Revising the paper on The Gilded Age

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She gave the paper an 85% The teacher said to revise it and resubmit. Some suggestions she made and also the first download is the paper that was handed in the the second download is the actual paper with a more specific things that need to be addressed.

Thesis Statement: Please make sure that your thesis statement is one complete sentence that introduces your topic and gives an overview of the main points of your essay. You also need to make sure that your thesis concludes your introductory paragraph
Body Paragraphs: Your thesis statement is the purpose for your essay. Everything you say in the body of your essay should support what you say in your thesis. If your body paragraphs don’t match your thesis, don’t be afraid to revise your thesis!
Information/Support: This is a good start! Remember that the body of your essay should be a combination of summarized/paraphrased information from research and your own ideas and observations about the topic. Don’t fill your paper with quoted material, it should be no more than 10% of your essay.
Citations: You’re off to a good start! Make sure that your essay isn’t more than 10% quoted material, and remember your in-text citations should not be distracting and should lead your audience back to your works cited page

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Younger Darien Younger Christie Beck ENG304B March 16, 2017 The Gilded Age The Gilded Age was characterized by industrial and agricultural revolution, improving the living standards of American citizens. Even though the Gilded Age is viewed by many as a period of oppression, corruption and monopoly that controlled the economy and politics, it’s also a time of economic development and new technology that helped in building a strong nation in the nineteenth century. The paper will focus on Gilded Age history, political and economic events as well as factors that prompted the Age. There will also be a discussion on railroad impacts, monopoly industries, widespread corruption, labor unions and the issue of urbanization. It will later conclude that the Gilded Age is a great contributor to today's economic growth in America. History of the Gilded Age (1870-1900) The famous American Literature author, Mark Twain characterized this time in history. He tried to bring forth a concept that the outside of the society may seem in order and good but the on the inside, there is extreme poverty, crime, corruption, and many other social issues that affect the rich and the poor in the American society. America made significant progress during this Age which made industrialization, foreign affairs, reconstruction, and expansion improve. 1 Younger After the civil war in America, it made attempts to become a better nation that served its people and operated its economy efficiently. Despite the collapse of reconstruction, the country took advantage of the Manifest Destiny to gain some territories like Louisiana Purchase and Mexican-American War (Campbell 154-179). This action led to an increase in immigration with people moving to more promising and flourishing land. People also settled on the west coast which helped boost the region's economy a great deal. Pioneers settled at the Great Plains in Louisiana and operated large ranches. Unfortunately, this displaced the natives who were originally there but over the years; the government has been on the forefront to resettle them and help them claim their rights. All in all, the present Citizens at the region enjoy better amenities, infrastructure, and standards of living owing to the Gilded Age effects. Overview of the American Economics During the period, America's economy grew by approximately 400% with important technological advancement, population increase, improved transportation, financial innovation and new business practices. These strategies contributed to the economic growth with an addition of industrial and agricultural technology. Improved machinery and new farming practices enhanced productivity and at the same time employed many citizens hence a form of income (Schneirov 189-224). Business communication revolutionized in 1876 after Alexander Graham's telephone with John Rockefeller applying new oil refining methods. Expansion of infrastructure brought about new goods to the citizens that enabled preservation of farm to produce on transit to prevent damage hence efficiency in business practices. 2 Younger Increased individual savings with new institutions coming up was also a part of this time. There was, therefore, an increased level of capital in the economy from whole new extended sources. Meaning that people had become more enlightened regarding personal and business welfare since they considered the future. Financial institutions that came up during the period enhanced financial security as well as lending and insurance services. They acted as facilities for accumulation and dispensing of capital which fueled the American economic growth. All this happened at a drastic rate during the Gilded Age with new forms of business organizations like turning competitors into partners to promote financial freedom and security. However, the monopoly was prevalent with many mergers and acquisitions to improve business productivity. Overview of Political Leaders were corrupt and took bribes during the period hence prevalent political rot and injustices. Supporters of the leaders offered posh governmental jobs and those qualified candidates left out. An example was Charles Guiteau who believed that he deserved a political appointment just because he campaigned for Garfield in the 1880 elections. Despite him being a religious leader and a lawyer. Corruption scandals increased during the Age like the Credit Mobilier scandal whose shady relations with Union Pacific Railroad were shielded by the government hence increasing injustices (Singerman 278-293). The public image of government in promoting fairness and transparency in its operations was now tainted. Other leaders and business personalities conspired with government officials to avoid paying excise duty on imports with merchants taking massive bribes to remain competitive in the market. During elections, both the republicans and democrats failed to pursue ambitious agendas despite the issue of population pressure, immigration and environmental effects of 3 Younger industrialization being a problem. Some forms of political corruption included the New York's Tammany Hall by the Democrats who built it but with many financial scandals involved in the construction and sits setting up. Farmers