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Writer’s Name ___________________
Reader’s Name______________________
Peer Review Worksheet: English 101
Writers: Post your essay as a Microsoft Word document—the file name should have your name,
essay name (Essay 3), and a file extension of .doc or .docx, which means a Microsoft Word
document.
Readers: Download two students’ papers and THIS document. Be sure to read through the entire
essay-and THIS peer review workshop sheet-before you begin the critique. Answer the following
questions as thoroughly as possible based on your reading of the essay. Type your critique
(answers to the questions below) into this document. Make sure to give the writer as much
honest feedback as you can; remember that your response may make the difference between a
weak paper and a strong one.
Next, click reply to the writers’ posts and upload THIS completed document for the writers to
review during their revisions. REMEMBER, YOU WILL NEED TO REVIEW TWO
DIFFERENT ESSAYS.
1. Write the thesis here:
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2. Is the thesis direct? Does it appear at the end of the first paragraph?
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3. Does the thesis effectively answer the question in the prompt? How could the writer improve
thesis focus, if necessary?
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4. Do you get a clear sense what the paragraphs are about through the topic sentences? Write the
strongest topic sentence here and state why you think it is strong.
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5. Write the weakest topic sentence here and state why you think it is weak.
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6. Regarding the MLA, check the parenthetical citations in the text and the “Works Cited” page.
Do these conform to the MLA’s exact specifications? Can you mark the paper accordingly?
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7. Does the conclusion provide closure, restate the thesis, and summarize the paper? How could
the writer make it more effective?
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8. Finally, write any suggestions you may have to strengthen the paper that was not covered
above.
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In “No Speak English,” Cisnero’s broaches the subject of linguistics within the context of translation and social judgments. Now, I use the term translation to address how the phrase “no speak English” is used in two ways: first, it is a coping mechanism for the character that is utilized to avoid contact with the outside world, but second, it is also a request: She literally does not want her son to speak English because it is outside the realm of what she believes is her “home” tongue. Therefore, the texts begs specific questions about diasporic communities and peoples who must re-conceptualize their ideas about home within the scope of new places and spaces (including language) that are unfamiliar to them. Cisnero is then not advocating either regression into older views of culture or society or assimilation; she is pointing out the problems with the reality of the situation: one can never go backward, and forward presents them with a new set of cultural and social constraints.
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