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I'm glad to see that you have a strong interest in this subject, but, again, I encourage you to narrow your topic considerble. Your topid is so broad that most of your claims are overly vague and general. You do not really have a satisfactory thesis for this paper, and your research is vague. Your claims are overly general, and you do not cite your sources. You need to cite your source for each claim.
As I said from the outet, I suggest that you rethink this paper. If you email me a new thesis that is narrower in scope, I can critique it and help you make it into something that is genuinely arguable and something for which you can provide specific evidence to suport.

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Jill Steiner, Oct 13 at 7:14am
You also need to proofread your paper. You have numerous grammatical errors, which you need to corrrect. See my specific feedback in the essay attached above. Jill Steiner, Oct 13 at 7:16am
Your peer reviews are precise and thoughtful. You make constructive suggestions to both of your peers.
You should try to bemore precise in your own writing.
Jill Steiner, Oct 13 at 7:18am
Going back to your draft, I should also mention that your argument is quite redundant. You repeat the same observations about contrasting ways of looking at the wars several times. If your claims were more precise, you would be developing a more finely reasoned argument.

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CAUSES OF WORLD WAR I AND WORLD WAR II WORLD WAR I AND WORLD WAR II LINWOOD D. MASON III LIB/495 INSTRUCTOR JILL STEINER OCTOBER 12, 2017 THESIS STATEMENT IMPERIALISM MILITARISM NATIONALISM THE CAUSES OF WORLD WAR I, THE KEY PARTICIPANTS, AND THE IMPACTS WORLD WAR I TRANSPIRED BETWEEN THE YEAR 1914 AND THE YEAR 1918 WHICH LEFT OVER 20 MILLION PEOPLE DEAD AND MASSIVE DESTRUCTION OF PROPERTY. I CLAIM THAT THE MAJOR CAUSES OF WORLD WAR I WERE PLANNED AMONG THEM BEING THE FORMATION OF MUTUAL DEFENSE ALLIANCES. OVER TIME, MANY NATIONS THROUGHOUT EUROPE FORMED VARIOUS MUTUAL DEFENSE AGREEMENTS WHICH PREPARED THEM FOR WAR. THESE AGREEMENTS IMPLIED THAT THE ATTACK ON ONE COUNTRY WOULD MAKE THE ALLIED COUNTRIES TO DEFEND THEM (OLUSOGA, 2015). TWO ALLIANCES WERE FORMED WHICH WERE THE TRIPLE ALLIANCE AND THE TRIPLE ENTENTE. THE CAUSES OF WORLD WAR II, THE KEY PARTICIPANTS, AND THE IMPACTS THE WORLD WAR II STARTED IN 1939 WHEN GERMANY INVADED POLAND LEADING TO FRANCE AND BRITAIN DECLARING WAR ON GERMANY. ALTHOUGH I ACKNOWLEDGE THAT GERMANY TRIGGERED THE WAR BY INVADING POLAND, I CLAIM THAT THE CAUSES OF THE WORLD WAR II WERE PRE-DETERMINED BY A VARIETY OF FACTORS. I CLAIM THAT THE MAJOR FACTOR THAT PREDETERMINED THE WORLD WAR II WAS THE TREATY OF VERSAILLES. THE TREAT ENDED THE WORLD WAR I BUT SINCE GERMANY WAS THE LOSER DURING THE WAR, THE TREATY FORCED GERMANY TO ACCEPT THE DAMAGES OF THE WAR SUFFERED BY THE ALLIES (OLUSOGA, 2015). CONCLUSION REFERENCES • BLACK, HELEN K., AND WILLIAM H. THOMPSON. "A WAR WITHIN A WAR: A WORLD WAR II BUFFALO SOLDIER'S STORY." JOURNAL OF MEN'S STUDIES 20.1 (2012): 32-46. • C N TRUEMAN "CAUSES OF WORLD WAR ONE", N.D., WWW.HISTORYLEARNINGSITE.CO.UK. • “CAUSES OF WORLD WAR I”, N.D., HTTP://RESEARCH.OMICSGROUP.ORG/INDEX.PHP/CAUSES_OF_WORLD_WAR_I • “CAUSES OF WORLD WAR II”, N.D., HTTP://DAILYHISTORY.ORG/CAUSES_OF_WORLD_WAR_II_TOP_TEN_BOOKLIST • FINNEY, PATRICK. REMEMBERING THE ROAD TO WORLD WAR TWO: INTERNATIONAL HISTORY, NATIONAL IDENTITY, COLLECTIVE MEMORY. ROUTLEDGE, 2010. EBOOK COLLECTION (EBSCOHOST) • "NATIONAL WWII MEMORIAL." NATIONAL WWII MEMORIAL., N.D. HTTP://WWW.WWIIMEMORIAL.COM • NYE JR, J. S., & WELCH, D. A. (2016). UNDERSTANDING GLOBAL CONFLICT AND COOPERATION: AN INTRODUCTION TO THEORY AND HISTORY. PEARSON. • OLUSOGA, D. (2015). THE WORLD'S WAR: FORGOTTEN SOLDIERS OF THE EMPIRE. • “THE ORIGINS OF WWI”, N.D., HTTP://WWW.HISTORYONTHENET.COM/AUTHENTICHISTORY/1914-1920/1-OVERVIEW/1-ORIGINS/ • “WORLD WAR I ORIGINS”, 2015, HTTP://WWW.OXFORDBIBLIOGRAPHIES.COM/VIEW/DOCUMENT/OBO-9780199791279/OBO-9780199791279-0006.XML • “WORLD WAR TWO – CAUSES”, 2014, HTTP://WWW.HISTORYONTHENET.COM/WORLD-WAR-TWO-CAUSES/ • “10 EVENTS THAT LED TO WORLD WAR I”, N.D., HTTP://HISTORYLISTS.ORG/EVENTS/10-EVENTS-THAT-LED-TO-WORLD-WAR-I.HTML
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CAUSES OF WORLD WAR I AND
WORLD WAR II
WORLD WAR I AND WORLD WAR II
LINWOOD D. MASON III
LIB/495
INSTRUCTOR JILL STEINER
OCTOBER 12, 2017

THESIS STATEMENT
World war 1 and 11 define history, and judge the
present political economic and social inclinations of
world nations. However, the actual causes of both
wars alludes to tension created within allied nations,
and the obvious territorial competition of lesser
regions, of Asia and Africa. Such indispensable
facts were the main reasons for war on cause to
formation of current world superpowers, and the
obvious difference in socio-economic and political
ideologies of the world.

IMPERIALISM

MILITARISM
Aspect of militarism defines the analogy of
nations expressing their military strength.
Ideally, during the onset of both wars, nations
adopted extrinsic pursuits for showing their
military might. However, that triggered nations
that felt under threat to call on their allies to
help protect them against such advances.
Militarism was one of the main causes of war

NATIONALISM
The belief of one’s nation is
supreme and superior over other
nations expressed the nationalism
that ran in countries like Britain,
Germany, and Russia (ThoughtCo.,
2017).

THE CAUSES OF WORLD WAR I, THE KEY
PARTICIPANTS, AND THE IMPACTS
World war I transpired between the year 1914 and the year 1918 which left over 20 million
people dead and massive destruction of property. I claim that the major causes of world war I were
planned among them being the formation of mutual def...


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