Looking for someone to revise a 5 paragraph essay about Of mice and men for me

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I have the essay that I have written w the notes my teacher wrote for me. I got a C- and need someone to revise it so I can get a better grade. Its about loneliness in the book of mice and men and I picked 3 characters and talked about how each one is lonely.

Of Mice & Men Essay Rubric: Final Essay ▌Name_________________________ Thesis/Intro x 2 1 • Minimally addresses or does not address required aspects of intro paragraph for this assignment • Fails to create a relevant thesis or lacks a thesis statement 2 • Partially addresses required aspects of intro paragraph for this assignment • Weak thesis statement. It may be too factual or too vague for this assignment 3 • Opening statement provides title, author, & context • Thesis needs more clarity, focus, or other revisions • Clear overview of strong sub-points 4 • Opening statement provides title, author, & solid context • Arguable thesis statement • Clear overview of strong sub-points 5 • Opening statement provides title, author, & insightful context • Sophisticated, arguable thesis statement • Excellent overview of insightful sub-points 2 • Weak topic sentences • Provides minimal and/or irrelevant evidence to develop the topic appropriate to audience • Quotations and/or MLA citations do not clearly support argument or are incorrectly integrated into the essay 3 • Superficial topic sentences • Provides limited and/or superficial evidence to develop the topic appropriate to audience • 2 Quotations per body paragraph & MLA citations are present and provide relevant support 4 • Solid topic sentences that refer back to the thesis • Develops the topic using concrete details/examples, quotes, and analysis that are that are pertinent and substantial • Smooth integration of 2 apt quotations per body paragraph & MLA citations 5 • Sophisticated topic sentences that refer back to the thesis • Skillfully develops the topic using concrete details/examples, quotes, and analysis that are relevant and convincing • Excellent use/fluid integration of 2 apt quotations per body paragraph & MLA citations 2 • Choice, explanation, and analysis of the book’s details/quotes shows limited or flawed reading of topic or text 3 • Choice, explanation, and analysis of the book’s details/quotes demonstrate superficial reading of text 4 • Choice, explanation, and analysis of the book’s details and quotes demonstrate proficient and solid reading of text 5 • Choice, explanation, and analysis of the book’s details and quotes demonstrate insightful, advanced reading of the text 2 • Uses limited or inappropriate transition/linking words, phrases, and clauses 3 • Creates some cohesion and clarifies relationships through transition/linking words, phrases, and clauses within or between paragraphs and sections 4 • Creates cohesion and clarifies relationships through transition/linking words, phrases, and clauses within or between paragraphs and sections 5 • Creates sophisticated cohesion and clarifies relationships through skillful use of transition/linking words, phrases, and clauses within or between paragraphs and sections 2 • Conclusion/s provide a sense of closure, but may weakly articulate significance of the topic 3 • Provides conclusion/s which repetitively or partially follows from and supports information 4 • Provides conclusion/s that follows from and supports information or explanation presented, articulating significance of the topic 5 • Provides meaningful and reflective conclusion/s that follows from and supports information or explanation presented, articulating significance of the topic 2 • Uses limited and/or repetitive sentence structure • Contains numerous errors in conventions which cause confusion • Inadequately uses academic and domainspecific vocabulary clearly appropriate for the audience and purpose 3 • Uses mostly correct and some varied sentence structure • Contains some errors in conventions which may cause confusion • Usually uses academic and domainspecific vocabulary clearly appropriate for the audience and purpose 4 • Uses correct and varied sentence structure • Contains few, minor errors in conventions • Competently uses academic and domain-specific vocabulary clearly appropriate for the audience and purpose 5 • Uses purposeful and varied sentence structure • Contains minimal to no errors in conventions (gram, punct, spell, capitalization) • Strategically uses academic and domainspecific vocabulary clearly appropriate for the audience and purpose Development x 3 1 •Confusing or problematic topic sentences • Provides inaccurate, little, or no evidence to support topic • Does not use or cite quotations Reading x 3 1 • Choice, explanation, and analysis of the book’s details/quotes indicate incomplete reading or understanding of text Cohesion/Transitions 1 • Uses few to no transition/linking words, phrases, or clauses Conclusion Sentences/Paragraph 1 • Inadequate conclusion/s or omits conclusion/s Language x 2 1 • Lacks sentence mastery (e.g., fragments/run-ons) • Contains serious and pervasive errors in conventions • Fails to use academic and domain-specific vocabulary clearly appropriate for the audience and purpose Total Points Possible: 100 Overall Grade: A B C D F

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