Do Outline and Intro peer review

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Please do a peer review for at least two of my classmates, one is from this links(Link to draft outline (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site.); and one is the attached below. Using the revision checklist below to do peer review on those two works.

Revision Checklist: Intro and Outline

English 102

This checklist asks you to respond to a series of questions about each piece you read. In person: Please respond on a separate sheet of paper. Online: You may type your responses directly into this document, then save it and send it with your feedback to the author by attaching it in a reply to author’s initial post in the discussion forum.

Suggestion: Scan the outline before responding to it. Be sure to get together and discuss your peer review with the author when you’re done.

  1. Format: Does the paper follow proper MLA format? This includes:
  1. Identifying information at the top left.
  2. A running header at the top right
  3. A title
  4. Is the paper in paragraph format for the introduction and in outline format for the outline?
    1. Spacing: The identifying information, the title and the introduction should be double-spaced; the outline should be single-spaced. Is it?

2. Elements: Does the outline include the following elements?

a. Introduction: Does this give:

A brief summary of the topic?

A brief discussion of the main issues?

A thesis statement?

b. Body: Does the body break down in outline format the main points? Does it include points about evidence and reasoning that will likely be used?

c. Conclusion: Does the author state how he or she expects to tie it all together?

3. Other Considerations:

a. Does the introduction give you a good idea of what the paper will be about? Is the thesis clear?

b. Does the outline seem complete? Do you see any holes?

b. Is the outline easy to follow, or are there organizational problems?

c. Did you see any recurring grammar or style errors?

d. What did you really like about the paper? Is there anything else you want to tell the author?

Thanks!

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Murguia 1 Romina Murguia Covarrubias Rob Harrill English 102 4 June 2019 How News Impacts Rape Culture vs. How Social Media Impacts Rape Culture: An Outline I. Introduction A. A brief summary of what rape culture is: How rape culture came to be a normal dynamic in society. And how it is seen and discussed in the news and social media. Plus the differences and impacts that come with those said main ideas. B. A brief discussion of what creates rape culture in society: News media and press tend to sympathize with accused rapist, choosing to say things like, “he had such a bright future ahead of him, such a shame.” While social media points fingers to the victim and blames them for the action, claiming it was the victim’s fault. C. Thesis Statement: In many instances, social media has had a impact on rape culture in terms of empowering victims and survivors, whereas, news media tend to isolate victims and promote sympathy for the accused perpetrators. II. Body Paragraphs A. The academic source speaking on women experiencing more sexual harrassment online 1. Women are more seeked online by men sexually than the other way around. They are seeked as much online as in person. It is no accident that this ends up going further than just online. Expand more… 2. Social media can either be a place of comfort to survivors. Or it can be a place where perpetrators look for their next victim. Whether women do or do not get seeked out online has nothing to do with them, it has to do with the men. B. One of the #MeToo sources showing social media’s good side 1. #MeToo is a hashtag that was created to support as a community rape and sexual assault survivors. For those that wanted to create hate and victim blame, there would be an army of supporters ready to backup the survivor in warding them away. It has been a way that other quiet survivors are able to share their stories for the first time and feel supported and validated. 2. The hashtag had only resurfaced recently after all these celebrities were coming out with their silenced stories from over the years. It has helped millions of victims/survivors to know that they are not alone. Because even though news media and the rest of the world may not believe them, the small community on their social media platforms do. C. News media is complicit in spreading and normalizing rape culture. Murguia 2 1. News media tends to have sympathy for the “accused” rapists. The simple word choice of “accused” already gives the audience a sense that the reporter doesn’t believe the claims against the perpetrators etc. Which then makes the audience come to the conclusion that the victim is lying or that it’s her fault for ruining the perpetrators life. 2. The conversation around whether news reporters should talk about people that have had a experience with rape should be called either victims or survivors. The word victim sounds negative, while survivor sounds more positive. Every little word choice matters, especially when one is on the world stage talking about an issue that many people have a lot of different feelings about. D. There is also room to talk about real rape vs myth rapes that influence rapeculture. 1. Rape myths are where if women’s stories don’t consistent of what society thinks rape looks like, then their story isn’t true. This has stopped so many women from coming out of the shadows and telling their stories and “accusing” their perpetrators. 2. It sometimes even goes as far as to negatively impact court cases where the jury/judge are uneducated on rape myths and the reality of real and that causes them to give a lesser sentence for example. Rape myths also give more room for victim-blaming to happen on social media E. Talk about how where there is more rapeculture in local news coverage, there’s more rape. 1. Studies recently done have shown that more rapes tend to happen where there is local news that do cover rape but sympathize a lot with the accused perpetrator. Meaning that it won’t be taken as seriously by police to really do their best work. 2. With that being said, there would be more rapes because rapists will then feel that the system is “protecting” them in more ways than one. They’ll probably get a lesser sentence, or patrol, and they’ll get sympathy from news which influences a lot of people into thinking a certain way. III. Conclusion 1. Speak on making recommendations to make news media better when talking about rape. Restate and make clear that social media is more on the right than news media is. Only because social media is more community based and interactive, while news media is more one-sided and isolated. Rapeculture is something that is human-made, therefore, it can be deconstructed by humans. Murguia 3 Working Intro Rape culture is a societal construct that is built to breakdown rape victims and uplift their perpetrators. There are a lot of factors that go into rapeculture but here is the bottomline: It is when victims are not believed or validated when sharing their stories, or are being blamed because it’s believed they’ve brought those actions upon themselves, among a few to name. These points have been actively influenced and have been added onto by popular social media platforms and news media outlets. In different ways, both have impacted societies views and attitudes towards rape negatively or positively. In many instances, social media has had a positive impact on rape culture in terms of empowering victims and survivors. Whereas, news media has had a negative impact on rape culture because it tends to isolate victims and promote sympathy for the accused perpetrators. Victim-blaming, perpetrator sympathy, and rape myths and how they impact and are impacted by news and social media are more of what will be uncovered more here. Overall, social media is better at resisting the normalization of rapeculture, while news media is better at inflicting rapeculture onto society. There are methods to handle and fix this madness but first, one must assess the damage that’s been done. ...
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In MLA format, the identifying information should be positioned at the top left corner.
The identifying information includes; the student’s name, instructor/professor’s name, name of
the course, and date of submission of the paper/assignment. Clearly, the paper format has
adhered to that particular arrangement. Moreover, as also required in the MLA format, the paper
contains the student’s surname – Ly - at the top right side. Below the identifying information at
the top left corner, the title of the paper is rightly positioned at the center. However, there is a
mistake concerning the fonts which have been used in the paper. The font that has been used in
the identifying information – Arial – is different from that which appears in the body – Times
New Romans. Notably, the paper is in an outline format and is uniformly double-spaced.
The outline of the paper contains; an introduction, the body, and the conclusion part.
Typically, an introduction should contain a brief summary of the topical scope of the p...

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Tutor went the extra mile to help me with this essay. Citations were a bit shaky but I appreciated how well he handled APA styles and how ok he was to change them even though I didnt specify. Got a B+ which is believable and acceptable.

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