Need help for fixing my teacher's comments about my paper

Dec 20th, 2015
Price: $10 USD

Question description

Your first paragraph here is history and I don't see a thesis. The first paragraph needs to inform your reader what your paper is going to be about.

Your second paragraph mentions 'he'...who is 'he'?

You have a lot of info from the novel, but remember, you need to look at what was happening during the time Orwell was writing the novels and juxtapose that with his novels. So, if he portrayed the colonialists one way, did he portray them that way in the novel? Where is the proof? It needs to go back and forth.

Also, I don't see any sources cited here. If you did research and used somebody else's ideas, even if they are paraphrased, they need to be cited within the text where you used them.

I am also seeing quite a few grammar mistakes.

Here is an example: The British executioners including the narrator who does take a seen role are on business as usual ...

Make sure you read through all of this really carefully for grammatical mistakes.

You have used a lot of really great examples from the writing and found out some super information - now you need to look at how it related to real life at the time and make sure all the sources you cited at the end of the paper are cited within the text as well.

my teachers comments, please fix them


Tutor Answer

(Top Tutor) whgrab
School: UIUC

Studypool has helped 1,244,100 students

Review from student
" Goes above and beyond expectations ! "
Ask your homework questions. Receive quality answers!

Type your question here (or upload an image)

1823 tutors are online

Brown University

1271 Tutors

California Institute of Technology

2131 Tutors

Carnegie Mellon University

982 Tutors

Columbia University

1256 Tutors

Dartmouth University

2113 Tutors

Emory University

2279 Tutors

Harvard University

599 Tutors

Massachusetts Institute of Technology

2319 Tutors

New York University

1645 Tutors

Notre Dam University

1911 Tutors

Oklahoma University

2122 Tutors

Pennsylvania State University

932 Tutors

Princeton University

1211 Tutors

Stanford University

983 Tutors

University of California

1282 Tutors

Oxford University

123 Tutors

Yale University

2325 Tutors