Instructions: Please review and identify the strengths and weaknesses of this student letter.
Write one more paragraph addressing the advice you would give George to improve his entire letter before giving this to Mr. Bellini.
225 3rd St. Apt. 2
Santa Cruz, CA 95060
Mr. James Bellini, Manager
SunSource Dry Cleaning
2600 Paseo Padre Drive
Milpitas, CA 95035
April 17, 2017
Dear Mr. Bellini,
I am in a tough situation and I hope you could help me out. I am a student at SJSU, majoring in Environmental Studies, and in one of my classes I was given an assignment to observe in a business that advertises as a "green" business.
I saw in your advertisement in the Web that you are a green dry cleaning business. That’s awesome! Can I come and observe your operation on May 16th? I would only stay for one hour because I have to drive all the way from Santa Cruz to your facility in Milpitas and back, and I have a 3:00 pm class at San Jose State so as you can see I am in a hurry and so I will not stay long. My assignment is to assess the environmental impact of your operation, and the professor wants a written report that will also be presented to a panel of experts in the field.
Thanks in advance for opening your business to my request.
See you soon,