Pariyar 1
Ganesh Pariyar
Dr. Jacqueline Smith
ENC-11012 December 2020
Introduction
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Textual Evaluation
Write in brief about my intention and how it changes while communicating over different
spaces. How different spaces are used to communicate differently with different types of
audiences. Introduce the question of the final product briefly to the audience.
Paragraph II and III:
The first sample: “The angle seems more than 30 degrees making sin(x) >1/2 and
the m1 looks more than double then m2 so, body 1 will move down when there is no
friction to hold it in equilibrium.” The sample is from a WhatsApp chat group. Describe
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the sample and the spaces as It is a social platform which allows user to communicate
by sending texts, voice messages and also allow file sharing and I usually communicate
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with classmates and teachers to discuss doubts.
Paragraph IV and V
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Pariyar 2
Second sample: “: “Your videos not only show how beautiful Nepal is, but they
also inspire me to travel and explore places.” Discuss this sample is my comment on
the video on YouTube and explain this space as a video sharing platform and people
sharing their thoughts through comments in the comment section. YouTube is a video
sharing platform and communication is via comments. People write their thought about
the video in the comment section.
Discuss my intention to comment on the videos on YouTube. I write the
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comments to give my instant reaction to the videos just after watching them and
communicate with people more or less similar to me.
Paragraph VI and VII
Third sample: “When a person on the ground and a person on the ice of equal
masses push each other, why do they have different speeds?” explain where I wrote
this (Quora). Describe Quora as it is a question and answer platform. A user can ask
questions, answer them, vote for the answers, and even suggest edits for the answer.
Describes why I usually write on this platform and why I write the text mentioned
above.
Paragraph VIII: Conclusion
Wrap up the whole paper informing the interconnection they have and what and how I
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write to communicate in those groups.
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Student A
Prof. Tyra White
ENC 1101
07 December 2019
Intentional Shifts Across Spaces
When communicating, writers often have an intention that may require shifts in their
writing. These shifts in their usage of language are referred to as code switching. In some
situations, however, writers are required to combine various languages when communicating
with those of a different culture. When one merges different languages in their writing, they are
code meshing. These shifts depend on the space, audience, and intention of the message being
communicated. Space is defined as the location in which you write; the audience is who reads
the message; intention is the purpose of the message. The literacy practices of an academic essay,
a post on social media, and a group chat consist of modifications in language and tone. Writers
create the necessary shifts in their literacy practices to fit a specific space and audience; as a
result, this allows the designated audience to have a clear understanding of a message and its
intention
When writing my academic essay, I made the appropriate shifts for my professor and
peers as the audience. Using a computer and Microsoft Word, I typed the entire essay before
having it read by my professor and peers in class. There were a few requirements for the writing
of the essay: MLA formatting, 3-5 pages, at least five outside sources, and citations. Since I was
limited on the number of pages I could have, I only included significant details that would
communicate the intended message across this space. I decided to write about the global issue of
human trafficking for the purpose of spreading awareness to my audience. The goal of this essay
was to persuade the audience to assist an anti-trafficking organization. In order to achieve this,
my writing style shifted to a formal, serious tone. Towards the end of my essay, I stated: “Instead
of spending $5 on coffee, college students should make an effort to eliminate the global issue of
human trafficking by donating” With this statement, I used proper grammar and a convincing
tone. Correct usage of punctuation, capitalization, and spelling is necessary to meet the reader’s
expectations. Throughout the essay, there are several in-text citations included to let the readers
know that I am utilizing somebody’s words to support my writing. The use of citations also
confirms that I am stating relevant and factual information instead of my personal opinions. For
example, I cited: “World Hope International (WHI), a global non-profit organization, discovered
that 1 in 3 women around the world experience physical or sexual violence during their lifetime
(WHI n. pag.)” Using academic and concise language is essential for the designated space and
audience since the essay is being graded on the quality of writing. In addition, my connection
with the audience is weak; therefore, it is more appropriate to write formally for the audience to
understand the message of my paper accurately.