also formed a political party by the name Populists in 1890's due to the rampant political injustices with the aim of redeeming the nation from this rot. However, were coerced by the Democrats in supporting their agenda and populists faded in 1896. Causes of the Gilded Age There were excessive natural resources during the period that prompted investors and other potential people in business to exploit them. These included land, water and ready market for agricultural and industrial produce. There was a need for cheap labor which was readily available since slavery was prevalent at the time and many immigrants of African-American origin, Latin-America and Mexico migrated to the USA in search of jobs and better opportunities to support their families in their native countries that were then struck by war or famine. Technological advancement and support by the government led to investment personalities taking advantage of the attractive business and political arena. Due to increased population, it only meant that markets were growing and demand was increasing hence the ushering gilded age. Impacts of railroads on America-Transcontinental railroad-1869 The America-Transcontinental railroad was built during the Gilded Age owing to the advanced technology and government support to developmental projects. The railroad led to fast and safe transportation of goods from Atlantic coast to Pacific coast. Both international and intercontinental trade heightened after its construction, which improved the international status 4 Younger of the nation. Areas in the US not previously settled people began to establish economic activities there. The railroad provided employment opportunities for the natives whose standards of living rose due to its income. The railroad also led to the creation of standard time zones, the growth of cities, industries and the Westward extension of America (Gimpel). Adverse effects, however, arose after the construction of the America-Transcontinental railroad. Many native settlers were displaced to pave the way for the railroad which affected them psychologically even if they were compensated and relocated to new areas. As it became easier for traders and citizens to move from one place to another, racial tensions increased between the Native Americans and other groups of traders. The Chinese who had been hired to work on the railroad, significant numbers found it hard to go back to their country and instead opted to look for jobs in America. Native Americans feared that they were taking their jobs leading to the passing of Chinese Exclusion Act to prevent more Chinese immigrants from entering the USA and promoting their return to China. Rise and Explanation of vast businesses and Corporations Carnegie incorporated new methods in the steel industry like open-hearth process with the aim of making better products. He was intelligent and controlled the entire steel industry leaving him with no competitors. He acquired much power and wealth despite coming from a humble background. By 1901, his company produced the largest percentage of the total steel in the nation (Morrow). The steel industry generally grew due to horizontal integration that involved monopoly. Industrialist John Rockefeller founded standard oil during this period, which he also acquired a near monopoly control in the American petroleum industry. To manage it as a monopoly, he used the size of his company to negotiate favorable terms and rates from the 5 Younger railroad to transport his products. Slowly, this eliminated competitors. Such a system; termed an illegal monopoly, brought the downfall of this company thus being dissolved in 1911. The explanations to monopolistic businesses were based on Charles Darwin's theory of natural selection that states that despite being a variety of organisms, there is competition for resources and only the fittest survive. The same applied to businesses during the Gilded Age that only those that could survive the market and industry pressure survived hence thriving of monopoly and phasing out of small inferior firms and companies. The monopolies also flourished due to laissez-faire since there was little or no government intervention to control the vice. The government only intervened at later stages when the situation was an extreme and not during the business operations. At this juncture, most of the management has already accumulated and invested wealth unfairly, and closure of the company does not affect them a lot. Interstate Commerce Commission was created in the USA in 1887 due to the public outcry to regulate the railroad business, which had for a long time have been unfair and dishonest. Labor Unions Their primary purpose was to organize with stakeholders such that workers had good working conditions. Thus, businesses had to comply with basic labor laws and safety regulations. The Knights of Labor was a large union which aimed at organizing all workers in all industries to form labor-management cooperative businesses. However, faced with drawbacks. The First, to be the Great Railroad Protest which occurred in 1877, led to severe industrial conflict. Transportation activities on the railroad were crippled which negatively affected the economy. Employers cut staff wages which made them attack the rail yards and caused massive destruction (Link and Link). 6 Younger The Haymarket Riot in 1886 in Chicago led to the collapse of the Knights of Labor. It too resulted in destruction of property and loss of lives as six policemen; killed when a bomb hurled at them. In 1892, Homestead Steel Strike in Pittsburgh turned violent. Armed security and workers engaged in a battle that left 12 men dead. Militia interceded to crush the strike since the union at that time was overpowered and the steel industry remained union-free till 1930's. The Pullman Strike in Chicago was about George Pullman who ran a railroad car factory in Chicago. He built a city with residential and social amenities for his workers near the factory. However, the rent rates were high which made the workers protest. Rapid Urbanization Despite it being an economic development tenet, there were increased challenges in cities like population pressure, crime and strain on the available social amenities. As the urban markets grew during the time, the growing industries favored them due to employment as well as the production of food enough to sustain the growing population. Some of the first reforms to fix the rapid urbanization were the establishment of industries in rural areas to minimize rural-urban population. The government chipped in by supporting such initiates financially through subsidies. Conclusion The Gilded Age is a great contributor to today's economic growth in America because it formed the basis of today's agricultural and industrial revolution. The Gilded Age, characterized by both positive and negative impacts, but the negative effects of corruption and racial tension have over time been rectified by different administrations to make America a better place to live 7 Younger in economically, politically and socially. Gilded Age enabled investors to make innovative and strategic moves towards economic growth which improved the international image of the nation. Works Cited Campbell, Ballard. "Comparative Perspectives on The Gilded Age and Progressive Age." The Journal of the Gilded Age and Progressive Age 1.02 (2002): 154-179. Web. Gimpel, Diane. The Transcontinental Railroad. 