I need someone to make corrections for this English Research paper

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corrections for this paper are labeled of what to do is just up to you to make it sound better and make it an (A) paper. The paper is already written and labeled of what has to be corrected. It seems to be a lot of repetition and have to use synonyms for some things. 


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Os 1 EO Prof. P English II November 10, 2015 "The Ethics of Living Jim Crow" For centuries,[comma after introductory material] there have been incidents of prejudice and unfairness towards African Americans and their human civil rights; [Start a new sentence.]rights which have been violated by some laws, like the obsolete Jim Crow Laws, or laws that are enforced improperly by those who are in law enforcement. Racism on the basis of skin color was and is still prevalent in these[Improper word choice] United States. Laws in the past, such as the outdated Jim Crow Laws, discriminated against African Americans, just as the Stop and Frisk law enforced in many states today discriminates against blacks and leads to instances[missing word] police brutality. The U.S. Constitution states that "all men are created equal," but that was not the case in [missing word] Jim Crow period.[Mention when this time period was.] The majority of black people in that time got mistreated and chased. There was separation of blacks from whites. In the ethics of Jim Crow [punctuation needed]Richard Wright mentions “We moved from Arkansas to Mississippi. Here we had the good fortune not to live close to white neighborhoods. There were black churches and black preachers; there Os 2 were black schools and black teachers; black groceries and black clerks.” (Richard Wright, pg.161). This shows that the Jim Crow laws were made to keep blacks far from white people. The whites required black folks to segregate themselves from white public areas and other places that black people weren’t allowed. The public areas that blacks were separated from whites were transportation, schools, restaurants and restrooms. Only white people were allowed to vote in election but not Negros.[Rearrange the order of this sentence.] Things were very segregated in the Jim Crow Laws period between both races since there were no equal rights in humanity. [Compare and contrast the Jim Crow and Stop and Frisk laws.]The Stop and Frisk law can be defined as a strict rule that by any circumstances a police officer has the absolute authority to search any person that may be or seems under suspicion. This strict law has led to a controversy of why police officer respond different depending on the person’s ethnicity. It has been huge problem in society as a law since many police officers have target more then any other race; African Americans. This has led to the belief that [commas for necessary pauses in the sentence]since there are more crimes committed by African American ethnicity law enforcement are under further suspicion of those who are African Americans than those who are Caucasians. For example in an article[Mention the specific name of the article] about the Stop and Frisk law there is a statement that in order for an officer to stop an individual and search them, the police officer will need a logical explanation for detaining them and conducting an investigation. Therefore a person has to commit a crime or an illegal action in order for an investigation to take place. This is also part of the Fourth Amendment rights in the Constitution. The majority of police officers have failed to follow the rules Os 3 of the Stop and Frisk law, which have produced controversy in most African Americans since they are at the highest percentage rate of most detained and searched individuals than any other race.[Consider giving a specific example of an instance when police officers failed to follow these rules.] In the essay of “The Ethics of Living” the main character Richard Wright had a difficult time like any other black person throughout [Improper word choice] racial discrimination. His experiences can relate in a way on how police officers persecute African Americans when they are under suspicion. Police officers are often more doubtful of an African American compared to other race. Which creates a debate on why, police officers often arrest Negros more than other ethnicities. The U.S. Bill of Rights in the Fourth Amendment states “The right of the people to be secure in their persons, houses, papers, and effects, against unreasonable searches and seizures, shall not be violated, and no warrants shall issue, but upon probable cause, supported by oath or affirmation, and particularly describing the place to be searched, and the persons or things to be seized,” (U.S. Bill rights). This shows that is a violation of the Fourth Amendment when an officer does not have a reasonable suspicion or probable cause to detain someone unless they have been either seen committing a crime or suspected of misconduct. Therefore[comma after transitional statement] it gives black people the right to walk away from law enforcement officials at any period during questioning if they haven’t committed any crime. Police officers are not allowed to persecute and stop random black people for questioning based on their skin color or ethnicity. In a study conducted on law enforcement officers it was found that there are more restrains and frisks on Negros compared to those who are Caucasians.