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PROMPT: Tell a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates
your character or helped to shape it
Never Good Enough
My fingers were sore from being prodded with pins and needles. My parents
tossed and turned due to the rambling of my sewing machine that echoed throughout the house.
The sun was peeking through my curtains as I snipped the last piece of silk thread. It was 7 a.m.
and what was only meant to take twenty minutes of ‘adding the finishing touches’ to my gown
had turned into an all-nighter. I was working on a dress for a Family, Career, and Community
Leaders of America (FCCLA) competition and everything had to be flawless.
At the awards ceremony, my heart was pounding incessantly, and I couldn’t tell
whether it was my nerves or the Redbull fueled haze I was suffering from the night before. The
announcer called my name and the word “silver” trailed off from her mouth, suddenly everything
became cloudy. My mind kept shoutin...