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As you read these sentences, remember that it is not just vocabulary and sentence structure that determine the quality of writing. Think about which sentence makes you want to read more. Which sentence is more interesting? Who might the audience be for each sentence?
1. Which writing is better?
A. An ancient, dented and rusted baby blue Ford pickup with five mangy mutts in the bed chugged into the yard.
B. A late 60s model Ford pickup truck with several dogs riding in the back pulled into the driveway.
Which sentence did you choose? Explain why you think it is better.
2. Which writing is better?
A. The author was a well-known local character infamous for engaging in minor violence after having drunk too much.
B. The writer was a bum with a bad reputation and a tendency to knock back a few before heading out to look for trouble.
Which sentence did you choose and why? Explain why you think it is better.
3. Which writing is better?
A. After spending the afternoon at the beach, Mary came home with what appeared to be a third degree burn on her back.
B. Mary’s back was beet-red, swollen and oozing from the sunburn she got today.
Which sentence did you choose and why? Explain why you think it is better.
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