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Johnson 1 Keiana Johnson 26 February 2021 Professor Spell English 132 Section Essay 3 The Black Panther In this essay, I chose to write about the “Black Panther” film. This film was made to dive deeply into challenges that African Americans faced in all. Yet, it doesn’t just say that. You have to actually pay attention to the movie to understand how it implies to this. I chose to write my essay on the Black Panther film because it has an important meaning behind it and is something that played a big part in our real life past. Throughout the movie, there were plenty of battles that played a role in the true meaning on the movie. Just like in the past, African Americans had to do a lot to gain their rights and equality to whites. The whole movie is based on revenge seeking and wanting what another has. T’Challa represents the African American culture and everybody who tried to get in his way of becoming king are symbolizing the challenges of African Americans every day, including the “whites”. In the story, instead of running from his problems he faces them and knocks them all out of his way. Just like African Americans had to do in real life. They had to face everything that was thrown their way to get what they wanted. You can’t run from your problems your whole life. So the only choice you have is to face them. Johnson 2 Before this film even hit the theaters, it already had people going crazy. Simply because if it’s cultural significance. So you can only imagine what’s numbers it did when it was viewable. This film hit $13.5 billion over the past 10 years. With people going back to back just because of how much they loved it and its meaning. Another main meaning behind this film is to prove to our world that African Americans do matter. They are presenting us with a movie full of African American cast and an African American hero. Even though a lot has changed since the past of how African Americans are treated, some still feel overlooked or mistreated. This is a way to bring attention and basically be like “you see we matter too”. Don’t get me wrong, this film did have some hatred towards it and not because they just thought it wasn’t a good movie. Some claimed this movie rubbed off as a threat to them. Crazy right? A scene from the movie that reminds me a lot of how people tried to talk down on the movie and leave bad reviews, was when T’Challa told the people who were trying to take over his hometown, “let them try”. I grabbed this scene from the story to represent my argument of this film simply because I feel the same towards the hatred as he does the people who tried to take over his home. Exactly what he said “let them try”. They were trying to turn everybody against this fantastic movie because they don’t agree with it. That’s the world we live in though. People will always have something to say regardless but no matter what always stand up for what you believe is right. Just like T’Challa did. Even though T’Challa had a lot of enemies and faced a lot of battles, he turned out to be one of Marvel’s biggest hero’s. T’Challa gained much respect for himself. Yes, he gained it. He didn’t earn it just off who his father was. He had to fight for it. Just as African Americans had to Johnson 3 fight for their freedom and their rights back in the day. No battle was to hard though, never did they let anything knock them off their pivot either. African Americans fought hard for everything they’ve earned for years. The film doesn’t necessarily just cut straight from racism either. It’s just picturing a world where African Americans have more of the wealth and power. when almost half African Americans were below or right at poverty. So the film symbolizes by all, time for a change. Which many say otherwise. Many of the people who said this movie made them feel “threatened” or didn’t like it, had a lot to say about the title, “Black Panther”. So, the name was actually changed to “Black Leopard” because of what panthers are known for. Eventually it went back to the original name because their argument had no support. It was all just evolved around emotion. This film had many arguments surrounding it, even before it was released to the media. This film draws points and shows what civil right leaders were trying to show years ago. Fight for what you believe in, never give up. They wanted change, so they were going to fight until they got it. Just as T’Challa did. In any battle he faced he fought. Even when he thought he was about to lose or even when he wasn’t twice the size of his enemy. He didn’t let that stop him. He had faith in himself and knew what he was here to do. He was going to get what he wanted or die trying. Many asked the question “what is the Black Panthers true power?”. If you truly want to know, it’s not just the suit that makes him powerful. It’s the power he has within himself. He can do anything he puts his mind too and that’s what makes him so powerful. The Black Panther didn’t just do anything that he was told nor did he just do anything he wanted. He did what was right and this is why he had so much respect from many people on the film. Johnson 4 Just like Martin Luther King used to say “I Had A Dream”, Martin Luther King knew that the world would have change soon. He didn’t really have a dream, he just knew whatever he put his mind too, he could achieve. Just like the Black Panther. You speak everything into existence. If it’s what’s right, it’ll come true. I love movies like this one. Movies that can bring back up history and represent something special just in a unique way. Not everybody just can watch the movie and understand what’s really being presented to them. Mostly kids and people who don’t really think that deeply into things. But I was totally different, I caught on to what the movie was symbolizing and I totally agree with it. It’s good to see an African American being presented as something good for once. In movies it’s usually African Americans being looked at bad or being the bad guy. In this film, an African American is the actual hero. This can let many children look up to and give many African American children more confidence. There’s nothing wrong with it to me. Again, this movie isn’t a big deal just because it has an African American superhero. That’s false. It’s a big deal and means a lot to its audience because of what it’s representing and standing up for. Our history and our past is something that can never be changed or undone. So all we can do is learn from it and never go back to it. Another scene that I feel like can be used to represent my argument even more is when T’Challa faced a conflict that put himself and the whole world in jeopardy. No matter how scared he was, he didn’t stop going forward. He made sure all of his people were safe. That was his main focus. He had to use all of his powers to the fullest to do this. Remember, I said his powers. Johnson 5 Bibliography Story clock Research Log. “Black Panther”, Ryan Polly, June 18,2020 https://plotdevices.co/blogs/blog/black-panther The Black Panther. Directed by Ryan Coogler, Marvel Studios, 2018 Insights, (M) Chadwick Boseman, Andy Serkis, Michael B. Jordan, Lupita Nyong’o, “Black Panther- Empowering The Next Generation”, May 30, 2018. https://www.insights.uca.org.au/black-panther-empowering-the-next-generation/ Annotations Story clock Research Log- Is required article because it was where I got many of my facts and evidence to support my essay from. I can compare it a lot to the way I think. The Blank Panther- My required film, what my essay based upon. Insights- Not a required source but gave me more information that I can get facts from that helped me form my essay.
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ESSAY REVIEW
Keiana Johnson, in one word, impressive is the first word that comes to mind having
read your essay on The Black Panther. I give credit where it is due. However, I noticed some
mistakes here and there that I’m hoping you can improve on.
Redundancy. “You have to actually pay attention to the movie to understand how it
implies to this,” (Johnson, 2021). In your fourth sentence, I noticed too much repetition in the
use of the word “to”. Without redundancy, your sentence would have read something like
“You have be attentive enough for you to understand how it implies to this”. From the
sentence, there’s also the use of the word “actually”, which I find unnecessary. This may
make your paper too wordy but not passing the intended message.
I recommend you make use of free online tools, such as, https://app.grammarly.com.
By this, you will be able to improve on your grammar. Repetition goes unnoticed in the last
sentence in your first paragraph. Again, it’s the use of the same word “it”. As a reader, I must
admit that I got concerned and felt that you should correct this mistake even before I went
ahead to read the entire part of your essay.
The use of quotes...


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