the first file given is the outline. First step would be to edit the outline. Thesis Ok, but what is O'Connor's point in showing us that? Why is a good man hard to find? Para 1 I have no idea what you're saying in your topic sentence. Please clarify. Apart from that, your evidence and analysis are reasonably sound. Para 2 Again, not sure what you're saying in your topic sentence--who is the "he" you're referring to? Sam? I'm not sure what your analysis is saying here either. Try to simplify your phrasing. Para 3 Again, not sure what you're saying in your topic sentence. Remember, each paragraph should relate to the paragraph that came before. How are these linked? How does the issue of freedom relate to your other points? And are we to expect that a child should be allowed the kind of freedom you identify? The quote refers to the children, not to the grandmother. Your conclusion needs to be a restatement of your thesis and evidence. This is the comments that were left on the outline so please review it and edit the outline. After the outline is edited write a essay with these instructions, 1000 words, or roughly four to five double-spaced pages, including:
1) an introductory paragraph that contains a strong, clear, argumentative thesis. If I commented that your thesis wasn't strong or clear enough on your outline, this is the time to think about how to improve it. Remember, you must take a position on an issue of the text you selected. If your thesis is mainly observational, you need to revise it.
2) A minimum of three body paragraphs, with a minimum of one piece of evidence per paragraph. It is highly advisable, however, to use more than three pieces of evidence. This may mean more than four paragraphs, or more than one quote per paragraph--the more content of this kind, the more persuasive your argument.
3) A conclusion. Remember, conclusion must briefly restate your thesis and evidence, and should ideally provide important context for your argument--this is your opportunity to tell how or why the particular argument you made matters in the grand scheme of things.
Additionally, the essay must be in MLA format. Consult your handbook and make double-sure that your formatting is correct. Format is easy to verify, so verify it and keep the easy point. You will be graded on this for every assignment from now on.
Please provide a separate works cited page, also in MLA format. There will be only one entry, of course, but it is good practice for the future. Use the original links I gave you for the readings to cite.
Also, make sure that you use the vericite feature to check for plagiarism before you submit your essay to me. I will be using it to check, and if I find any evidence of it, you will be immediately dropped from the class and reported to the college administration, at a minimum. I take this very seriously. You will do better with a bad paper than a plagiarized one in this class. Use vericite.
The file below is the outline you did before that needs to be updated
This is the link to the short story: http://www.boyd.k12.ky.us/userfiles/447/Classes/28...