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You need to do a peer review of my classmate's essay. Write what he needs to improve and what he did good, also say what you agree with him on and everything, thanks and good luck. His essay is attached below.
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Running head: ESSAY REVIEW
Essay Review
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ESSAY REVIEW
Keiana Johnson, in one word, impressive is the first word that comes to mind having
read your essay on The Black Panther. I give credit where it is due. However, I noticed some
mistakes here and there that I’m hoping you can improve on.
Redundancy. “You have to actually pay attention to the movie to understand how it
implies to this,” (Johnson, 2021). In your fourth sentence, I noticed too much repetition in the
use of the word “to”. Without redundancy, your sentence would have read something like
“You have be attentive enough for you to understand how it implies to this”. From the
sentence, there’s also the use of the word “actually”, which I find unnecessary. This may
make your paper too wordy but not passing the intended message.
I recommend you make use of free online tools, such as, https://app.grammarly.com.
By this, you will be able to improve on your grammar. Repetition goes unnoticed in the last
sentence in your first paragraph. Again, it’s the use of the same word “it”. As a reader, I must
admit that I got concerned and felt that you should correct this mistake even before I went
ahead to read the entire part of your essay.
The use of quotes...