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Its actually suppose to be a recording but instead of recording you are writing the answer for each question. when doing this assignment please label the answer as step 1 step 2 and step 3 when answering each step or question. and that will be it and if you have any questions ask me and ill try to assist

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Step 1:Record spoken comments to the instructor about where your writing sounds "pleasing" and why. Also comment on where you could improve rhythm and fluency of your essay. Step 2: Revise your essay to achieve greater fluency, paying close attention to the natural cadences and rhythms of your voice. Step 3: Record spoken comments to the instructor about the changes you made and how they improved the essay. Also discuss how you feel about sentence fluency. Essay. Essay It was another day after school as I had finished some homework and changed into some fresh clothes. I walk downstairs into the lively kitchen and dining room area and sat on the wooden table next to the kitchen’s barstool area as my mom and dad were discussing whether we should go out or stay in for dinner. As I was sitting there, I would just be casually listening and butting into their conversations at random moments while munching on some ice-cream. I remember complaining about my braces, since I had just gotten them and the second adjustment was giving me a headache, when my mom brought up my friends who had also gotten braces either before or after me. At the mention of school the topic soon turned to the school’s organization, grades, and of course “other options.” As we discussed how poorly the school had been doing and how my grades were only going to keep slowly dropping, my mom suddenly remembered looking at the Keystone school’s site and all the benefits and how it was a well-organized, college prep kind of school. I had never done anything like this and of course at first the thought of being able to do work at my own pace and how cool it would be to work from home came to mind. However, the more real the situation became the more I started to worry. Questions like “Am I really going to be put through this?” or “I’m going to leave everything and have to work by myself all day every day?” I even began to worry about missing the whole “high school experience.” Of course, being the person I am and not wanting to go against my parent’s positive opinions and ideals of how this would help me in terms of my grades and future. I guess I too came off as excited and ecstatic to be doing something so different because of events that happened later. The thing that really set me off was one of my best friend crying their eyes out at the news near the end of the school year. I’m not very social through text messages because I’d rather talk to someone in person and I knew that she would be too busy during high school afterwards because of her busy schedule that I soon learned would make things quite difficult. At the time, I tried to think of all the positives and realized why my parents were so ready to try this… because this could be the best opportunity for me. The pros tended to outweigh all my cons so I decided I might as well give it a good try since I would have to in the end. Through my realization, I became slightly more motivated and ready to take on the challenge ...
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Tutor went the extra mile to help me with this essay. Citations were a bit shaky but I appreciated how well he handled APA styles and how ok he was to change them even though I didnt specify. Got a B+ which is believable and acceptable.

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