Pariyar 1 Ganesh Pariyar Dr. Jacqueline Smith ENC-11012 December 2020 Introduction is ar stu ed d vi y re aC s o ou urc rs e eH w er as o. co m Textual Evaluation Write in brief about my intention and how it changes while communicating over different spaces. How different spaces are used to communicate differently with different types of audiences. Introduce the question of the final product briefly to the audience. Paragraph II and III: The first sample: “The angle seems more than 30 degrees making sin(x) >1/2 and the m1 looks more than double then m2 so, body 1 will move down when there is no friction to hold it in equilibrium.” The sample is from a WhatsApp chat group. Describe Th the sample and the spaces as It is a social platform which allows user to communicate by sending texts, voice messages and also allow file sharing and I usually communicate sh with classmates and teachers to discuss doubts. Paragraph IV and V This study source was downloaded by 100000813383945 from CourseHero.com on 04-27-2021 22:02:51 GMT -05:00 https://www.coursehero.com/file/80890546/Outline-for-Textual-Evaluationdocx/ Pariyar 2 Second sample: “: “Your videos not only show how beautiful Nepal is, but they also inspire me to travel and explore places.” Discuss this sample is my comment on the video on YouTube and explain this space as a video sharing platform and people sharing their thoughts through comments in the comment section. YouTube is a video sharing platform and communication is via comments. People write their thought about the video in the comment section. Discuss my intention to comment on the videos on YouTube. I write the is ar stu ed d vi y re aC s o ou urc rs e eH w er as o. co m comments to give my instant reaction to the videos just after watching them and communicate with people more or less similar to me. Paragraph VI and VII Third sample: “When a person on the ground and a person on the ice of equal masses push each other, why do they have different speeds?” explain where I wrote this (Quora). Describe Quora as it is a question and answer platform. A user can ask questions, answer them, vote for the answers, and even suggest edits for the answer. Describes why I usually write on this platform and why I write the text mentioned above. Paragraph VIII: Conclusion Wrap up the whole paper informing the interconnection they have and what and how I sh Th write to communicate in those groups. This study source was downloaded by 100000813383945 from CourseHero.com on 04-27-2021 22:02:51 GMT -05:00 https://www.coursehero.com/file/80890546/Outline-for-Textual-Evaluationdocx/ Powered by TCPDF (www.tcpdf.org) Student A Prof. Tyra White ENC 1101 07 December 2019 Intentional Shifts Across Spaces When communicating, writers often have an intention that may require shifts in their writing. These shifts in their usage of language are referred to as code switching. In some situations, however, writers are required to combine various languages when communicating with those of a different culture. When one merges different languages in their writing, they are code meshing. These shifts depend on the space, audience, and intention of the message being communicated. Space is defined as the location in which you write; the audience is who reads the message; intention is the purpose of the message. The literacy practices of an academic essay, a post on social media, and a group chat consist of modifications in language and tone. Writers create the necessary shifts in their literacy practices to fit a specific space and audience; as a result, this allows the designated audience to have a clear understanding of a message and its intention When writing my academic essay, I made the appropriate shifts for my professor and peers as the audience. Using a computer and Microsoft Word, I typed the entire essay before having it read by my professor and peers in class. There were a few requirements for the writing of the essay: MLA formatting, 3-5 pages, at least five outside sources, and citations. Since I was limited on the number of pages I could have, I only included significant details that would communicate the intended message across this space. I decided to write about the global issue of human trafficking for the purpose of spreading awareness to my audience. The goal of this essay was to persuade the audience to assist an anti-trafficking organization. In order to achieve this, my writing style shifted to a formal, serious tone. Towards the end of my essay, I stated: “Instead of spending $5 on coffee, college students should make an effort to eliminate the global issue of human trafficking by donating” With this statement, I used proper grammar and a convincing tone. Correct usage of punctuation, capitalization, and spelling is necessary to meet the reader’s expectations. Throughout the essay, there are several in-text citations included to let the readers know that I am utilizing somebody’s words to support my writing. The use of citations also confirms that I am stating relevant and factual information instead of my personal opinions. For example, I cited: “World Hope International (WHI), a global non-profit organization, discovered that 1 in 3 women around the world experience physical or sexual violence during their lifetime (WHI n. pag.)” Using academic and concise language is essential for the designated space and audience since the essay is being graded on the quality of writing. In addition, my connection with the audience is weak; therefore, it is more appropriate to write formally for the audience to understand