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Step 2: By Friday at 11:59 pm, submit your rough draft of Essay 1.
You can copy paste it into the discussion board or (preferably) attach it as a file. You will click "Reply" and attach your draft in a similar way as you have done for discussions or annotation in the past.
Step 3: Check back in on Saturday morning. I will have matched you up with a partner (I will send out a partner list as an announcement). Once you see who your partner is, find his or her post, download the rough draft, and make as many helpful comments and suggestions on it as you can. You can use the insert comment function on word, or you can simply write your comments in red.
Step 4: Once you are done commenting, go onto the next page (add a new page to the writer's essay) and answer the following questions:
- Does the writer begin with a story? Is it an effective story? What details could the writer add to it?
- Does the writer have a clear thesis that makes some kind of argument about cultural borders and the way they help shape our identities?
- Does the writer have three main claims or points?
- Is each of the main claim or point supported by either personal experiences and/or cited sources (from class or from the writer's own research)? Is the support effective/convincing? Are there places where better support is needed?
- Does the writer have a conclude the script in a way that leaves you thinking/gives you a sense of finality?
- What would you say are the talk's greatest strengths? What did the writer do particularly well?
- What should the writer focus on most as they revise the the script? What can be most improved?
Step 5: By Sunday, at 11:59pm, hit "Reply" to your partner's original post. Attach the draft with comments and the questions answered so that your partner can review them and make changes to his or her essay before the due date (Wednesday of next week).
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Topic: Answer to question
1. Writer beginning story
A. The writer begins by defining the culture and identity concept, where various components
of culture are elaborated. After the culture and identity definition, the writer has
encompassed a substantial story based on personal experience and how migrating from her
native country affected her.
2. Writer’s thesis
A. The writer has a clear thesis that makes an effective argument. The writer's main point of
the argument is how language impacts who we are and how it shapes one's thinking.
3. Three main claims or points
A. The writer's draft encompasses the three claims, but how the depiction techniques are not
clear. The points are within a story, which can be difficult for the audience to perceive.
4. Support for the main claims
A. The writer's claims are only supported by examples from the reading. Therefore, personal
experience is missing from the examples.
5. Writer’s conclusion
A. The writer does not conclude in a way that will leave the audience thinking and with finality
sense. Instead, the last part of the writer's draft ends with an example supporting one of the
claims.
6. Greatest strengths
A. The writers talk greatest strength is the personal experience shared as support for the main
claim. From the story, it is explicit that crossing cultural borders affect who we are, as the
writer was affected by her migration from Iraq to the United States.
7. Things for writer focus on
A. As the writer focuses on revising the script, she should start with a personal story and
connect it to the cultural border and identity
Name: Mina Ibraheem
Instructor: K.Allen
Course: 120/020
Date: 10/23/2020
Cultural Borders and Identity
Cultural boundaries refer to the existence of a kind of cultural differences. Cultural
borders are a feature of all human societies, both traditional and modern. Borders are a social
construct with political origin. Power is exercised across borders, as in the case of political
borders between two states. Define a cultural boundary, or cultural area, a geographical area in
which a group of people share the same cultural practices and traditions. These aspects may
include language, ethnicity, and religion. Sometimes the ...