In contrast to the academic essay, the platform of social media has its own informal style
of communication. Instagram is the space in which I communicate digitally and informally by
posting photos with short captions. In this specific space, I also communicate by sending private
messages to others who have an Instagram account as well. Although there is a smaller audience
when private messaging, the use of informal writing is still the same. Those who communicate
on Instagram are somewhat limited to what they can post or say. There are some policies that I
need to abide to; Instagram will not tolerate posts of confidential information or unlawful
behavior. For captions, there is a character limit of 2,000 characters. Anybody, including my
followers, could view my posts since my Instagram account is set to public. I communicate
messages by providing captions to each of my posts. Formal language is not necessary since my
posts are not directed to anyone who I have a weak connection with; therefore, the captions I
write usually consist of words, phrases, hashtags, or emojis. Hashtags in social media are used
for the purpose of drawing attention to one’s posts. I relate my captions to the content of my
posts in order to assist the audience in interpreting the image accurately. On my sister’s wedding,
a photo was taken of me with my siblings and brother-in-law. When posting this photo, I
included the caption: “my siblings welcome a new member
😌#71815” Unlike academic
writing, the space and audience of Instagram accepts uncapitalized letters and incorrect
punctuation. The caption I provided indicates that my sister and brother-in-law were officially
married on July 18, 2015. I included a heart emoji with a ribbon to indicate the gift of a new
brother or member of the family after my sister’s wedding.
Utilizing informal language is also prevalent in most group chats. On WhatsApp, I communicate
with my family members who I have a strong connection with. In this particular space, my
family members and I are able to send messages digitally in order to update or keep in touch with
each other, especially with those who are distant. This group chat is much more flexible than
several other spaces involving communication. In contrast to an academic essay, my family
members and I could speak about various topics in a group chat. These may include family
events, birthday greetings, or sports. Communicating with my family in this space enables
meshing my cultural language as well. Since my family understands basic Filipino words, I
sometimes utilize Filipino language when communicating in the group chat. After my birthday
celebration, I said: “Salamat po for celebrating with me last night and for all the awesome gifts
❤️️yay!” In translation, “Salamat po” means “thank you” in Filipino language. The heart emoji
used signifies the love I have for my family and the gifts given to me. Including the slang term
“yay” expresses my joy and excitement towards the gifts.
Creating shifts across academic writing, social media, and group chats show that I switch
to different aspects of my identity. For an academic essay, I have to follow specific guidelines
and the texts written are shifted formally; consequently, I am less comfortable writing when I
need to put my best effort into my writing. Conversely, I am most comfortable writing informally
in social media and a group chat since I have a stronger connection with the audience.
Integrating the two languages, English and Filipino, to communicate with my family reveals my
cultural identity. If I were to do this on social media or in an academic essay, the audience would
not be able to understand the message through my writing; therefore, I disengage my cultural
identity when communicating in those spaces. Overall, each of these spaces require shifts that are
favorable to the specific space and audience for the message to be interpreted appropriately
Student B
Prof. Tyra White
ENC 1101
26 November 2019
What intentional shifts were made to communicate across spaces?
In our day-to-day lives, our effort is constantly directed towards achieving our goals
through effective forms of communication. Without knowing it, we are judging styles of rhetoric
without the need to call it a formal textual evaluation. There are two mechanisms we are working
with: the term ‘moves’ in this context describes the tactics of using certain ‘codes’, which are
schools of thought associated with various formalities and subtle connotations with styles of
utterance. Moves are responsible for when and where codes are used, which yields a different
expression of ideas catered to the audience’s needs. Through the lens of the aforementioned
mechanisms, I have chosen to evaluate my own works, consisting of song lyrics, an
observational study essay, and my college application essay. When dissecting any one of these
three, there are juxtapositions in various lexical, tonal, syntactical, and generic elements that are
utilized to fulfill my purpose and respect the limitations of my audience.
In all three literacy practices I’m referring to, the target is of a broadly similar audience.
Two of these texts were required for my academic career, yet we can observe vast differences in
my tone and syntax, so much so that it seems like three different people wrote them. The college
application essay I had designed to be tactfully prideful while maintaining an entertaining
narrative to liven up the fatigued admissions officers. The essay had to be indicative of my
character through eye-grabbing excerpts of my embellished life, so the result was a corny
conclusive declaration: “I refuse to be silent. Voiceless. But don’t just take my word for it. I’ll
show you when I arrive on your campus.” The move I used-- fragmenting an idea to provide a
synonymous equivalent-- was to create a powerful effect similar to an activist making a speech. I
demonstrated my character in this way to show them my passion and vigor in a creative way, that
transformed from a story book at the beginning, to a motivational speaker at the end.