the message of my paper accurately. In contrast to the academic essay, the platform of social media has its own informal style of communication. Instagram is the space in which I communicate digitally and informally by posting photos with short captions. In this specific space, I also communicate by sending private messages to others who have an Instagram account as well. Although there is a smaller audience when private messaging, the use of informal writing is still the same. Those who communicate on Instagram are somewhat limited to what they can post or say. There are some policies that I need to abide to; Instagram will not tolerate posts of confidential information or unlawful behavior. For captions, there is a character limit of 2,000 characters. Anybody, including my followers, could view my posts since my Instagram account is set to public. I communicate messages by providing captions to each of my posts. Formal language is not necessary since my posts are not directed to anyone who I have a weak connection with; therefore, the captions I write usually consist of words, phrases, hashtags, or emojis. Hashtags in social media are used for the purpose of drawing attention to one’s posts. I relate my captions to the content of my posts in order to assist the audience in interpreting the image accurately. On my sister’s wedding, a photo was taken of me with my siblings and brother-in-law. When posting this photo, I included the caption: “my siblings welcome a new member 😌#71815” Unlike academic writing, the space and audience of Instagram accepts uncapitalized letters and incorrect punctuation. The caption I provided indicates that my sister and brother-in-law were officially married on July 18, 2015. I included a heart emoji with a ribbon to indicate the gift of a new brother or member of the family after my sister’s wedding. Utilizing informal language is also prevalent in most group chats. On WhatsApp, I communicate with my family members who I have a strong connection with. In this particular space, my family members and I are able to send messages digitally in order to update or keep in touch with each other, especially with those who are distant. This group chat is much more flexible than several other spaces involving communication. In contrast to an academic essay, my family members and I could speak about various topics in a group chat. These may include family events, birthday greetings, or sports. Communicating with my family in this space enables meshing my cultural language as well. Since my family understands basic Filipino words, I sometimes utilize Filipino language when communicating in the group chat. After my birthday celebration, I said: “Salamat po for celebrating with me last night and for all the awesome gifts ❤️️yay!” In translation, “Salamat po” means “thank you” in Filipino language. The heart emoji used signifies the love I have for my family and the gifts given to me. Including the slang term “yay” expresses my joy and excitement towards the gifts. Creating shifts across academic writing, social media, and group chats show that I switch to different aspects of my identity. For an academic essay, I have to follow specific guidelines and the texts written are shifted formally; consequently, I am less comfortable writing when I need to put my best effort into my writing. Conversely, I am most comfortable writing informally in social media and a group chat since I have a stronger connection with the audience. Integrating the two languages, English and Filipino, to communicate with my family reveals my cultural identity. If I were to do this on social media or in an academic essay, the audience would not be able to understand the message through my writing; therefore, I disengage my cultural identity when communicating in those spaces. Overall, each of these spaces require shifts that are favorable to the specific space and audience for the message to be interpreted appropriately Student B Prof. Tyra White ENC 1101 26 November 2019 What intentional shifts were made to communicate across spaces? In our day-to-day lives, our effort is constantly directed towards achieving our goals through effective forms of communication. Without knowing it, we are judging styles of rhetoric without the need to call it a formal textual evaluation. There are two mechanisms we are working with: the term ‘moves’ in this context describes the tactics of using certain ‘codes’, which are schools of thought associated with various formalities and subtle connotations with styles of utterance. Moves are responsible for when and where codes are used, which yields a different expression of ideas catered to the audience’s needs. Through the lens of the aforementioned mechanisms, I have chosen to evaluate my own works, consisting of song lyrics, an observational study essay, and my college application essay. When dissecting any one of these three, there are juxtapositions in various lexical, tonal, syntactical, and generic elements that are utilized to fulfill my purpose and respect the limitations of my audience. In all three literacy practices I’m referring to, the target is of a broadly similar audience. Two of these texts were required for my academic career, yet we can observe vast differences in my tone and syntax, so much so that it seems like three different people wrote them. The college application essay I had designed to be tactfully prideful while maintaining an entertaining narrative to liven up the fatigued admissions officers. The essay had to be indicative of my character through