ENG 215 Week 9 Peer Review 3

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Week 9 Peer Review 3

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Peer Review Assignment
Due Week 9 and worth 50 points

Peer reviews should provide feedback to a peer on the criteria expected in the paper. The Week 9 Feedback Form can be downloaded from the Appendices section of the course guide by clicking the link here. Follow these instructions:

For On-ground Students:

  1. Receive a classmate’s paper from your professor.
  2. Download the Peer Review Feedback Form from the course shell.
  3. Comment on all criteria, noting strengths and / or areas for improvement on the feedback form.
  4. Provide completed Peer Review Feedback Form and classmate’s paper as directed by your professor.

Note: On-ground students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor during the class meeting in which the paper is reviewed; online students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor via the "Essay Drop off/Pick up Zone" discussion thread and Peer Review Assignment link in the course shell.

As you read a classmate’s paper, address these criteria:

  1. Identify the course, assignment, and date.
  2. Provide positive feedback, where appropriate, on the criteria.
  3. Identify areas for improvement, where appropriate, and recommend improvements.

The specific course learning outcomes associated with this assignment are:

  • Recognize the elements and correct use of a thesis statement.
  • Recognize transitional words, phrases, and sentences.
  • Identify effective sentence variety and word choice.
  • Identify positive qualities and opportunities for improvement in writing samples.
  • Analyze the rhetorical strategies of ethos, pathos, logos in writing samples and for incorporation into essays or presentations.
  • Correct grammatical and stylistic errors consistent with Standard Written English
  • Recognize how to organize ideas with transitional words, phrases, and sentences.