1st ed. Edina, Minn.: ABDO Pub. Co., 2011. P Print. Link, William A, and Susannah J-Link. The Gilded Age and Progressive Age. 1st ed. Malden, MA: Wiley-Blackwell, 2012. Print. Morrow, Ann. The Gilded Age. 1st ed. New York: Children's Press, 2007. Print. Schneirov, Richard. "Thoughts on Per iodizing The Gilded Age: Capital Accumulation, Society, and Politics, 1873-1898". The Journal of Gilded Age and Progressive Age 5. 03 (2006): 189-224. Web. Singerman, David Roth. "SCIENCE, COMMODITIES, AND CORRUPTION IN THE GILDED AGE." The Journal of the Gilded Age and Progressive Age 15.03 (2016): 278-293. Web. 8 Younger 9 AmericanLIT_TheGildedAgeD.Yo unger.docx by 12732 User FILE AMERICANLIT _T HEGILDEDAGED.YOUNGER.DOCX (25.28K) T IME SUBMIT T ED 16-MAR-2017 05:06PM WORD COUNT 2031 SUBMISSION ID 785145099 CHARACT ER COUNT 11345 1 2 3 4 awkward sent ence 5 6 7 8 9 10 awkward sent ence awkward sent ence awkward sent ence incomplet e sent ence 11 awkward sent ence 12 awkward sent ence incomplet e sent ence 13 awkward sent ence incomplet e sent ence 14 awkward sent ence awkward sent ence 15 awkward sent ence 16 past t ense 17 AmericanLIT_TheGildedAgeD.Younger.docx GRADEMARK REPORT FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS /200 Instructor PAGE 1 Comment 1 please begin your essay with a hook Comment 2 your thesis statement needs to go at the end of your introduction, af ter you've introduced and given background inf ormation f or your topic. At this point, your audience doesn't even know when the Gilded Age was Comment 3 stay away f rom second person language (talking directly to your audience) Your paper needs to be in third person only. Comment 4 what time in history? be specif ic and assume that your readers know nothing about your topic QM awkward sentence this is awkward, please consider revising it Comment 5 def ine this, what do you mean by this? PAGE 2 Comment 6 what does the civil war have to do with anything? Comment 7 def ine this Comment 8 I don't think this is the right word you mean here Comment 9 ??? Comment 10 give examples QM awkward sentence this is awkward, please consider revising it QM awkward sentence this is awkward, please consider revising it PAGE 3 QM awkward sentence this is awkward, please consider revising it QM incomplete sentence incomplete sentence Comment 11 you talk a lot around what you are actually meaning to say. Give details. Give examples. Be specif ic. So much of what you've written doesn't even make sense. QM awkward sentence this is awkward, please consider revising it Comment 12 this is all really really vague. You need to of f er up some examples in order to ground your readers or they're going to get lost. QM awkward sentence this is awkward, please consider revising it QM incomplete sentence incomplete sentence Comment 13 you keep using the word "hence" If you're going to use it, make sure you surround it in commas. Go back and read how many times you've used it and see if you could replace it with something dif f erent so that you don't sound redundant PAGE 4 QM awkward sentence this is awkward, please consider revising it QM incomplete sentence incomplete sentence Comment 14 doesn't it seem like this section should come at the beginning of the essay? PAGE 5 QM awkward sentence this is awkward, please consider revising it QM awkward sentence this is awkward, please consider revising it Comment 15 what were the ef f ects of all these things?? Why is it important to mention them and how do they f it into the purpose of your paper and support your thesis? QM awkward sentence this is awkward, please consider revising it PAGE 6 Comment 16 you need to def ine this QM past tense make sure when you're talking about something that happened in the past, you're using past tense PAGE 7 PAGE 8 Comment 17 you have a lot of inf ormation in this essay. I think you need to back up and f ocus on just a f ew key things. Your thesis statement mentions both positives and negatives during this time that contributed to building a strong nation. Choose a couple f rom each side and dig in. Give detailed inf ormation, be the expert on those couple of things, give specif ic inf ormation and explain how these things contributed to the f ormation of who we are today as a country. Because what you have now is just a list of things that happened and it's disorganized and haphazard, which makes it conf using and hard to read. let me know if you'd like help with this. :) PAGE 9 ...
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Darien Younger
Christie Beck
ENG304B
March 16, 2017
The Gilded Age
The Gilded Age was characterized by industrial and agricultural revolution, improving
the living standards of American citizens. Even though the Gilded Age is viewed by many as a
period of oppression, corruption and monopoly that controlled the economy and politics, it was
also a time of economic development and advanced technology that helped in building a strong
nation in the nineteenth century. The paper will focus on Gilded Age history, political and
economic events as well as factors that prompted the Age. There will also be a discussion on
railroad impacts, monopoly industries, widespread corruption, labor unions and the issue of
urbanization. It will later conclude that the Gilded Age is a great contributor to today's economic
growth in America.
History of the Gilded Age (1870-1900)
The famous American Literature author, Mark Twain characterized this time in history in
various ways. He brought forth a concept that the contemporary society may seem in order and
good but from the inside; there is extreme poverty, crime, corruption, and many other social
issues that affect the rich and the poor. America made significant progress during this Age which
made industrialization, foreign affairs, reconstruction, and expansion improve. After the civil