eye-grabbing excerpts of my embellished life, so the result was a corny conclusive declaration: “I refuse to be silent. Voiceless. But don’t just take my word for it. I’ll show you when I arrive on your campus.” The move I used-- fragmenting an idea to provide a synonymous equivalent-- was to create a powerful effect similar to an activist making a speech. I demonstrated my character in this way to show them my passion and vigor in a creative way, that transformed from a story book at the beginning, to a motivational speaker at the end. The second medium-- my Anthropological Observational Study may also be considered a narrative at parts, yet fulfills a more academically defined purpose than my first example. This writing was the strictest out of all the references,with specified expectations through the medium of an APA essay: a cover page, Times New Roman, 12 point font, and objective language. As stifling to individuality as it seems, I still managed to input my narrative wherever I could afford it. “But as I interviewed the owner...my opinion changed.” In this piece, I play a role of learning with the audience, as opposed to getting the audience to learn about me (as seen in my college application essay). Because my audience is either my professor (an anthropologist) or a TA (a budding anthropologist), I know to keep my tone humble and subdued, yet authentic to my experience (hence why I begin with my ignorance, and end with the warm connection I built with the restaurant owner). Both of these examples facilitate a connection with the audience by employing an abundance of codes. With the more moves present, a more developed character is produced, making it easier for the audience to connect. Since we know that everyone expresses dynamic contrast through code and stylistic switching, connecting to an audience can be simplified to giving people multiple perspectives (comparable to ‘codes’) so that if one mechanism is not effective to relating to an audience member, perhaps another code will be. The stylistic liberties of the song lyrics in “Good Bayou Blue” allowed for the metaphorical and abstract telling of a loosely defined story. The entire song uses nautical jargon with vivid imagery to describe the act of gaining resilience after a disappointment. The repeating chorus goes “I am free, ‘cause I’m cast out to sea.” Vague, right? This serves a functional purpose to relate to the listeners’ specific experiences. By describing general emotions, it leaves more room for the audience to project their own experience to a quite personal song, accomplishing my goal of connection with the listeners. Jargon differences between each piece is indicative of the audience I’m writing for. Within the participant observation, usage of jargon like ‘historical landscape’, ‘ancient foundations’, and ‘globalization’ describe specific phenomena within the Anthropological Discourse Community. I employed nautical jargon in the song to transport the listener to a different perspective, even though the latent content of the lyrics are pretty much universal. By comparing getting over a mental hump through oceanic-related codes, I invite the audience to review how they see their personal struggles, and encourage them to legitimize adversity. The comparison could not have been successfully achieved in a purely academic environment, and would not have elicited the same emotional understanding without the overarching analogy of seafaring. In all pieces, there is a common theme of evolution of character that is expressed through code shifts (lexis, tone, and syntax). The college essay details an emotional journey to resilience and compassion. It starts off with an introduction to my love of words, and the times they were used against me. Paragraph 7 exemplifies this well: “The words I initially croaked through a muffled cry every time I came out as agender, soon found strength, and eventually became a roar.” In the application essay medium, I directly elaborated the strength I gained through my journey, whereas within the other two mediums, I hint at my emotional evolution through nuanced changes in tone and lexis. The introductory paragraph of my anthropological essay describes my first impression of the restaurant as feeling “like I had barged into someone’s living room.” After spending a while talking to the owner, my perspective of the owner and the place had turned around. The following is an excerpt from the second-to-last paragraph: “What I experienced at Queen of Sheba was a very human warmth, like I was walking into my aunt’s living room.” Notice how slight differences in lexi (‘barged’ vs. ‘walking’) drastically change the experience. “Good Bayou Blue” is not short of character development either. For example, the first chorus goes “Cast out to sea, yeah I’m cast out to sea”, and gets modified to “I am free, ‘cause I’m cast out to sea”. Even though I don’t explicitly detail my hurdles, these complementary parallels are code shifts illustrative of character development that was gained through difficulty. The focus on getting audience members to relate is somewhat present in all pieces but nonetheless, important. I use moves to employ code shifts (in lexis, tone, and syntax) that are customized with regards to audience, restrictions, and purpose, so that the receiving party may connect to the message I am trying to convey. There are many ways to say the same thing, and all of these possibilities are taken into account when expressing myself across spaces. Yes, many times outside rewards are what motivate me to carefully