The second medium-- my Anthropological Observational Study may also be considered
a narrative at parts, yet fulfills a more academically defined purpose than my first example. This
writing was the strictest out of all the references,with specified expectations through the medium
of an APA essay: a cover page, Times New Roman, 12 point font, and objective language. As
stifling to individuality as it seems, I still managed to input my narrative wherever I could afford
it. “But as I interviewed the owner...my opinion changed.” In this piece, I play a role of learning
with the audience, as opposed to getting the audience to learn about me (as seen in my college
application essay). Because my audience is either my professor (an anthropologist) or a TA (a
budding anthropologist), I know to keep my tone humble and subdued, yet authentic to my
experience (hence why I begin with my ignorance, and end with the warm connection I built
with the restaurant owner).
Both of these examples facilitate a connection with the audience by employing an
abundance of codes. With the more moves present, a more developed character is produced,
making it easier for the audience to connect. Since we know that everyone expresses dynamic
contrast through code and stylistic switching, connecting to an audience can be simplified to
giving people multiple perspectives (comparable to ‘codes’) so that if one mechanism is not
effective to relating to an audience member, perhaps another code will be.
The stylistic liberties of the song lyrics in “Good Bayou Blue” allowed for the
metaphorical and abstract telling of a loosely defined story. The entire song uses nautical jargon
with vivid imagery to describe the act of gaining resilience after a disappointment. The repeating
chorus goes “I am free, ‘cause I’m cast out to sea.” Vague, right? This serves a functional
purpose to relate to the listeners’ specific experiences. By describing general emotions, it leaves
more room for the audience to project their own experience to a quite personal song,
accomplishing my goal of connection with the listeners. Jargon differences between each piece is
indicative of the audience I’m writing for. Within the participant observation, usage of jargon
like ‘historical landscape’, ‘ancient foundations’, and ‘globalization’ describe specific
phenomena within the Anthropological Discourse Community.
I employed nautical jargon in the song to transport the listener to a different perspective,
even though the latent content of the lyrics are pretty much universal. By comparing getting over
a mental hump through oceanic-related codes, I invite the audience to review how they see their
personal struggles, and encourage them to legitimize adversity. The comparison could not have
been successfully achieved in a purely academic environment, and would not have elicited the
same emotional understanding without the overarching analogy of seafaring.
In all pieces, there is a common theme of evolution of character that is expressed through
code shifts (lexis, tone, and syntax). The college essay details an emotional journey to resilience
and compassion. It starts off with an introduction to my love of words, and the times they were
used against me. Paragraph 7 exemplifies this well: “The words I initially croaked through a
muffled cry every time I came out as agender, soon found strength, and eventually became a
roar.” In the application essay medium, I directly elaborated the strength I gained through my
journey, whereas within the other two mediums, I hint at my emotional evolution through
nuanced changes in tone and lexis.
The introductory paragraph of my anthropological essay describes my first impression of
the restaurant as feeling “like I had barged into someone’s living room.” After spending a while
talking to the owner, my perspective of the owner and the place had turned around. The
following is an excerpt from the second-to-last paragraph: “What I experienced at Queen of
Sheba was a very human warmth, like I was walking into my aunt’s living room.” Notice how
slight differences in lexi (‘barged’ vs. ‘walking’) drastically change the experience. “Good
Bayou Blue” is not short of character development either. For example, the first chorus goes
“Cast out to sea, yeah I’m cast out to sea”, and gets modified to “I am free, ‘cause I’m cast out to
sea”. Even though I don’t explicitly detail my hurdles, these complementary parallels are code
shifts illustrative of character development that was gained through difficulty.
The focus on getting audience members to relate is somewhat present in all pieces but
nonetheless, important. I use moves to employ code shifts (in lexis, tone, and syntax) that are
customized with regards to audience, restrictions, and purpose, so that the receiving party may
connect to the message I am trying to convey. There are many ways to say the same thing, and
all of these possibilities are taken into account when expressing myself across spaces. Yes, many
times outside rewards are what motivate me to carefully construct my message to an audience’s
needs and expectations. But to gain that reassurance (a good grade or a spotify listen) is an
invaluable form of feedback that evaluates if the author effectively satisfied their purpose. But
more than this, the satisfaction of “speaking from the heart”-- authentically expressing from the
purest center of your being-- is what drives the usage of code shifts, so that one may fulfill their
purpose of creating: to connect to others on a level beyond words on a page.
