Peer Review Worksheet Name of Reader: Name of Writer: Read your neighbor’s paper while doing the tasks below. Remember the habits of mind and suspend judgement when reading. Keep the five moves in mind when reading and think about how the writer is bringing each of those moves into play within their essay. Don’t think too hard. Noticing/Pointing: Which words, phrases, or passages somehow strike you? Are there any passages that stick out to you? Write the most prominent ones here. Center of Gravity: Which part of the essay somehow seems important, resonant, or generative? This could be what was intended to be the main point or it could be a section that holds more weight than others. Sometimes the center of gravity is a seemingly minor detail or example. 5 Moves: List some of the authors repetitions, binaries, or anomalies that you notice within the piece. Does the author succeed in expanding upon these parts? Summary: Give the paper a creative title based on the content: first a phrase, then one word. What is almost said? What do you want to hear more about? Essay 1: Visual Analysis Rubric Requirements Formatted according to MLA essay style and includes a Works Cited page Is at least 1,000 words in length and includes the image in the essay Begins by introducing the text (image), author, and context surrounding the piece to an audience who is not familiar with the work Includes a detailed and objective summary of the text to be analyzed (200 words) Transitions smoothly from summary to analysis and from analysis to interpretation Applies Notice & Focus to identify interesting, significant, or strange elements of the image and rank these (500 words) Focuses on one or two important details and examines the binaries/patterns they are implicated in Answers the question, “so what?” to exposes possible implications, hidden meanings, and key metaphors Presents some possible interpretations of the text Concludes by forwarding a plausible interpretive context and provides support (evidence) for this interpretation (300 words) Overall Score: Keeping in mind the rubric for this essay, what are they achieving so far? Likewise, what do they still need to include in their essay? Are there any major grammatical mistakes, typos, or formatting issues? Additional comments: Writing and Rhetoric 1510 14 September 2018 Visual Analysis: The Wolf and Goose Drawing In 2016, Omar Rayyan, illustrated a painting. The background focuses on one big tree, and he shades more trees as if they were farther down, and along the edge that they go down is brightened white by the daylight. On the right side of the tree, he shades it darker which applies that it is the entrance of a heavily wooded area. In front of this scenery, stands a goose and a wolf. The goose is dressed in a hat with a feather on feather on top and a silk and cotton cover. The wolf is dressed in a big fancy coat with a cape over it. He has a sword hooked to his leg and is holding his feather hat out, as he is bowing to the goose. The wolf’s face is close to the goose’s neck and he has a deviant grin across his face. Whereas, the goose is still holding great posture, her neck is drawn away and her eye is red. Painting by Omar Rayyan , 2016 This painting contains many tiny but significant details, followed with questions of the intent. The goose and the wolf are both clothed in similar outfits, it is the kind of attire that you would expect royalty to be dressed in. Are they royalty? Are they going to an event together? Is the goose royalty and the wolf a knight? The goose is wearing a feathered hat, a pearl necklace, and a cover-up that is gold with white. The wolf is dressed in a fancy heavy coat with a dark blue cape around his neck. He has a bowtie on his leg along with a sword, and he is holding his feather out behind him, as if he was bowing in respect of the goose. The background is lightened by the sunlight on the wolf’s side and darkened by the shadows of trees on the gooses side. Why is it lighter behind the wolf who looks like he is going to hurt the goose? Why is it darker on the side that is scared rather than it being behind who is on the evil and good side? Is the goose the antagonist? The positions of the animals represent a formality. The goose is standing at attention as if she contains the power to do so, and the wolf is bowing at her as if he was respecting the position that she held. Even though they are positioned in a formality, their faces tell a different story. The goose’s eye is red. Is she filled with fear? Is she angry? Whereas, the wolf has a sly look on his face, as if he was secretly hiding his internal feelings. Why is he smiling so close to her neck? Along with their facial gestures, a closer look at their body language will demonstrate to you that the goose is being resistant with his manners. She has red alerted eyes and her neck slightly cocked back. The wolf is persistent on his actions towards the goose even though she is elegantly drawn herself back from him, but he still is attempting to push his mouth closer to her neck. Why is the goose still standing there? Is she expected to respond to him that way? Why is he bowing at her? In the animal kingdom, a big ordeal is predator versus prey. If the assumption of predator versus prey with the two animals of a goose and a wolf, you would have the goose as the prey and the wolf as the predator. When the picture is observed, the wolf is submitted to the goose, as if he was the prey and she was the predator. Why is it flipped? Is the goose or wolf unaware, that the roles are inverted? In an animal hierarchy the roles are reversed in this painting. Although, the roles are reversed the smile on his face raises the question of his motive. What is the wolf wanting out of the goose? Despite the fact, the dark shading is behind the goose and the white shading is behind the wolf. It’s safe to assume from all the other evidence that the wolf is the antagonist. The major indicator is the goose’s body’s reaction to the wolf bowing at her feet. If someone was not afraid of another person’s gestures, their body would respond accordingly. They would be laughing or have a more relaxed nonverbal communication. That is not the case in this scenario. The goose’s eye is red, and her beck is held upright and back, as if she was pulling herself back away from the situation. The goose still maintains a professional posture but since she’s dressed as if she is from a Victorian era, that is how woman responded to any kind of man. Whether or not, they held a royal position, women did not have many rights so therefore, it was common for a woman to maintain good moral standings with a man. No matter what the state of affairs concerned. The wolf has a sword attached to his leg. It is presented in the painting but if his coat was down, his weapon would be concealed. That is important to realized that the author purposely exposed his weapon. The wolf is a predator and a goose would be his prey. The picture has the wolf doing a curtesy to a goose. Which conflicts with the ideal of the animal kingdom food chain. He may have to be respectful to the goose but him exposing his weapon proves that he knows the correct order in the hierarchy they should be. Wolfs are naturally known to be hunters and killers. The wolf sees killing the goose as an instinct, that to survive he needs to be the hunter, it is in his blood to do so. To know why the wolf wants to kill the goose is nearly impossible, there are many possibilities. He could want to eat her for his food, he could want to over throw her rule, or he could want to because he feels a certain way towards her. No matter why he wants to kill her, does not change the fact that he is the predator and she is the prey. It is natural for him to want to superior over her, want to hunt the goose. Works Cited Omar Rayyan, 2016. Painting.
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