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Almazrua1 Tamim Almazrua Ms:Collins ENC1102 1st of April 2018 Stop Unsafe Abortion “Unsafe abortion is one of the most famous problems that we are facing in the meantime and that cause mortality and morbidity around world. However, there are many definitions of unsafe abortion and the most important one is an operation that unlicensed practitioners or individuals illegally perform abortions. Also, when adult ladies use improper tools to miscarriage their babies, that would be considered as unsafe abortion. According to Lisa Hadded, approximately 40% of pregnant women around the world would take severe medicine such as herbal combination or start to drink some dangerous liquor s to get rid of their babies and that would be considered as unsafe abortion. In fact, that there are some women that have survived the unsafe abortion, but they would high percentage of having reproductive problems that may last for long time (WHO). For that reason, the need of having reproductive health care is a must to decrees the severe side effects of unsafe abortion that have been the main problem in the world throughout the years. Due to having several problems of unsafe abortion, women should prevent these problems before it happens. There are several ways to prevent the pregnancy such as birth control, pills and men wearing condoms. Although, there are many organizations that support safe abortion such as Planned Parenthood, this organization provides health care to the ladies who need it, however this organization has faced finical issues which made difficult for Almazrua2 them to provide medical services. In fact, in each five women in age under 25, two ladies would risk their life to do unsafe abortion (Richard). However there some organizations who does not support abortion at all such as Pro-Life Action League, this organization believes that pregnant women should never give up their babies in any reason, but people have their own choice and they need be more responsible of what they are going to do with their body that why I think providing qualified hospitals that would do safe abortion would ne the best solution. Moreover, the gender’s majority who attend to USF is female, which is 55% of the total populace. Hence, USF should help the organizations by funding them to reduce the unsafe abortion, and best way to reinforce Planned Parenthood and IPAS is to collect donations and support them in every way so they can easily provide reproductive health care for more and more women.” “There are some ladies who are lucky and survive hazardous abortion, but whoever get through unsafe abortion and live would have some permanent reproductive issues. Referring to data base of US National Library of Medicine conducts that unsafe abortion provokes 70 thousands maternal mortalities yearly. In another words, unsafe abortion is parlous because it might cause either death or permeant sever diseases. Additionally, ladies who had done unsafe abortion due to getting rid of their babies, might go through a lot in their lives, and that would affect their personal and health life because of pernicious complications (Haddad). For example, the major dangerous entanglements occur due to having risky fetus removal are abnormal vaginal bleeding, stomach torment, contamination, besides these symptoms need to be focused by the organization and provide healthcare. Nowadays, there are around 45% of the women around the world have problems with their ability to reproductive due to the huge difficulty in assessing it, which implies most ladies who have complexities after experiencing unsafe abortion cannot get enough medical attention to save from death(WHO). According to world health Almazrua3 organization (WHO) “The legal requirement for doctors and other health-care personnel to report cases of women who have undergone abortion, delays care and increases the risks to women’s health and lives” (WHO). In other words, that women do not get the enough reproductive health, even though it’s offered. The lack of reproductive health makes women wait for a long time to get their turn which will make the women’s situation getting worse. ” “The best way to get rid of hazardous effects of unsafe abortion that requires to make huge improvement on reproductive health. According Elizabieth believes “when safe abortion is difficult to access, many women go to private practitioners to preform unsafe and illegal abortion” (Ahman, 19). Which means, that the way to get to services in reproductive health providers is hard or barley possible which makes that there is no choices for the females except go to unqualified doctors and do unsafe abortion. Therefore, the best solution for this issue to establish several legal abortion centers who are educated and know what are they doing. With all what has been said, the best way to make a huge development in reproductive health, public healthcare must be provided to all women to get a healthier abortion without paying the hospital fees nor the meds and online classes to make women aware of the abortion’s consequences. In that