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war in America, it made attempts to become a better nation that served its people and operated its
economy efficiently.
Despite the collapse of reconstruction, the country took advantage of the ‘Manifest
Destiny’ to gain some territories like Louisiana Purchase and Mexican-American War (Campbell
154-179). This action led to an increase in immigration with people moving to more promising
and flourishing land. People also settled on the west coast which helped boost the region's
economy a great deal. Pioneers settled at the Great Plains in Louisiana and operated large
ranches. Unfortunately, this displaced the natives who were originally there but over the years;
the government has been on the forefront to resettle them and help them claim their rights. All in
all, the present citizens at the region enjoy better amenities, infrastructure, and standards of
living owing to the Gilded Age effects.
Overview of the American Economics
During the period, America's economy grew by approximately 400% with important
technological advancement, population increase, improved transportation, financial innovation
and new business practices. These strategies contributed to the economic growth with an addition
of industrial and agricultural technology. Improved machinery and new farming practices
enhanced productivity and at the same time employed many citizens hence a form of income
(Schneirov 189-224). Business communication revolutionized in 1876 after Alexander Graham's
telephone invention. Additionally, John Rockefeller applied new oil refining methods.
Expansion of infrastructure brought about new goods to the citizens. This enabled preservation
of farm to produce on transit to prevent damage hence efficiency in business practices.