[Don’t Os 4 repeat details] In the study[Be specific about what study you are referring to.] it was mentioned that around 82% of the searches made were African Americans compared which Caucasians were only 10% investigated. ( ) This issue of the Stop and Frisk Law has a correlation on the story “The Ethics of Living by Jim Crow”. “Richard is in a white neighborhood after dark, and therefore he is stopped by a policeman as they search him and find nothing incriminating so, they discharge him and give a warning of not repeating his behavior over.” (The Ethics of Living by Jim Crow).[Explain this correlation more in your own words.] In a report it was mentioned that in the year 2011 law enforcement officers stopped individuals in NY for suspicion. [Mention where all statistics come from.]This issue has an increase of about 500 percent growth from the year 2000. Most of those people that were detained by police that year were blameless of any criminal action. The people stopped were also African Americans, which proves police officers are at higher suspicion of Negros then white people. ( ) There is a high rate on[wrong preposition choice] police brutally which is that officers are using excessive force against blacks and ending up killing them instead of investigating the situation first. There was a police brutality that was listed as one of the worst cases in a real life on police violence. The victim was a man named Abner Louima. He is an African American who was a target by a Caucasian police officer and was sexually and physical hurt. The officer mention that by mistake he thought Louima had punched him in the head. The police persecuted and grabbed Louima then took him to a bathroom which there the officer shoved a broomstick in the victim and put it on his face then committed another malicious action. The officer that committed this brutality and Os 5 racial discrimination admitted in court that all he wanted to do is cause an embarrassment to Louima. The police made an excuse that after someone supposedly punched him in the head then he thought Louima was the one who did it and ended up persecuting him. (The Abner Louima Case, 10 Years Later) Racial discrimination is[Stay in the past tense] been looked as how different races can mistreat others as because of color, and social status. Racial discrimination has been seen over the years and to affect African Americans the most.[Rearrange the order of this sentence] The question is always going to be why, is that racial discrimination hasn’t improved at all over time. This racial behavior has been part of The Stop and frisk law and police brutality that some police officers have made violently and unnecessary moves.[This is too repetitive. Give some different examples instead of repeating the same thing.] In[Does this quote start here?] "The Ethics of Living Jim Crow," when Richard had another job in a porter at clothing store. Richard's white boss and the son of the boss took advantage and hit a black female for not paying the rent that was owned.”(Richard Wright, pg.164). This example shows a similar event, as when the officer shoved a stick on Abner Louimas’s[apostrophe for ownership] face, which shows racial discrimination that some whites have on black people. This is similar to how Richard Wrights[spelling] was also constantly picked on because of his skin color[punctuation needed] therefore was mistreated because of segregation of whites and blacks. White people violated many of black people’s[apostrophe for ownership] civil rights. Racism is an action that is described as a negative response towards certain humans, which is based on skin tone and other contributing factor that judges and Os 6 characterizes the individual. The Stop and Frisk Law affects African Americans then most races as shown in the case of Abner Louima just as other similar incidents that have happen as seen on the daily news.[This is too much summary. Give more specific examples!] The Jim Crow laws have been a great example of the differences among differences in whites and blacks, which separated them; in public places just as the Stop and Frisk Law also cause controversy on the rate among blacks that get stopped. That has led to police brutality.[Fragment] Segregation has always existed till today this issue is still being done but in the ways that shows[subject/verb agreement] up more when a police gets confronted with a colored person. The solution to the problems between blacks and whites will only improve in society when each of us will learn to collaborate and treat each other with understandable and equal rights. As[spelling] one time there was[missing word] famous person that wrote an inspiring quote that expressed equal rights for every person no matter skin color, class status and other judgmental things as the quote said “I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character”. (Martin Luther King)[page number?] Os 7 Works Cited Brown, O., J.R. (2013). The New York City stop-and- frisk law: America's war against black males rages on. Western Journal of Black Studies, 37(4), 258-271. "Stop and Frisk to Police Brutality." Interview by Ken Thompson. VIN News, 2 Sept. 2013. Web. 29 Oct. 2015. . Wright, Richard. "The Ethics of Living Jim Crow: An Autobiographical Sketch." The Ethics of Living Jim Crow: By Richard Wright. New York: Viking, 1937. N. page. American Stuff: Work from the Federal. Web. 30 Oct. 2015.
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