Student A
ENC 1101
Tyra White
6 March 2020
Discourse Community- “Caribbean Cultural Exchange” Outline Topic:
Topic:
How my discourse community uses literacy practices and writing to communicate.
Intro:
1) In all of our lives, we at some time or another belong to discourse communities.
-Linguist John Swales defines discourse community as “groups that have goals and
purposes, and use communication to achieve their goals.”
-In discourse communities, we use literacy practices to communicate with each other.
-I joined the ‘Caribbean Cultural Exchange’ for my discourse community.
Thesis:
- The “Caribbean Cultural Exchange” uses literacy practices to communicate. My
discourse community uses mechanisms intercommunication, genres and lexis as a means
to communicate through their writing as an understanding of social patterns and
expectations of the community.
Body Paragraph 1:
- What I view a discourse community as: A group of people who share common goals and
interests that use literacy practices to communicate to achieve their goals.
- What aspects do discourse communities have: Swale’s 8 criteria
a. DC has broadly agreed set goals, has mechanisms for intercommunication
between members, uses participatory mechanisms to provide information and feedback, has one
or more genres, has specific lexis, members with a suitable degree of relevant content and
expertise, sense of ‘silential relations’ and develops a horizon of expectation.
- Different types of discourse communities:how discourse communities can be different
a. People working together at a company
b.Sports team
c. club/organization
d.Music performers
e. Students studying together
f. Groups that follow the same religion
g. Group that live in the same neighborhood
- How literacy practices play a major part in why we want to join a specific discourse
community. Literacy practices are the way the community communicate with each other and it is
what attracts us to them. It can be their message, how they discuss that message, if we feel
connected to their goals. That is why each community uses different ways of communication like
genres and lexis’.
Body Paragraph 2:
Why I chose “Caribbean Cultural Exchange” as my discourse community.
a. I am from the Craibbean-The Bahamas- so when we were told to find a discourse
community, I was drawn to the “Caribbean Cultural Exchange” as I feel like I would have been
connected to the people in the group. I knew we would have similar interests and background so
it would be easy to relate and communicate with them.
Goals of my discourse community
a. To promote cultural awareness and recognition of the people of the Caribbean within
the University of South Florida and the local community.
b. To raise money for Caribbean islands, if they ever withstand catastrophe.
How my discourse community communicates
a. Through literacy practices of writing: through emails, powerpoints, messaging through
social media
b. The written communication often happens to inform us of upcoming meetings and
events, along with the times and locations.
Body Paragraph 3:
- The mechanisms of intercommunication used in my discourse community:
a) Swales defines mechanisms of intercommunication as locations that support or block
channels of communication, creating means for group members to do the same.
b) Mechanisms of intercommunication in my discourse community are emails, tweets,
instagram and Imessage.
- Genres used in my discourse community:
a) Genre is a system where motives are based, which gives us a social purpose through
an understanding of the social patterns and expectations that are provided to us through
language.
b) Genres that are used in my discourse communities are newsletters, texts, posts, and
pictures.
-Lexis used in my Discourse Community
a) Lexis is defined as “jargon specific and unique to the discourse community at hand
b) In my discourse comunity we use jargon and slang to communicate with each other,
which outsiders or manners not apart of the community would probably not understand.
We use slang from our islands, an example is “Dem yuh pickney dem a drive mi are
driving me crazy” (you children are driving me crazy)
-How writing helps my Discourse Community achieve its goals
a) Writing as a way of communication helps the group itself to stay on target of our goals. In
weekly meetings and newletters, writing is used to remind us of our goals as we go
through each week and helps us to stay connected with events, so we can attend and
continue to meet our goals
Conclusion
-Discourse communities use literacy practices as a way to communicate.
- There are different kinds of discourse communities but we all find one that shares our
beliefs and have common goals that we are interested in
- How communication in your discourse community allows for a more success
- In conclusion, discourse communities all have different ways to communicate within
themselves, but what they all have in common are Swales’ criteria and use literacy practices to
communicate in order to achieve their goals.
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