construct my message to an audience’s needs and expectations. But to gain that reassurance (a good grade or a spotify listen) is an invaluable form of feedback that evaluates if the author effectively satisfied their purpose. But more than this, the satisfaction of “speaking from the heart”-- authentically expressing from the purest center of your being-- is what drives the usage of code shifts, so that one may fulfill their purpose of creating: to connect to others on a level beyond words on a page. Student A ENC 1101 Tyra White 6 March 2020 Discourse Community- “Caribbean Cultural Exchange” Outline Topic: Topic: How my discourse community uses literacy practices and writing to communicate. Intro: 1) In all of our lives, we at some time or another belong to discourse communities. -Linguist John Swales defines discourse community as “groups that have goals and purposes, and use communication to achieve their goals.” -In discourse communities, we use literacy practices to communicate with each other. -I joined the ‘Caribbean Cultural Exchange’ for my discourse community. Thesis: - The “Caribbean Cultural Exchange” uses literacy practices to communicate. My discourse community uses mechanisms intercommunication, genres and lexis as a means to communicate through their writing as an understanding of social patterns and expectations of the community. Body Paragraph 1: - What I view a discourse community as: A group of people who share common goals and interests that use literacy practices to communicate to achieve their goals. - What aspects do discourse communities have: Swale’s 8 criteria a. DC has broadly agreed set goals, has mechanisms for intercommunication between members, uses participatory mechanisms to provide information and feedback, has one or more genres, has specific lexis, members with a suitable degree of relevant content and expertise, sense of ‘silential relations’ and develops a horizon of expectation. - Different types of discourse communities:how discourse communities can be different a. People working together at a company b.Sports team c. club/organization d.Music performers e. Students studying together f. Groups that follow the same religion g. Group that live in the same neighborhood - How literacy practices play a major part in why we want to join a specific discourse community. Literacy practices are the way the community communicate with each other and it is what attracts us to them. It can be their message, how they discuss that message, if we feel connected to their goals. That is why each community uses different ways of communication like genres and lexis’. Body Paragraph 2: Why I chose “Caribbean Cultural Exchange” as my discourse community. a. I am from the Craibbean-The Bahamas- so when we were told to find a discourse community, I was drawn to the “Caribbean Cultural Exchange” as I feel like I would have been connected to the people in the group. I knew we would have similar interests and background so it would be easy to relate and communicate with them. Goals of my discourse community a. To promote cultural awareness and recognition of the people of the Caribbean within the University of South Florida and the local community. b. To raise money for Caribbean islands, if they ever withstand catastrophe. How my discourse community communicates a. Through literacy practices of writing: through emails, powerpoints, messaging through social media b. The written communication often happens to inform us of upcoming meetings and events, along with the times and locations. Body Paragraph 3: - The mechanisms of intercommunication used in my discourse community: a) Swales defines mechanisms of intercommunication as locations that support or block channels of communication, creating means for group members to do the same. b) Mechanisms of intercommunication in my discourse community are emails, tweets, instagram and Imessage. - Genres used in my discourse community: a) Genre is a system where motives are based, which gives us a social purpose through an understanding of the social patterns and expectations that are provided to us through language. b) Genres that are used in my discourse communities are newsletters, texts, posts, and pictures. -Lexis used in my Discourse Community a) Lexis is defined as “jargon specific and unique to the discourse community at hand b) In my discourse comunity we use jargon and slang to communicate with each other, which outsiders or manners not apart of the community would probably not understand. We use slang from our islands, an example is “Dem yuh pickney dem a drive mi are driving me crazy” (you children are driving me crazy) -How writing helps my Discourse Community achieve its goals a) Writing as a way of communication helps the group itself to stay on target of our goals. In weekly meetings and newletters, writing is used to remind us of our goals as we go through each week and helps us to stay connected with events, so we can attend and continue to meet our goals Conclusion -Discourse communities use literacy practices as a way to communicate. - There are different kinds of discourse communities but we all find one that shares our beliefs and have common goals that we are interested in - How communication in your discourse community allows for a more success - In conclusion, discourse communities all have different ways to communicate within themselves, but what they all have in common are Swales’ criteria and use literacy practices to communicate in order to achieve their goals.
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