Paris Attacks -- Edit my work!!

timer Asked: Nov 20th, 2015

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please edit my work down below. Make sure that all my commas and apostrophes are in the correct spot. You can reword anything that sounds better for you to make this work excellent. I need this back in 20 mins finished!

November 13, 2015 is an indispensable day for millions of people to remember. Screaming’s of terror were heard on the streets of Paris, tears dripping down one’s cheek and blood dripping from bodies continuously. Many families were left with deep sorrow over the deliberate killings in Paris. Innocent lives were taken away, leaving the world in shock.

The Paris shootings lead up to relative issues to be discussed with global citizens and politicians in this problematic world. Children are dying of hunger, unimpeachable lives are being lost, religious hatred rising and terrorism increasing by day by day.

War has troubled our citizens in this world. Some don’t have a choice to stop this this issue and have to relocate to another safer location to live their life. Refugees are a prime example of people afflicted by war. Thousands of refugees are fleeing their families to safer locations. Many have a stand against accepting and welcoming refugees to Canada and some determine it as a benefit to us.

Refugees can bring a positive and a beneficial impact to our country. Canada’s economy can create more jobs, which can benefit unemployed people. Immigrants can bring and develop different skills that can help our working environment. They can increase the competition in business, leaving companies and businesses more money. Migrant crisis is increasing in a large amount. We should step up and help them. They are humans like us… They should have the right to live in a safe country like us!

This world needs more peace, love and unity. Let’s stop sending our soldiers to countries to fight, but to send books and pencils. Education can bring us unity rather than to fight. Don’t forget to remember about those in Afghanistan, Palestine, Iraq, Syria, Pakistan and other countries too. The media never refers nor cares about those in poor countries ( most often middle eastern countries). 

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