2

Younger

Increased individual savings with new institutions coming up characterized the Gilded
Age. There was, therefore, an increased level of capital in the economy from whole new
extended sources. This meant that people had become more enlightened regarding personal and
business welfare since they considered the future. Financial institutions that came up during the
period enhanced financial security as well as lending and insurance services. They acted as
facilities for accumulation and dispensing of capital which fueled the American economic
growth. All this happened at a drastic rate during the Gilded Age with new forms of business
organizations and turning of competitors into partners to promote financial freedom and security.
However, the monopoly was prevalent with many mergers and acquisitions to improve business
productivity.
Overview of Political
Leaders were corrupt and took bribes during the period hence prevalent political decay
and injustices. Supporters of the leaders were offered posh governmental jobs and the qualified
candidates left out. An example was Charles Guiteau who believed that he deserved a political
appointment just because he campaigned for Garfield in the 1880 elections, despite him being a
religious leader and a lawyer. Corruption scandals increased during the Age, like the Credit
Mobilier scandal whose shady relations with Union Pacific Railroad were shielded by the
government (Singerman 278-293). The public image of government in promoting fairness and
transparency in its operations was now tainted. Other leaders and business personalities
conspired with government officials to avoid paying excise duty on imports with merchants
taking massive bribes to remain competitive in the market.

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During elections, both the republicans and democrats failed to pursue ambitious agendas
despite the issue of population pressure, immigration and environmental effects of
industrialization being a problem. Some forms of political corruption included the New York's
Tammany Hall Scandal by the Democrats who built it but with many financial injustices
involved in its construction and setting up. Farmers also formed a political party by the name
Populists in 1890's due to the rampant political injustices with the aim of redeeming the nation
from this rot. However, they were coerced by the Democrats in supporting their agenda and
populists finally faded in 1896.
Causes of the Gilded Age
There were excessive natural resources during the period that prompted investors and
other potential people in business to exploit them. These included land, water and ready market
for agricultural and industrial produce. There was a need for cheap labor which was readily
available since slavery was prevalent at the time and many immigrants of African-American
origin, Latin-America and Mexico migrated to the USA in search of jobs and better opportunities
to support their families in their native countries that were then struck by war or famine.
Technological advancement and support by the government led to investment personalities
taking advantage of the attractive business and political arena. Due to increased population, it
only meant that markets were growing and demand was increasing hence the ushering gilded
age.
Impacts of railroads on America-Transcontinental railroad-1869
The America-Transcontinental railroad was built during the Gilded Age owing to the
advanced technology and government support to developmental projects. The railroad led to fast

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and safe transportation of goods from Atlantic coast to Pacific coast. Both international and
intercontinental trade heightened after its construction, which improved the international status
of the nation. Areas in the U.S. not previously were now occupied and people began to establish
economic activities there. The railroad provided employment opportunities for the natives whose
standards of living rose due to its income. The railroad also led to the creation of standard time
zones, the growth of cities, industries and the Westward extension of America (Gimpel).
Adverse effects, however, arose after the construction of the America-Transcontinental
railroad. Many native settlers were displaced to pave the way for the railroad which affected
them psychologically even if they were compensated and relocated to new areas. As it became
easier for traders and citizens to move from one place to another, racial tensions increased
between the Native Americans and other groups of traders. Most Chinese who had been hired to
work on the railroad found it hard to go back to their country and instead opted to look for jobs
in America. Native Americans feared that they were taking their jobs leading to the passing of
Chinese Exclusion Act to prevent more Chinese immigrants from entering the USA and
promoting their return to China.
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