way, most of the huge problems would be avoided, and unsafe abortion would be decreasing by the time. Referring to David Grimes thinks that “Making abortion legal, safe, and accessible does not appreciably increase demand. Instead, the principal effect is shifting previously clandestine, unsafe procedures to legal and safe ones. Hence, governments need not worry that the costs of making abortion safe will overburden the health-care infrastructure” (Grimes, 1900). Moreover, WHO believes that technology such as vacuum aspiration and Almazrua4 dilation would help would make huge different in the idea of the abortion. All these way would aid in spreading availability of safe abortion. Overall, supporting reproductive health will make noticeable decreasing in death rates and morbidities which all have been caused by unsafe abortion.” “In conclusion, So many people would have different opinions, but if we all think about what is the best for the human being, we would find out that make safe abortion centers which are qualified would be the best solution because women would have their own choice without harming themselves.” Almazrua5 Works Cited Ahman, Elisabeth. "New estimates and trends regarding unsafe abortion mortality." International Journal of Gynecology & Obstetrics 115.2 (2011): 121-26. Web. 16 Nov. 2017. Haddad, Lisa B, and Nawal M Nour. “Unsafe Abortion: Unnecessary Maternal Mortality.” Reviews in Obstetrics and Gynecology 2.2 (2009): 122–126. Print. Grimes, David A., et al. "Unsafe abortion: the preventable pandemic." The Lancet 368.9550 (2006): 1908-1919. News, Rankings and Analysis on Politics, Education, Healthcare and More." U.S. News & World Report. U.S. News & World Report, n.d. Web. 5 Nov. 2017. “Preventing unsafe abortion.” World Health Organization, World Health Organization, Sept. 2017, www.who.int/mediacentre/factsheets/fs388/en/. The paper about Unsafe abortion here in this document I will upload the rubric my professor comments and 1st the rubric: Formal Essay: You will compose an argumentative essay of 1200-1400 words that (a) educates an audience of non-engaged stakeholders about the issue or topic; (b) engages the audience by convincing them that they should care about this issue or topic; and (c) empowers the audience to take action in some way. By the conclusion of the essay, the audience should feel both engaged with the topic and empowered to act. 2nd: The professor comments: Endnote: While you topic is about unsafe abortions in general, I think you need to narrow down how exactly you want to write an argumentative paper about it. The topic itself unanimously agree that unsafe abortions should be stopped so you cannot make an argument about a topic with no opposing side. Doing any type of medical procedure without the correct tools or license would bring about disastrous results. The best way to right this type of paper is to pick a side you are most agreeable with on the subject of abortion: either Planned Parenthood/Pro-Choice or Pro-Life. This will help you organize the paper to fit best with the overall assignment requirements.
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Tamim Almazrua
Ms:Collins
ENC1102
1st of April 2018
“Pro-choice Abortion”
Abortion is one of the largest controversies of all times. Abortion can be defined as “The
termination of pregnancy through removing an embryo or a fetus from the uterus before being
capable of normal growth” (McCurdy). A woman usually decides to do this if she is financially
unable to raise the child, if the pregnancy is unplanned, or if she is too young. In other cases, a
woman chooses abortion due to a problem with the pregnancy that places either her or the child
she is carrying at risk. There are, on average, about six million pregnancies occurring each year
in the US. Shockingly, over half of those pregnancies are unplanned. “Data indicates that over
40% of all women in the world will terminate a pregnancy through abortion at some point in
their reproductive lives" (Jones & Jenna). A lot of people believe that it is immoral as well as
even consider it to murder and should be banned; while others consider it a woman’s choice and
others should not decide for her. It is apparent that abortion is and will continue to be an ongoing
fight for centuries to come. Even though this one of the biggest political and moral debates of my
lifetime, I believe that women have the right to have complete control over fertility and
pregnancy.
There are five different types of procedures that are used for abortion; vacuum aspiration
and dilation and curettage, medical abortions, dilation, and evacuation, intact dilation and
extraction and induction abortion. “Typically, once a pregnancy has past 7 weeks, it can be
aborted using only surgical methods because second-trimester abortions are likely to carry

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greater risks compared to first-trimester abortions" (Jones & Jenna). Medical abortion makes use
of medicine, where a woman takes either a series of pills or a single pill to terminate ...


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