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Appendix C: Peer Review Feedback Form 3 Reviewer’s Name:_________________________________________ Date:_____________ Writer’s Assigned #: _______________________________________ Course:_________________________________________________ Section: ___________ Assignment 4: Persuasive Paper Part 3: Possible Disadvantages and Answers Peer reviews should provide feedback to a peer on the criteria expected in the paper. Follow these instructions: 1) Receive a classmate’s paper from the the “Essay Drop off / Pick up Zone” in Week 6. 2) Download the Peer Review Feedback Form from Blackboard. 3) Comment on all criteria, noting strengths and / or areas for improvement on the feedback form. 4) Provide completed Peer Review Feedback Form and classmate’s paper to your professor. Note: On-ground students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor during the class meeting in which the paper is reviewed; online students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor via the Assignment Tab in the course shell. Criteria Comments + Strengths 1 Included a defensible, relevant thesis statement in the first paragraph. 2 State, explain, and support the first disadvantage (economic, social, political, environmental, ethical/moral, etc.) to your solution and provide a logical answer. This should be one (1) paragraph. State, explain, and support the second disadvantage (and third if appropriate) (economic, social, political, environmental, ethical/moral, etc.) to your solution and provide a logical answer. This should be one (1) or two (2) paragraph(s). Include one or two (1-2) relevant visual and help illustrate an advantage. Use effective transitional words, phrases, and sentences. 3 4 5 6 7 8 Provide a concluding paragraph to summarize the proposed solution, its advantages, possible disadvantages, and answers to the disadvantages. Repeat or rephrase your thesis statement. Develop a coherently structured paper with an introduction, body, and conclusion. Use one (1) or more rhetorical strategy(ies) (ethos, logos, pathos) to explain claims. < Opportunities for Improvement Criteria Comments + Strengths 9 10 11 Support disadvantages and answer with at least two (2) additional quality relevant references. Use at least eight (8) total for Parts 1, 2, and 3 total. Clarity, writing mechanics, and APA formatting requirements (including in-text citations and reference page). Other < Opportunities for Improvement Running head: REARVIEW CAMERAS 1 Rearview Cameras Cassandra Douglas Strayer University Professor Amy Sloan ENG 215 18 February 2018 Rearview Cameras 2 Rearview Cameras All vehicles should be equipped with a rearview camera to prevent rollover accidents which may lead to death. According to a report by USA today in 2010, there were more than 210 deaths and 15,000 injuries, with 31% of these accidents being children under the age of 5 and 26% of the accidents being adults over the age of 70. (Woodard, C. 2014). I have on numerous occasions ran over a curb, hit an object too small to see from my rearview or side mirrors, and hit a trash can or two. Backing out of my driveway I can see what is above the trunk of my car, but I can’t see below it. With so many small children in our neighborhood owning a vehicle equipped with a rearview camera would remove the fear of having such a tragic accident. There have been several accidental deaths of small children being run over by an automobile because the driver didn’t see the child behind the car. In Denver, Colorado a father accidentally backs over his 2-yr old son in his SUV. In Covington, Washington, an 18-month old girl was backed over by her Aunt in a Ford F-150. These types of accidents occur mainly by family members. They aren’t aware of children finding their way behind a vehicle and a child that small is impulsive. Cameron Gulbransen was a 2-yr old who died in 2002 from an accidental back over. In 2008 Congress passed a bill called the Cameron Gulbransen Kids Transportation Safety Act of 2008. In it, the Federal Motor Vehicle Safety Standard was to be revised to eliminate blind spots behind vehicles. The National Highway Traffic Safety Administration (NHTSA) has made it mandatory that by 2018 all vehicles need to be equipped with a rearview camera. Parking lots are another place where you must be very watchful. Too many times I have seen children in a hurry to get to the car, slip away from their mother and almost be hit by a driver who was backing out of a parking space. I have grandchildren between the ages of 1 and Rearview Cameras 3 3, and the odds of one of them running out behind a car are great especially when they get excited about going for a ride in the car. Older adults (the elderly) are subject to being back over because they move at a slower pace and some need assistance in getting out of the way of a vehicle. Limited visibility makes it difficult to determine what is directly behind you when trying to back a vehicle out of a driveway, a parking lot or even maneuvering a car in reverse. One reason for these accidents is not able to see from blind spots. A blind spot is an area viewed behind where a driver can’t see. (fig 1). SUVs, vans, and trucks have a larger blind zone than a midsize vehicle. fig 1 Consumer report has measured the blind zones for various categories of vehicles, and these are the ranges for each category: • Sedans 12 feet to 24 feet • Minivans 15 feet to 26 feet • Sports Utility Vehicles 13 feet to 29 feet Rearview Cameras • 4 Pickup trucks 23 feet to 35 feet (Weisbaum, H. 2007) A vehicle equipped with a rearview camera takes away the limited visibility. Some of the issues with having a rearview camera are inclement weather, night vision, and the camera view blockage. These are a few issues I have experienced with having a rearview camera. When it rains, visibility is blurred, and at night visibility may not be clear because of lighting on the street. Just imagine if it’s snowing and how hard it would be to keep a rear camera clean of debris for it to operate correctly. Water and dirt can produce limited visibility especially when a camera is positioned in an unobtrusive position on the vehicle and having to adjust your mirrors due to night vision (the glare of lights from another car can be a pain especially when you’ve been driving for long periods of time) can be frustrating. Vehicles equipped with a proximity sensor and camera aren’t considered to reduce many accidents since drivers tended to rely on the sensor more than the camera, and the sensor used when trying to park to avoid hitting any objects behind you. Other obstacles include sunlight that shines right on the lens interfering with the driver's view or shadows. Deaths from back over accidents are tragic. Small children and older people are the main victims of these accidents. Parking lots and driveways are where most of these accidents occur. Limited visibility, blind spots hinder a driver from seeing obstacles which may cause serious consequences. The Cameron Gulbransen Kid’s Transportation Safety Act of 2008 brought to light the need for having rearview cameras, and the National Highway Transportation Safety Administration requires all vehicles under 10,000 pounds to have backup cameras by the year 2018. (Nelson, 2014). Some advantages to having a rearview camera installed in a vehicle or even buying a vehicle that includes a rearview camera are when it comes to traffic and parking you have an Rearview Cameras 5 advantage in being able to see what is behind you. Parallel parking can be a pain, and a rearview camera allows you to see the distance between the sidewalk and the space in which you must park. A few automobile makers have installed video display in the actual rearview mirror. These types of mirror afford drivers a clear view of what is behind them when they go to back up their vehicles. Having this type of mirror is advantageous in helping ensure people don’t hit anything that’s in their blind spot as well as smaller people and objects that they can’t easily see from their rearview mirrors. (Carztune, 2014). Auto-dimming is a feature that operates using both the reflective abilities of the unit itself and through a computer chip and sensor embedded in the device. Reflected headlights are dimmed automatically, making sure that nothing is distracting to the driver - even in intense situations. (ThomasNetNews, 2015) . Photo Source: rav4world.com Obstruction of the view in larger vehicles is due to the larger headrest, and because of this conventional reflective mirrors in most SUVs and minivans are being replaced by LCD Rearview Cameras 6 mirrors. Another advantage is some cars come equipped with navigation monitors or dash displays. These monitors or displays are large enough for someone to see without having to strain their eyes. I like the fact that I have a camera which built into my navigation system and as soon as I put my vehicle in reverse the camera comes on. I use the camera primarily for when I am parking or in a parking lot since I believe this is where most backup incidents occur, but still, I use my mirrors to check and make sure there aren’t any obstacles in my way when I am backing up. Given the disadvantages and advantages of a rearview camera, I feel they are beneficial to have in every vehicle as it gives the driver a better sense of safety if rearview cameras used properly. Rearview Cameras 7 Reference Car News. (2014). Benefits of rear view camera mirrors. Retrieved from http://www.carztune.com/benefits-of-rear-view-camera-mirrors/ Insurance Institute for Highway Safety. (2014). Preventing Driveway Tragedies, Rear cameras help drivers see behind them. Status report, Vol. 49, No. 2. Retrieved from http://www.iihs.org/iihs/news/desktopnews/preventing-driveway-tragedies-rear-camerashelp-drivers-see-behind-them. Nelson, G. (2014). U.S. finalizes plan to phase in rearview camera mandate, starting in 2016. Retrieved from http://www.autonews.com/article/20140331/OEM11/140339979/u.s.finalizes-plan-to-phase-in-rearview-camera-mandate-starting-in-2016 ThomasNetNews. (2015). Auto-dimming backup camera system enhances on the road safety. Regional business news, p1-1. Woodyard, C. (2014). NHTSA to require backup cameras on all vehicles. USA Today. Retrieved from https://www.usatoday.com/story/money/cars/2014/03/31/nhtsa-rear-viewcameras/7114531/
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Appendix C: Peer Review Feedback Form 3
Reviewer’s Name:_________________________________________

Date:_____________

Writer’s Assigned #: _______________________________________
Course:_________________________________________________

Section: ___________

Assignment 4: Persuasive Paper Part 3: Possible Disadvantages and Answers
Peer reviews should provide feedback to a peer on the criteria expected in the paper. Follow these
instructions:
1) Receive a classmate’s paper from the “Essay Drop off / Pick up Zone” in Week 6.
2) Download the Peer Review Feedback Form from Blackboard.
3) Comment on all criteria, noting strengths and / or areas for improv...


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