7.do you think the pronoun use about right, or is it overdone?

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What changes might you make?

Although Winston knew that hiding from the screen to be out of view of the party's surveillance was for hidden, he felt  no wrong in betraying  his leaders, for he knew that totalitarianism was wrong.

Nov 9th, 2014

Too many pronouns this time, plus awkward part is to be out of view because you have hiding and party's surveillance as well. An improvement is:

Although Winston knew that hiding from the screen to escape the party's surveillance was forbidden, he felt no wrong in betraying his leaders: totalitarianism was wrong.

Nov 9th, 2014

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