG 112 22 November 2015 Essay assignment #2 Effects of Violence Media on Teenagers Virtually, since the dawn of television, parents, teachers, legislators and mental health professionals have wanted to understand the impact of television programs, particularly on children. Early research on the effects of viewing violence on television, especially among children, found a desensitizing effect and the potential for aggression. In this paper, we shall focus our attention to a work done by Gerald Jones, an author of several works of fiction and nonfiction, about how media violence makes an impact to children. The twenty first century generation is highly engulfed with emulating what they see on media rather than following wisdom of our fore fathers. Gerald Jones is an author of different character who will take you step by step, to realizing his reasoning towards the issue of how violence on media is corrupting our children’s mind. By giving us a short summary of his experience as a kid as well as his teenage life, Jones mainly focuses on enlightenment hoping that we would all grasp the idea behind his logical thinking, as well as his personal experience on the matter. He introduces us to the experience at age thirteen. He is afraid and alone, locked in a prison of rage. His well-meaning parents are so concerned with protecting him from violence Almaari 2 scenes either from media or at school and this makes him hide his deepest fears and desires under a nice-boy persona (Jones 2006). The tempo of adolescent boyhood is raging up high outside, but due to the wall build by his parents, he ends up withdrawing into passivity and loneliness. In this context, Jones is desperate for a reborn. The suffering is slowly eating him from the inside. He cannot do a thing about it due to the level of loyalty to the family. In a different level of patriotism, it is not acceptable in my opinion to suffer lonely without expressing your concerns. It will only harm you so bad to a level of no return. Hope rejuvenates in Jones heart as one of his mother’s students convinces her that Marvel Comics, despite their apparent juvenility and violence, they are in fact devoted to lofty messages of pacifism and tolerance. Jones is excited not for the benevolence preached by the lofty messages, but by the violence contained in the scenes of Marvel Comics (Jones 2006). From this moment, the writer takes us to his mid-life stage where important decisions are made concerning his career and the overall realization of his true calling in life. Across generations, genders, and ethnicities are trying to pull themselves out of emotional traps as a result of immersing themselves in violent stories (Johnston 2011). The kind of entertainment being created is highly integrated into the scariest, most fervently denied fragments of their psyches into fuller senses of selfhood through fantasies of superhuman combat and destruction (Gerald 2006). The fight to self-actualization does not end with Jones. It’s all over the human race. Slowly eating us deep within us, but we are too blind to realize this. His son is Almaari 3 battling against rage to freedom (Jones 2008). Teachers are begging with parents to keep their children from rotten culture that is polluting their mind at early stages of maturity. Melanie Moore is a psychologist who works with urban teens and has noted that; fear, greed, power-hunger, and rage are the aspects of ourselves that we try not to experience in our lives but often want, even need to experience through stories of others. Moore feels that children need violent entertainment in order to explore the inescapable feelings that they have been taught to deny, and to reintegrate those feelings into a more whole, more complex, more resilient selfhood (Johnson 2011). The concept of dual-identity at heart of many superhero stories help kids in negotiate the conflict between the inner self and the public self as they work through early stages of socialization. Identification with a rebellious, even destructive, hero helps children learn to push back against a modern culture that cultivates fear and teaches dependency (Jones 2006). The author’s tone all through this article is persuasive and objective in the sense that, it is appropriate to the audience intending to see a generation worth a rating five star. In conclusion, I totally agree with the author that, violent entertainment can play an important role in inspiring some people to real life violence. On the contrary, it can help far more if we learn to use it well. That fear of youth violence isn’t well-founded on reality, and that the fear can do more harm than reality. We don’t need to make the assumption that entertainment violence has effect with gender bias, we need to address it as a major concern affecting our youth. Almaari 4 Works Cited Johnston, Stephen. Tea Party Culture War: A Clash of Worldviews. Enumclaw, WA: WinePress. Pub, 2011. Print. Jones, Gerald, Daniel Cardinal, and Jeremy Hayward. Moral Philosophy: A Guide to Ethical Theory. London: Hodder Murray, 2006. Print. Jones, Gerald, Jeremy Hayward, and Daniel Cardinal. An Introduction to Philosophy for AsLevel. London: Hodder Education, 2008. Print. Page 1 since the dawn of television, parents, teach... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago This language comes directly from another source. But you have failed to cite it. Use signal phrase and parenthetical citation along with the complete cite on the Works Cited page to avoid plagiarism. Remember, you must make clear to the reader that these words come from another source. ABE Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Early research on the effects of viewing vio... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Again, this is plagiarized -- exact words from another source must be in quotation marks AND be properly referenced with signal phrase, parenthetical reference, and corresponding works cited entry. Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago The twenty first century generation is highl... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Instead of a "In this paper..." statement, I am looking for a strong thesis statement that asserts your evaluation or interpretation of the meaning of the text or effectiveness of the author's argument. Why or why not was his argument effective? What specific elements of the argument do you examine in the essay Be to show the strengths and/or weaknesses in his reasoning. aA Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago of different character Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago this phrase makes your sentence confusing. Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Comments & Markups х ealizing his reasoning towards the issue of Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Dexample of wordiness -- sentence would be more clear if you make it concise -- try replacing this phrase with one strong verb -- Author Gerald Jones explains how violence... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago By giving us a short summary of his experi... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Interesting explanation of how the evidence supports the claim -- but the paragraph is confusing because you haven't yet stated a claim, or presented the evidence -- Here a more logical sequence would be -- 1. state claim, 2. evidence (the summary), 3. explain how the summary relates to your claim; and Be 4. explain how the claim relates to your thesis about how effective (or not) is the author's aA argument Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Page 2 The tempo of adolescent boyhood is ragin... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Where does this idea come from? If it comes from the essay, you must cite it. Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago a reborn Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago word choice? Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Comments & Markups that Marvel Comics, despite their apparent... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago You have misrepresented this source by presenting this as a paraphrase, when you have quoted the exact words. Be sure to use quotation marks. -- This is another form of plagiarism - Your goal is to make clear to the reader what EXACT WORDS come from another source AND what IDEA IN YOUR ABE WORDS come from another source. Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago the writer takes us to Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago This is a weak signal phrase. Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago (Gerald 2006). Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Where does the information from this source enter your essay? Be sure to mark the beginning of the words/ideas from this source with a signal phrase. Lisa Lelbow - 14 days ago Page 3 (Jones 2008) Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Again, where is your signal phrase. I cannot tell where your words/ideas end the words/ideas from this source begin. I was surprised when I arrived at this cite, because I thought you were "talking" here. Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago is Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Make this signal phrase more concise: Melanie Moore, a psychologist who works with urban teens, notes, fear.... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago The Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago MLA formatting -- no extra line space between paragraphs. Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago The author's tone all through this article is ... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago This is a good "claim" -- If you supported this claim with evidence from the essay, and then explained how the evidence supported the claim, and then explained how this claim relates to your thesis, you would have an excellent paragraph. Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago (Jones 2006) Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago Where's the signal phrase for this source? Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago I totally agree with the author that, violent e... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago The conclusion (like your thesis) should focus on WHY you agree. What has the author done to effectively build his argument that violent entertainment can play an important role in inspiring... Also, this seems to be the opposite of the argument he makes... Lisa Leibow - 14 days ago
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